Mouna Hezbri
Mouna Hezbri
Mouna Hezbri
Dissertation
Academic Master
Domain: English Language and Letters
Field: Translation and Translation Studies
Prepared by: Miss Mouna HEZBRI
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Dedication
Acknowledgments
First and for most I would like to express my profound and deep gratitude to my
supervisor, whom I respect deeply, Dr. Jamel Goui for his countless hours of reflecting,
reading, encouraging, and most of all, his enduring patience and unremitting help
throughout the entire process.
I wish to thank all the members of the board of examiners Mr. Djelloul BOURAHLA
and Mr. Mohammed CHOUCHANI who accepted to examine my dissertation.
Special thanks must goes to my teacher Mr. NOAH Mohamed for encouraging and
supporting my path in English studies, from the beginning and till the very end.
I would like to thank Miss KHELEF Embarka whom if it were not for hers three years
writing expression teaching; none part of this dissertation would be fulfilled.
My thanks must be registered over and again to Mr. ANAD Ahmed Khalil and all my
teachers in El-Oued University.
Also, I would like to thank all my teachers of translation in Kasdi Merbah University,
for their patience and guidance.
Last and not least, I would like to express my deepest and profound gratitude to my
parents, whom I love the most, for their support and encouragement, all along this path.
Finally, I hope this modest work will rise to meet the level of the anticipated
expectations.
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List of Tables
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Table III.3.1.3.2 .Samples of the Loss in the translated names and races
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Table III.3.2.2.5. Samples of the Gained Features in the translated names and races
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Table of Contents
Dedication..........i
Aknowldgements.........ii
List of Symbols...iii
List of Figures.iv
Table of Conetnts...v
Introduction..2
Part one: The Theoretical Part
Chapter .I: Loss and Gain in the Translation from English into Arabic
I.1. Introduction..................................................................................................................11
I.2. The Concept of Translation theory..12
I.2.1. Equivalence and equivalent effects in translation theory.12
I.2.2.Functional Translation Theories....13
I.3. The Concept of Translation Loss.....14
I.3.1.Types of translation loss....15
I.3.1.1. Avertable Translation Loss....15
I.3.1.2. Inevitable Translation Loss....................................................................................15
I.3.2. Causes of Translation Loss.......................................................................................15
I.3.2. 1. The Linguistic Differences between English and Arabic ........16
I.3.2.2. The Cultural Differences between English and Arabic...................................... ..20
I.3.2.3.The Religious Differences between English and Arabic.................................... ...22
I.3.2.4. Translators Deficiency......22
I.3.3. Strategies to Reduce the Loss in Translation ...........................................................23
I.4. The Concept of Translation Gain ................................................................................24
I.4.1. Types of Gain ...........................................................................................................25
I.4.1.1. Enriching (TL).......25
I.4.1.2. Enriching (TT).......................................................................................................25
I.4.2. Causes of Gain .........................................................................................................26
I.4.3. Strategies to Enhance the Gain ................................................................................28
I.5.Conclusion ...29
Chapter II. The difficulties of Translating Fiction Fantasy from English into Arabic.
II.1.Introduction.........32
II.2. The Concept of Fantasy Fiction.................................................................................32
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Bibliography...79
Abstract
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Introduction
Introduction
After centuries of its contribution and participation in translating thousands of English,
French, Persian and Greek books by which many new genres, like Shakespeares
and
Molieres drama (1962 ,), Grimm brothers children literature, Edgar Alan Poes short
stories and Agatha Kristis and Conan Doyles crime fictionetc, have been introduced to
Arabic literary canon. However, the Arabic translation is receding recently, and only few
selected books are translated into the Arabic reader including Dan Brown Science Fiction and
Paulo Coelhos works. And due to the fact that the literary translation and particularly the
fiction translation is the most predominant translated genre in the world (Venuti, 1995). The
fact that only few fiction novels are translated into Arabic, as only 10.000 books has been
translated into Arabic since three decades from 1970 to 2000 which presents the same number
of the translated books into the Spanish per a year (2015 ). Which opens an endless
series of questions about the reasons behind the current receding of Arabic translation
generally and Fantasy translated texts particularly. Furthermore, unlike in the past the quality
of the recently translated books is poor and considered as part of translationese (Ghazala,
2008). Therefore, this research has been conducted for investigating the reasons behind this
declining of the Ar. literary translation via investigating the loss and gain issue in translation
studies.
This dissertation is an attempt to investigate the phenomena of loss and gain in translating the
English fantasy narration into Arabic. It will seek to interrogate to what extent the
discrepancies and differences between (TL) and (SL) will affect the rate of these phenomena.
Additionally, it will argue that these differences are not to be considered as unbreakable
barriers, the loss is not to be considered as a flaw and the significance of both gain and the
translator competency in enriching and strengthening the (TT). Via displaying a comparative
analytical investigation to the linguistic and extralinguistic differences and to the English
fantasy narration components, this study come to establish awareness among the literary
translator about these phenomena and its likely occurred eras along with suggesting some
technical solutions to reduce the former and increase the latter.
The difficulties in rendering texts, from one language to another, rise from the discrepancies
of their origins and their linguistic divergent systems that create linguistic and extralinguistic
barriers against the process of producing an equivalent (TT). Equivalence and equivalent
effect cannot be achieved in translation because the text loses some of its characteristics while
translating it between the asymmetrical (SL) and (TL) linguistic communities. Thus, a
comprehensible adequate translation cannot be achieved; unless, by betraying the original via
decoding then encoding the message of the (ST) in ways that conforms to the (TL) both
linguistic system and extralinguistic conventions. Additionally, these difficulties vary
according to the translated text type, as it is highly expected in the expressive texts and low in
the informative texts.
Namely, the literary text is the most affected one, as these lost characteristics, which
originates from the translator inability in overcoming these discrepancies, weakens its
function and aesthetic values. However, the human desire to explore and learn about other
peoples conventions, customs, languages and culture make building an independent
discipline with universal principals and rules the main goal of the translation theories.
Eventually, these theories seek methods and strategies to overcome these difficulties; in order
to, enhance the quality of the translated text and decrease its flaws by focusing on the main
issues and the problems that hinder the translator in rendering a complete identical version of
(TT). Accordingly, theorists proposes strategies and techniques to overwhelm these
difficulties via overcoming the differences between the linguistic speech communities which
contributes in making the translation one of the most important mean of cultural and scientific
exchange in the world.
Yet, since texts are not only group of words that join together in sentences and paragraphs
that linguistically related but also collection of human experiences, the translation fails in
producing an equivalent (TTs). Because its main objective was producing an identical
grammatical and syntactical copy of the (ST) (i.e. the linguistic perspective of the (ST) is the
main concern in the translation process). Consequently, the translated texts lost their
meanings, values, functions and aesthetic aspects which make most of the theorists give up on
what Newmark so-called A perfect translation ,particularly, in translating the highly
expressive literary texts who considers them as untranslatable texts.
As the time goes by, the translation releases itself from the applied linguistics bounds by
giving away the old methods and static linguistic procedures of translation, and by applying
the findings of the others linguistic disciplines; like, sociolinguistics, discourse analysis along
with the communicative theories. As result, the translators focus not only on the (TT)
linguistic aspects, but also pay attention to its indented effect, background, purpose, content.
Accordingly, the translation flourishes and overcome most of those difficulties including the
As result, a dull and lifeless story has been introduced to the Arabic reader that lacks the
literary perspectives and functions.
Statement of the Problem:
Because literary texts reflect the whole society experience and their ways of living, that is
direct to this particular society in the first place, rendering them into different society with
different conventions will produce an inevitable loss. Which will reduces the value of the text;
while, gaining some extra values is just an illusion.
Literature Review:
Basing on the assumption that the meaning of the message is the property of the linguistic
structure of the original, Some theorists claim that the translation is just an attempt at solving
impossible task (Baker, 1998, p. 273) where the translator is either clinging too closely to
the original at the expense of the taste and language (ibid,p.274) of her/his or clinging too
closely to her/his specificity on the expense of the original. Therefore, they assume that the
loss is an avoidable outcome in the process of translation, and every translation entails loss of
some kind. Because there is no way in conveying the same message of the (ST) into (TT); let
alone, its impact if both (TL) and (SL) do not originate from the same language Family (AsSafi, 2011). However, they assume that it is only possible if the tow languages are living the
same experience. Additionally, they go further in classifying the highly expressive texts as
untranslatable texts. Thus, according to these theories producing a complete replica of English
(ST) in Arabic (TT) is impossible because they do not belong to the same language family.
And they live different facts from one another. Additionally, they go further in claiming that
the gain is just an illusion which cannot be met in the process of translation (Sallis, 2002). But
the history says the contrary, as the Arabs did translate from not only the languages which
belong to the Semitic family tree, but also the Indo-European languages family tree. And, it
proved its efficiency all the time. Furthermore, even if (TL) and (SL) are belonging to the
same family the many version of one work in one language proves that even in within the
same origins languages a complete replica cannot be achieved. Thus, even though the fact
that loss and gain are controlled with the speech communities language system and their
human living experience; it is the translator efficiency, decisions and choices which determine
the amount of the lost or the earned characteristics in (TT).
who have been ignorant of these phenomena because there is no single theory about it
dependently; although, it is an integral part in every translation process. This dissertation is an
attempt to shed the light on the fact of the loss and gain in translation from English into
Arabic in translation of The Fellowship of the Ring. This paper is divided into theoretical
and practical parts: two chapters in the former and third one in the later.
In the first chapter a general and complete overview about the loss and gain in translation
phenomena has been provided where an investigation about the nature, reasons, effects, and
resolutions about these phenomena has been introduced together with an illustrative examples
and explanation to each title.
Similarly, an analytical study about the English fiction fantasy literature has been held in the
second chapter by providing an overview about the English fiction fantasy including
definitions, characteristics and components, as well as; emphasizing the main difficulties that
hinder the translator in translating this type of texts and proposing some solutions in order to
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overcome these difficulties together with illustrative examples. Both, chapters examples are
taken from well-known novels and shorts stories of both English and Arabic.
And, by applying the findings of the theoretical part a critical analysis study to the Arabic
translated version of the The Lord of the Rings: The Fellowship of the Ring by J.R.R
Tolkien, is held in the second part of this dissertation. By analysing some translated patterns
then comparing it with its (ST) counterparts in order to learn to what extent the translator
succeed in rendering the characteristics of (ST) in (TT). Mainly, the focus will be on
extracting the loss and gain aspects within the (TT). And, for concluding this dissertation a
conclusion to sum up all the discussed points in the three chapters; in addition, to some
recommendations to deal with loss and gain when translating literary English fantasy texts
Arabic will be proposed.
Part One:
The Theoretical Part.
Chapter I.
Loss and Gain in Translation
from English into Arabic.
I.1. Introduction:
Despite their differences, translation theories have been seeking the same goal which is:
providing the translator with translating techniques and strategies that enable him/her to
produce a fluent (TT). A (TT) that suits both the linguistic and the cultural conventions of
(TL), and it carries the flavor of the (ST). However, this is not an easy task to be fulfilled with
discrepancies between Arabic and English as two asymmetrical languages that originate from
different language families. On this basic, the translator will be forced to sacrifice some of the
(ST) features in order to produce readable and comprehensible (TT). Consequently, the (TT)
suffers different kinds of loss to achieve such text which places the translator faithfulness in
question. However, a high competent translator, who has superb control of his/her first
language, s/he will take advantage of these asymmetrical linguistic discrepancies by not only
overcoming it but also investing it in strengthening and enriching his/her translations instead.
Notably, the phenomena of loss and gain are debated implicitly in every translation that aims
at achieving an equivalence and equivalent effect of the (ST), yet up until now there is no
independent theory of loss and gain (Basnett, 2005).
Apparently, there are missing elements from any (ST) in its (TT) either on its abstract or
concrete level which referrers to with loss, yet there can be notice extra values in it also. The
lack of the (ST) elements or the loss in translation occurs due to the linguistic and
extralinguistic differences between the (SL) and (TL) mainly. These linguistic discrepancies
hinder the process of the translation because each language has its ways in arranging their
signs in writing and speech which creates barriers against expressing the same concepts in
different system. Additionally, this loss can touch the semantic level of the text due to the
absence some of the (SL) bound concepts in the (TL), as their connotative and referential
meaning are either absence or different in (TL). Also, the loss occurs due to the extralinguistic
discrepancies, including the cultural and religious discrepancies between these languages
which hinder the translating process. Assumedly, the extralinguistic factors are the major
reason behind the incapability of producing a complete replica of the (ST). Because rendering
them into the different (TL) culture and religion considered as impertinence to its crests and
conventions. Therefore, the translator ought to eliminate most of these elements and adopt
them into the (TT) eventually. Last and not least, the amount of loss is the translator
responsibility in the first place because it is his/her choices which produce the final version of
the (TT), and the less the loss occurs the more values the text earns. Still, although a complete
replica of the (ST) is not achievable positive and extra gained values can be tackled in (TT).
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Evidently, the many versions in one language of one work proves the possibility of the gain in
translation, as each version has an extra value on its analogue, and even (ST).Thus
strengthening the aesthetic function and values of the (ST) in (TT) is reachable efferent
languages. Both loss and gain are interrelated phenomena in the process of the translation and
dealing with them needs an awareness and acknowledgement of the target and the source
language in addition to the strategies, methods and techniques to reduce the former and
enhance the latter.
In the purpose of shedding light on these issues and proposing solutions to deal with these
phenomena; a theoretical comparative study between English and Arabic will be held in this
chapter by displaying the main linguistic and extralinguistic differences of both languages and
identifying both phenomena thoroughly.
reader towards the writer in translation process (Ibid), Sourcerers claim that faithful
translation means producing (TT) that resembles the (ST), exactly, by applying specific
translation methods like literal and word-for-word in translating it. Because following and
imitating (ST) closely will preserve all of its elements and transmits them into (TT).
Additionally, they argue that the core of translation is to manifest (SL) peculiarities which
contributes in enriching (TL) literary canon and produces tolerance and acceptance among
speech communities (Venuti, 1995). By contrast, Targeteers claim that translators primer
focus is to produce an understandable cohesive text which conforms to both the linguistic and
cultural aspects of (TL) by rendering and molding the message of the (ST) into the (TL)
repertoire. However, none of these theories could achieve perfect translation which leads into
the emergence of new theories that sought more systematic procedures in translation
(Munday, 2011).
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presenting two alternative grades to translation formal and dynamic equivalence which
combined various translation methods and strategies translator can resort to meet his/her
goals. Formal and dynamic equivalence is build on the principal of equivalent effect where
the first priority of translators is the intended effect of (ST) message then comes the content
and the form in the second place and their degrees varied according to the nature of the
message, author intention, translator proxy and the intended audience. Namely, formal
equivalence focuses on both the content and the form of the message; he assimilates it with
gloss translation that aims at producing literally and culturally as close as the form and
content of the original allowed. On contrast, dynamic equivalence aims at naturalizing the
message by accommodating it with the target cultures behavioral mode. Eventually, many
theorists follow the path of Nida in the equivalent effect principals by introducing more
divisions to translation grades like, grammatical equivalence, textual equivalence, and
pragmatic equivalence (Baker, 1992)
Unlike the pre-theories, these theories see translation as purposeful activity with
communicative purposes that aims at producing (TT) with the same function as (ST).
To start with, Katharina Reiss text typology theory concludes that it is the original text type
which imposes the way in which translator should translate, as s/he uses plain prose method
with informative texts , identifying method with expressive texts, adapting method with
operative texts and supplementary method with audio-visual texts (As-Safi, 2011).
Apparently, deducing the type of (ST) by extracting the characteristics of both the used
language and nature of the message gives translator clear and complete image about it which
helps him in replication of its function in (TT).
Translation action theory; on the other hand, was proposed by Holz-Mnttri basing on the
notion of communication and translation action; it aims at providing a model and guidelines
to wide range of translation situation (Munday, 2011, p. 77). This theory sees translation as
product-oriented and purpose-driven human interaction and considers translating as
communicative process that its role change according to the (ST) author, translator and (TT)
receiver. And it is the task of translator to decide which genre or form that is functionally
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appropriate in the target culture to make an intercultural transfer by his translational action
(As-Safi, 2011).
Eventually, by bearing in mind the genre, author and (TT) receivers; as well as,
the cultural aspects in the process of translation will decrease the possibility of losing both
characteristics and effect of the (ST) in (TT).
Lastly, Hans Vermeer Skopos theory strengthens the both previous theories by providing
translator with blanch card to translate (TT) dynamically according to the (ST) requirements.
He states that there is no only one translation to a given text because translation methods
translation varies according to the client and the receiver of (TT). Since, the translated text
directed to specific culture for serving and meeting particular purposes translator is oblige to
naturalize his text with what suit the TL culture (Munday, 2011). As matter of fact, Skopos
theory can be considered as tool of enriching and reducing loss in translation.
On the whole, these theories consider translation as communicative process with intended
purposes of serving (TC) conventions that aims at rendering a complete human experience to
the others communities.
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The previous example shows different sort of mistakes in (TT). At first, the translator fails in
producing the correct equivalence to both walking shadow and player by translating the
former as "" instead of " " and the latter as instead of " ;" as well as, the
addition of the verb ""which does not exist in the (ST). Next, the loss of the prosodic
features of (ST) including rhymes and sound effect that weakens its aesthetic and destroys its
expressive function and genre. In short, the avertable loss in (TT) is the result of translators
ignorance and incompetency. (ibid)
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determines people intellectual and shapes their way of thinking. Thus various and numerous
speaking, linguistic, individual and cultural differences will take place among different speech
communities (Armstrong, 2005) .Consequently, the rate of loss increases, and it is the role of
translator to create neutral position of all these differences either by introducing them to one
another, or reducing and excluding their possibilities by imprinting them within the (TL)
culture canons, taboos, ideologies or codes. On these bases, one can categorize the reasons of
translation loss into four main categories:
from English into Arabic or vice versa since English has twelve tenses and moods of time
reference; while, Arabic has only three (McCarus, Mory, & Snider, 1969). For example,
translator had no choice but to render present progressive into simple present in
Ar.(TT).Additionally, the asymmetrical in part of speech, especially the case of Arabic
cognate object which does not exist in English, can be tough to deal with without resorting to
some alternatives like using different noun or adding adverb of manner.(As-Safi, 2011)
By contrast, phonological loss do not affect the intended message both writer or translator
wants to convey because each language has its own way of articulating and producing
phonemes, even if they belong to the same language family. Still, the possibility of loss on
this level is high and can affect the impact of the original; especially, if the message is part of
rhythmic, prosodic features or rhetorical features of texts like poetry, jokes or songs. The
failing in meeting the prosodic and the phonemic features of the original will produce a text
with weak auditory appealing effect on the reader and hearers. (James, Sandor, & Ian, 2002)
Example:
ST.
TT.
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flaws in English texts. Additionally, English tendency of using vulgar, colloquial, informal
language can cause problem while translating into Arabic because Arabic writing is
characterized with high formality in choosing words and sentences, and rendering informal
units into formal one in (TT) will cause loss. For example, Arabic translator will render both
sentences (1) Oberon: I know not (kagawa,2010,p. 76) and (2) Megan: I dont know
(ibid, p. 222) into " " / " ; " the Arabic sentence can never show the different in
position and the degree of politeness between the two characters, as the first character is one
with high manners and etiquette while the second one is just an average person. Eventually,
metaphors, similes, alliterations, anaphoraetc are considered to be challenge to translator;
especially, when dealing with literary texts as the less loss in (TT) the more successful
translation will be.
Another level which the failing in rendering it precisely will cause considerable loss refers to
as texture loss. Texture is the defining characteristics of text which grantee that the text hangs
together both linguistically and conceptually it realizes in cohesion, coherence and
thematisation (Hatim & Mason, 1990). Cohesion and coherence within the text can be seen in
the use of conjunctions, referring expressions, substations. Arabic texts do not use the Wa
as mean of joining the chunks and sequence of the ideas excessively; as well as, not using
substations or referring expression do not affect the value of the texts as the writer can repeat
the same word in more than one sentence within one paragraph. While English language
considers the over use of And as dull writing that hard to be understand.
Example:
ST. . "
)19 " (.
TT.The stream of people and the queues of the wooden carriages pleased
me. The door of graves yard was like an old friend to me. The grave
attracted me with its dignified and secluded structure, its introverted
mystery, its high headstones, and how my father honored it.
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Notably, the number of the ands has been reduced in (TT) by replacing some of them with
different connectors to avoid producing text with dull style. Even though, translator can
reduce the number of ands in (TT) this is not a blanch card to always modifies them as
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sometimes they have a certain aesthetic function that cannot be achieved unless he render
them like they are.
Eventually, any loss on the previous levels leads to what so called semantic loss which can be
categorized lexical semantic loss on textual semantic loss .to begin with, textual semantic
results from the loss of the previous loss levels because any loss on any level will cause loss
the meaning of the original. Still, any translation entails loss of semantic content particularly
when dealing with idioms, figurative meaning, generative and specific meaning, and special
formulas (Nida &Taber, 1982). Next lexical semantic loss refers to the incomplete conveying
of the connotative or the referential meaning of words because words acquire their meaning
through the frequent use in specific context within particular language (, 2007). Therefore,
Shrek the Ogre English child know is not""Arab child know and""connotative
meaning is not the same in English, as Arabs consider it as negative thing due to their people
voodoo practices while English men depict it in pleasant way due to the reputation of magic
in their fairytales and superstition; accordingly, translator must find way to convey that word
either to magic, voodoo or black magic. Generally, translator resort to explanatory or gloss
translation to compensate on this type of loss.
Example:
ST. ... . "
)19 "(.
TT. The grave visiting seasons were one of my happiest days. We got
ready for it in the evening by preparing pastry and dates while the maid
walked ahead of us with the basket of mercy [1].
(Maddah, 2012, p. 38)
The number (1) next to the basket of mercy is indication to foot notes which translator adds
in order to explain the cultural connotation of the concept though the basket of mercy/ "
" are synonyms. Also, there is a semantic loss in (TT), as pastry does not has the exact
referential meaning of ""in Arab culture ; moreover, the word evening is inadequate time
reference to""because it is too general, and it would be better if translate it with night
instead. Lastly, because Arab and English live in completely different environments of
asymmetrical conventions and beliefs; the lack of equivalence will take place eventually
causing inevitable; uncompensated and common semantic loss (As-Safi, 2011).
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Next, the modified loss results from replacing the (SC) expression by culturally equivalent
(TC) expression. This loss includes the following sub- hierarchy of loss: loss of proverbs,
loss of honorifics (i.e. male-female/ male-male addressee forms) and loss of the
environmental cultural expression (ibid). For example, the message of the (ST) has been
successfully reproduced in the (TT), as by translating the, as by translating the environmental
cultural expression this news warmed my heart by . However, there is
still a loss of the attitude and mode of thinking of (ST). Likewise, although replacing the
English proverb Between Scylla and Charybids by the Arabic proverb "
"( Ghazala, 2008, p. 142) conveys the indeed massage the mood of the source was lost in
the (TT), as the image of the sea rocks the English proverb convey is different from the hot
unpleasant image of the extreme heat and the fire in the Arabic proverb. Still, by producing
such loss the translator will avoid a more serious loss by translating such expression literally.
Lastly, the complete loss is the loss of figurative verbal signs that may sole be of prime
pertinence to the (SL) people, and they occur only to cultural similes and idioms (Al-Masri,
2009). By explicing the Ar.similie " " by record ledger in the lost do not
affect the source message but the similarity between the image and the action. As the The
Metwali Gate is a famous arc in Egypt that the liberation army had crossed someday, and the
Egyption used it to mock the people who themselves big while in fact they are nothing. thus,
the English counter part fails in making a similare sarcastic impact, as there is no way they
can extract the image unless if they are aware of the facts of this similie (ibid, p.34). Smiliarly
in translating of certain idioms that carry some ironical meanings, the pragmatic force of the
speakers uttarence (ibid, p.35) will be lost.
In sum, avoiding the literal translation methods as much as possible is curcial when dealing
with the cultural aspects of the text; in order to, avoid a serious distructive loss . Still, creating
fixed alternative universal principales and procedures to deal with the cultural loss is not
possible, as these aspects of text is vast anew scope to be limited in one approach, from one
hand. And, the loss in the sub-types of each type vary according to the situation and the
context of each utterance type, in the other hand. Therfore, after decoding and intrepriting the
uttarance adequatly the translator ought to arrange her/his prioprity by deciding and choosing
the method that produces less loss in the (TT) and conveys the message of the (ST)
completely by seeking an equivalent effect in the first place.
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are group of conscious, careful, free, one-off choice techniques translators resort to make up
on the unacceptable loss (i.e. the loss of meaning or effect in the (ST) (Newmark, 1988) in
translation(Hervey& Higgins, 2002, p. 268) by adding element eslsewhere(Armstrong,
2005)which Nida and Taber limit it solely to idioms. Hervey and Higgins propose (2002) four
types of compensation: compensation by merging, compensation by splitting, compensation
in kind and compensation in place. To begin with, compensation by splitting occurs when the
meaning of (ST) word expanded into longer stretch of the (TT).
Contrastvily, in
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Example:
(ST)
(TT)
Type of
compensation
by merging.
Horseman
Easter
sound
by splitting.
in kind
in place
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phenomena who via employing the Arabic figurative language devices metonymies,
metaphors, similesetc, he strengthens the aesthetic perspectives of the plays.
Examples:
ST. 1. "Who chooseth me shall gain what many men desire." (Shakspear, 2005, p. 45)
ST. 2.Who chooseth me shall get as much as he deserves." (ibid)
ST. 3.Who chooseth me must give and hazard all he hath." (ibid)
TT.1.
) 52 2011 " (
"
TT.2.
(ibid) ."
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TT.3.
(ibid) . "
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Shakespeare employs the anaphoric device the alliteration, by repeating the phrase who
chooseth me at the beginning of each inscription which Matran substitutes with three
different verbs . These different words convey varied degrees of
meaning to the word chooseth, and they express more clearly the semantics relationship
between the casket material and its script. And he compensates on the loss of the soundeffect, which originates from the elimination of the repition in (TT), by translating with the
relevant linguistic of the Arabic Poetry"". Briefly, the translator decisions of both
compensating the loss and clearing the (ST) in (TT) strengthens the aesthetic function and
effect of the (TT) that meant to be conveyed to the readers of the (ST) by appealing and
compelling the (TT) readers senses far better from the original.
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the symmetrical cultural features between (SL) and (TL) contribute in reducing the likely loss
that may occur due to rendering such cultural-bound expressions in (TT). Also, the (TT) may
gain some features that does not exist in the (ST) by rendering these cultural features with
stronger equivalent effects. Next, the translator is the determining factor of gain, as her/his
efficiency and high competency in the (TL) precisely will give him thousand options to
translate each segment of (ST). This can be best illustrated by the comparison between Hasen
Amine and Khalil Matran how the difference in the background of each of them will control
the rate of gain in (TT).
Example:
ST.
Therefore, Jew,
Though justice be thy plea, consider this,
That in the course of justice none of us
Should see salvation; we do pray for mercy,
And that same prayer doth teach us all to render
The deeds of mercy. (Shakspear, 2005, p. 91;92)
TT.1. "
.
.
)48 2011 " (.
TT.2. "
. .
"
)105 1998 (
There is a clear difference between (1) and (2), as the first translation has stronger effect than
the second one. Although, the second translation is correct and serve the same function of
(ST) compared with the second is poor translation as Matran Arabic background is better than
Amine which enables him to reveal the implicitness of the text on the surface without losing
any of the aesthetic values of the original. On contrary, the lack of cohesion and prosodic
features in (2) weakens its effect.
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Translation
Nestor
Strategy
-1 1- Annotation.
. () 2-Explication
Using
brackets
along
with
)46 1988 (
) (-2
.
2005, p. 7)
Explication
(ibid)
preserve
the
phonological
and
morphological
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effect of (TT).
2-Ducats.
(Shakspear, 2005, p.
)122 1988 (
Translating
Ducats with
" "instead
59)
of .
3- your footsteps
"Compensation
"
2008, p. 294)
Using
as
compensation to
alliteration
sound-effect.
I.5.Conclusion
Overcoming the differences between the (TL) and (SL) is the first priority in translating texts
from one language to another for producing an equivalent (TT) with the same equivalent
effect. However, achieving a complete equivalence between the languages that originates
from different language families is impossible because they are living different facts.
Consequently, the asymmetrical origins between Arabic as Semantic language and the IndoEuropean English language are the main reason behind the lost of the (ST) elements and
characteristics in (TT). Similarly, earning some extra values can be just an illusion under
these circumstances because the first priority of the translator is overcoming these differences,
in order to, produce equivalent replica of the (ST) instead of focusing on adding or
ameliorating its quality in (TT). Still, the fact every translation entails loss of some sort often
and sometimes gains is there.
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Namely, the loss is the incomplete replica of the (ST) into (TT) which occurs due to many
reasons, and can be dealt with by different methods and strategies. There are many different
factors behind the loss that originate from the differences between the Arabic and English
including linguistic, cultural, and religious factors. Additionally, the deficiency of the
translator and the interference of his personality in the process of the translation may cause
loss also. Therefore, different strategies like compensation by splitting, by merging, in kind
and in place, as well as, compromising, explication, paraphrasing etc can be used to reduce
the loss. Similarly, there are earned features that can be noticed in (TT), yet it differs from the
loss in this that the gain occurs due the conscious applying of different strategies like
domestication, compensation, annotation and explication which contributes in enriching the
(TT). Additionally, rendering the peculiarities, neologisms, and foreign concepts into (TT)
contributes in enriching the enriching its (TL) linguistic and literary canons. And in both
cases the translator must have well-enough knowledge about the extralinguistic elements of
the (TL) and (SL) people especially their culture; in order to, reduce the loss, from one hand,
and enhance the gain, from the other hand. Thus, it can be said that: although both loss and
gain are the direct results of the asymmetrical characteristics of Arabic and English it is the
translator efficiency which will decide the amount of both in (TT).
To conclude with, since mastering both (SL) and (TL) is not enough to produce a perfect
translation; establishing a theory of loss and gain is necessity for translator to provide her/him
with enough knowledge about the translation mechanism. First, it makes her/him aware of the
asymmetrical characteristics of both languages which help her/him predict the area of
difficulties that may produce loss. Second, it provides her/him with techniques and strategies
to deal with the loss. Third, it makes the translation process more systematic and conscious
rather than chance and intuition. It pushes her/him to acquire the target culture and deepens
his non-linguistics knowledge which makes her/him more open and tolerant towards the target
by overcoming his personal judgment and evaluation. Moreover, his modification and
compromising will be providing with solid ground that helps in the evaluation of the (TT).
However, the loss is not always flaw as sometimes it is the only way to preserve the original
properties in the target. Consequently, loss is never to be considered as negative aspect in
translation; particularly, if this loss is translator way to convey and preserve the (ST) in (TT).
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Chapter II.
The Difficulties in Translation the
Fiction Fantasy from English to
Arabic.
II.1.Introduction
Literary translation has been always the mean by which the different people transfer and learn
about the other peoples literary canon, as it contributes in its development and growth either
by providing writers principles of writing of new literary genres or enriching its literary canon
with priceless books. For example, Arabs would have never known the drama if not for the
translations of the French and English plays. Likewise, the Arabs communications with the
eastern world contributes in the appearance of the Modern Arabic novel in the second half of
the 19th C. and the Modern poetry after the (WWII) (, 1962).
In General, literary translation refers to the translation of novels, short stories, plays, children
literature (Gouadec, 2007) which submits into particular rules and principles. Namely, it has
been defined as the reproduction of text that reflects authors intention, but it ought to only
shares the central literary properties of the object-text (Munday, 2011, p. 426). That is to
say, it aims at producing (TT) in its convention that had the same relationship to the objects
(TT) have with its cultural conventions. In other words, it is the type of translation which
should reproduce in the (TL) reader the same emotional and psychological reaction produced
in the original (SL) reader (Lander, 2011, p. 49). Although, the literary translation is the
dominate translation type recently; in particular fiction, which considers as the most
worldwide translated genre (Venuti, 1995) only few books are translated into Arabic
including Harry Potter, Twilight Saga and The Lords of the Rings. While books like The
Vampire Diaries by J.L. Smith and The Iron Fey Julie Kagawa are not. Accordingly, the
many questions that must be raised here are: what is the reason behind the decline and the
recession of the Arabic literary translation compared with others languages generally, and in
fiction translation particularly? Is it because of the difficulties of translating this genre which
cannot be coped with? Or because of Arab reader who has no a particular interest in fictional
works?
In attempt to investigate and reveal the truth about these phenomena, this chapter sheds the
light on some of the difficulties which may face translator in translating fiction; along with,
suggesting solutions and techniques to deal with the most common issues of literary
translation.
2012). Briefly, fiction refers to any unrealistic story which employes storytelling techniques
like dialouge, narrative or exposition, and combines from invented characters, places, events ,
and supernatural phenomenas originating from the writers imagination. Modern fiction has
two main forms: novel and short story which categorizes into science fiction, fantasy fiction,
crime fiction, humorous, historical fiction (Earnshaw, 2007) mystery, horror, detective fiction
(Morley, 2007). And the fantasy is the main concern of this research in which an emphasis on
its major translating difficulties is investigated.
Namely, fantasy presents an imaginative fiction dependent for effect on strangeness of
setting and of characters (Britannica, 2012) which originates from folklores, myths, fairy
stories or legends that usually shows people in conflict with enormously powerful beings and
supernatural forces (Earnshaw, 2007). Often, fantasy writers tend to take real-life situations
and characters and introducing them into a world where unexpected things happen has
resonated with readers since the earliest days (Genre fiction as literature, 2005). Therefore,
translating this genre into the Arabic
equivalence in (TT), but a matter of rendering a foreign human experience into it.
transmitting the message of (ST) by taking (ST) producer, (TT) producer and (TT) receivers.
Additionally, this theory gives a consideration to producing (TT) that suits the culture of (TL)
without disturbing the (ST). (As-Safi, 2011). Next, by taking in consideration expressive
function of the (ST) translator shall adopt the standpoint of the author, from one hand, and by
using the translation identifying method through the translation process, from the other hand.
(See, I.2.1.). And by bearing in mind the claims of the skopos theory the translator defines his
objectives and goals from this translating process in the first place. Accordingly, this will give
her/him dynamical transposing between the different translation procedures according to the
chunk, level and the intended-effect s/he is trying to render. (See, I.2.1)
To conclude with, it is not possible to constrain the methods of translating the fantasy text in
universal stable list the translator can resort to each time a difficulty appears in front of
her/him. As s/he ought to vary her/his translation methods and procedures according to the
purpose of the (ST) in order to achieve similar one in (TT). Consequently, these methods will
vary between the literality and the free translation. And, the only solution to overcome the
difficulties of rendering this genre is being aware of its characteristics and defining
components which will contributes in preparing her/him to the likely area of the difficulties.
In brief, while rendering English fantasy into Arabic the translator main focus shall be in
rendering both the content and the style of the (ST), as s/he is supposed to produce (TT) by
recreating the effect the author was striving to achieve.
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and (SL) readers in way that s/he reads, decodes, recodes before producing all the extractedcharacteristics, the comprehensible-aspects and the interpreted-message in the (TT) (Hatim &
Mason, 1990). Briefly the process of translating literary texts has been summed up in Robert
Bly eight stages; which was originally created for translating the verse; then, translators
generalizes it to comprise prose also (Lander, 2011). The eight stages of translation can be
listed in the following eight steps:
1. Reading the book twice in order to understand it;
2. Determining the authorial voice;
3. Writing the first draft with highlighting the difficult concepts and terms;
4. Consulting a native speaker in order to solve what has been vague in the first draft;
5. Writing manuscript before revising it with special emphasis on phraseology, fluency
and naturalness;
6. Examining the manuscript with the help of highly literary native speaker in order to
rid of any trace of awkwardness;
7. Reading out loud and examining the manuscript line by line with literature specialist;
8. Make final change and produce the (TT). (E.Landers)
Still, even though with these process organizing steps the literary translator may not be able to
produce an equivalence and equivalent effect of the (ST) in (TT). As, there are many factors
besides to the text language and genre that hiders the translating process, and causing very
serious loss to the (ST) characteristics in (TT).
II.5.1. Titles:
Translating a title is an artistic rendering, or what Catford refers to as a creative transposition
(Catford, 1965) because it should sound attractive, allusive, suggestiveandbear some
relation to the original(Newmark, 1988, p.56). Normally, title should remain unchanged
because it is the card identity of the literary work, but Title change may occur because of the
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Example:
N:
Title (SL)
01
Frankenstein
(Shelley, 1818)
02
Title (TL)
. Literality
Loss type
Phonological
)2003 (
. Naturalization Semantic/
Othello
(Shakespeare, 1968).
Method
)2011 (
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phonological
03
2013)
04
. Transference
The Inferno.(Brown,
)2013 (
. Shift
Semantic
/implicit
Morphological
)2007(
the (TT) will suffer no serious loss particularly in the case of first type; unless, if the
name is a part of phonic pattern which will make the (TT) suffer sound-effect loss.
Contrastively, transliterating the second type will produce a serious semantic loss because
Arab reader is ignorant about literary canon and culture repertoire of (SL) which force
translator to resort different strategies in order to reduce loss.
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Example:
N
(ST)
01
Fairy (Myths).
02
Lucifer (Religion)
03
Eanna(Sumer
(TT)
Method
)2011 (Adaptation.
. Adaptation.
Semantic loss
Gain.
Goddess).
04
Loss/Gain
+ footnotes.
Literal.
Underworld.
Semantic plus
Gain.
.)1980(
05
Werewolf(Mayer,
2009 (Coinage(Dev
2007).
06
) iation).
Vampire
(Mayer, 2007).
07
morphological
.)2009 (Literal.
Loss
)2011 (
(Barrie, 1902) .
08
RubeusHagrid
(Rowling, 1997).
which misleads the Arab reader by matching concept in (SL) with a different one in (TL).
Illustratively, the fairies and Al-jin are not the same thing at all, as the former refers to
fictional creature while the latter refers to an existing creatures.
"
.
)28 2009 (
"
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associates each character with particular linguistic register that goes along with its
personality, behavior and attitudes; for example, serious, carefree, stupid or bullyetc. As
result, translator task will be harder because this will give him limited and determined
vocabularies that express both the synonym of (TL) word along with the denotative
dimension of the character persona (, 2008). For example to avoid phonological loss,
translator must use words with only in order to convey Hard Times character lisp which
cannot be achieved in the case of Mutht, Thay and thithter ((Dickens, 2005), as their
counterparts in Arabic has no " "phoneme.
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II.5.6.The Dialogue:
In its simplest sense, dialogue is the conversations within the story which are employed by the
author for many purposes. At first sight translating the dialogue seems an easy work if not the
easiest at all, but the difficulties in rendering it may produce a serious inevitable stylistic and
rhetorical loss (see, I.3.2.1) causing a destruction to the aesthetic values of the (ST) in (TT).
Mainly, there are two difficulties in translating dialogue one relates to its intended function
and another relate to its language nature and reference.
To begin with, the difficulties in producing an Arabic dialogue with equivalent function lay
behind the construction of the source in way that serves, primarily, to bring the characters into
life by revealing their motives and agendas. Consequently, it connects readers with the
characters establishing a sort of relationship between them. Also, it gives a very good real
sense to the setting and communicates with the story theme (Kempton, 2004). Yet, because the
characters and the setting reflects the (TL) living facts (see, II.4.2. & II.4.3.), the translator
task in producing a dialogue with both the same function and the equivalent effect is not in
the reach of all the translators, as only the highly competent literary translator who is
specialized in his author can interpret that much.
The next difficulties relate to the degree of the formality and the informality of the used
language variety within the dialogue. Subsequently, the register of the dialogue can be
troublesome to the Arab translator who has no choice but to produce a text with standard
Arabic . Particularly, if the counterparts in the original are slangs and colloquial verities.
Eventually, s/he produces semantic and implicit loss often by resorting to omission strategies.
Because slangs are considered as offensive and inappropriate in (TL) (see I.3.2.3.) while
colloquialism as low language. For instance, both the emics and the etics aspects in the
following sentence Blame it, I aint going to stir him much (, 2008) has been lost in
the Arb. (TT) " " ". Notably, the (TT) has no sign of the informality
and the back translation will never produce the same (ST) unless with previous knowledge of
the character background and speaking habits which usually cannot be detected in the Arabic
(TT).
Additionally, The problem increases if the language has some religious references, as a
modified loss (see, I.3.2.2.) is likely to occur due to the use of the adaptation method in
translating such religious related expressions into the Islamic realm. For example, Oh
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heavens becomes " " . Additionally, the English Authors tendencies in using the Old
English in their texts creates dilemma to the translator who has to sacrifice the etics of the Old
language on the expense of the legibility of the (TT) (, 2008). However, some highly
Arabic translators who master even the Old Arabic language translate the Old Eng.
Consequently, an equivalent effect will be produced in the (TT), as the peculiar and unknown
expression that may encounter the Arab reader who will provoke her/him in the same way the
English reader does. This rare measure can be traced in the translation of the Shakespeare
works by Khalil Matran.
Example:
ST.1. Come, thick night, And pall thee in the dunnest smoke of hell, That my keen knife see
not the wound it make (Shakspear, 1999, p. 47)
ST.2. "Pale Hecates offerings, and witherd murder, Alarumd by his sentinel" (ibid, p. 65)
TT.1.
"
)16 2012 " (
TT.2.
By using the old Arabic sentence " ) " 2003 (as an equivalence
to thick night, as by imitating the poem of " " the translator could preserve both
the nature of the Old English expression without distorting the semantic and the aesthetic
aspects of (TT). Likewise, by using Quran relted- words: ""/ " " / " " - in
(TT.1.) and " "as an equivalence to the word dunnest, hell and keen he was
able to render the rhetorical, stylistic, prosodic and the aesthetic aspects of (ST) in (TT).
Similarly, the highly standard Arabic presents in the (TT) by using the words " "and
" "as an equivalence to the Shakespeareans high class English language.
To sum up with, the variety of the tongues within the fantasy dialogue is not to be considered
as dilemma, as the highly competent translator in (TL) will be able to create neutral
translations for filling the gap of the lack of their effect in (TT). Generally, achieving such
(TT) is considered as a form of gain in the translation of this text aspects is vested with the
translator in the first place.
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ultimate aim must be: creating an equivalent effect and giving the same impression of the
original by resorting to variety of strategies in order to reduce the inevitable loss in the
process. Basically, literary stylistic devices can be divided into two types: prosodic devices
and figurative language which e employed for rhythm, balance and contrast.
The prosodic features of literary text refer to the sound patterns within it including
alliteration, onomatopoeia, assonance, meter, intonation and rhyme. It is the phonic not
graphic level which translator will be dealing with in this case and his primer goal is to
produce the same phonic patter in (SL) in order to achieve an equivalent sound effect (Dickins,
Hervey, & Higgins, 2002).
achievable only by transferring the relevant language units. But the fact that Arabic and
English asymmetrical phonological features are unlike the translator must be cautious in
translating these acoustic features. First, by avoiding what Newmark refers to with the ugly
literal translation in translating them for not destroying the purpose of the text and, secondly,
via resorting to compensation in kind and place strategies (Vinay & Darbelnet, 1995) in order
to avoid phonological loss. Additionally, translator may resort to rewording and paraphrasing
strategies if the sound-effect reinforces the significance of the theme. Accordingly, s/he will
compensate on onomatopoeic, alliterative and rhythmic sound-effects loss, that occurs due to
its absence in (TL) (Muhaidat, 2005). By contrast, if the phonic features have no expressive
function they can be ignored (Dickins, Hervey, & Higgins, 2002).
Similarly, translator has no choice but to render the original figurative of speech, like
metaphors, similes, irony, imageryetc, into (TT) because they are the formal quality of
fiction text. Namely, Figurative of speech is indirect non-literal language (Ghazala, 2008)which
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writer employs for the sake of comparison, emphasis, clarity, or freshness (Wiehardt)
.Theorists
suggest different techniques and methods for dealing with the expressive texts
Example
of speech
Methods
Irony
ST
TT
"(()
you a lesson!
Mason, 1990).
."
(
").
267)
(Ghazala, 2008, p.
267)
Simile
1.
Literally.
2.
Rewording
"
wolves.)2005 (
re-expressing.
(Muhaidat, 2005).
3.
Resorting
(."
to
)2005
equivalent
particles.
4.
Adding cognitive
accusative.
Metonymy
1. Avoid literal
translation.
spent
the
night
reading Shakespeare.
2. Paraphrasing and
rewording.
Metaphor
1. Non-metaphorical
By hook or by
equivalent item(Dickins,
(Ibid).
in the wretched
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""
(ibid)
"
2005).
".
(Muhaidat,
2005).
will find difficulties in rendering all the metaphoric elements into (TT). As result, various
number of loss are likely to occur; especially, the modified and the complete cultural loss in
the case of the metaphors and similes (see, I.3.2.2) while the linguistic loss will be less
serious. Eventually, in order to overcome these difficulties, s/he may resort to excessive
resolutions like sacrificing the image by paraphrasing, rewording, or even, omission. Also, he
may use footnotes with simile that holds a cultural reference with unclear association in (ST).
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freely in the rest of the text. Lastly, translator can use omission as last resolution by omitting
the explanation leaving the reader to his own devices(Lander, 2011, p. 95). Namely, footnotes
and interpolations are the best means in enriching the Arabic literature canon, as the frequent
introducing of new concepts will familiarize the Arab reader with their meaning by time
which will make translator let go of these strategies and transliterates the words as they are
without any need to provide additional information about it.
To conclude with, introducing the different English fiction text elements into Arabic will
both paves the way to the Arab fiction writer by providing him with ready recipes resulting
from transliterating mythical and legendary related terms and enriches the Arabic literature.
Despite, the variety of difficulties in translating fantasy it is translator decision which will
overcome them. As, he knows what is the suitable and unsuitable concept to Arab reader so
he keep the former and either adjust or omit the latter without deforming the identity and the
values of the original text.
II.7.Conclusion
As it has been illustrated above, there are many difficulties which encounter the literary
translator in rendering a fiction fantasy literary work from English into Arabic
.These
difficulties originate from this genre nature, as its characteristics and elements reflect both the
source speech community cultural repertoire and the original readers state of mind (i.e. as
purposeful communicative texts, fiction writer usually adopt their texts to the way their
original readers way of thinking and desires) which may cost the (TT) various types of loss.
These difficulties can be categorized into two groups: general linguistic difficulties and
literary difficulties. Like it has been discussed in the first chapter, the linguistic difficulties
originates from the divergent system of (SL) and (TL) which can be dealt with by applying
certain strategies to reduce loss and others for enhance the gain (See, chap. I).While the
literary difficulties refers to the literary related characteristics components of the fiction
fantasy texts in this context which has been summed up in translating titles, allusions, myths,
legendary referential concepts, setting, stylistic devicesetc (See, II.4.). Moreover, the
ignorant of the author style and manner of writing can create uneasily loss due to the wrong
interpretation of her/his intention; therefore, being specialized in her/his author is as crucial as
mastering the both (TL) and (SL). Thus, the translator has no choice but to seek an equivalent
effect rather than focusing on one aspect s/he ought to vary her/his methods and strategies
according to the (ST) segments characteristics.
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Although the fiction fantasy text has different linguistic and cultural factors which hinder and
controlled the work of the translator while translating his text, the loss (TT) suffers is not due
of these differences only but also the translator and the target receptors responsibility. That is
to say, because the translator is translating to readers with needs, expectations, attitudes and
intellect that must be taken in consideration, s/he ought to mold and adapt his text in way that
do not contradicted with them. However, the Arab readers hold a fair share of the
responsibility too as their preservation and their hostility toward the western culture and
convention will leave the translator with small-scale to work on. Moreover, their lack of
knowledge of myths will not allow them to understand the allusion. Thus, the first priority of
the translator is to patch the bridge between the two cultures by presenting his text in way that
can be accepted to the Arab reader, at the same time, he remains faithful to the (ST).
Despite, the many difficulties that may encounter the Arab literary fiction fantasy translator
and no matter how many the loss the text will suffer introducing and exploring this genre to
the Arab reader will be sort of gain in both the Arabic literature and readers repertoire of
knowledge. As, the peculiarities rising from translating the fiction stylistics features
contribute in enriching the linguistic repertoire of it. Additionally, the frequent use of the new
structures and images will encourage (TL) writers in using them in their own works.
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Part Two:
The Practical Part.
Chapter III:
Analysis of Loss and Gain in the
Arabic Translated Version The
Lord of the Rings: The Fellowship of
the Ring
".1 :"
III. Introduction
Since loss is an integral part in the process of translation whereas gain is rare and only in the
reach of the highly cultivated translator who does not only master (SL) and (TL), but also,
who is specialized in his author. And, with the fact of the asymmetrical characteristics of Ar.
and En. linguistic systems and literary canon; as well as, their cultural, religious and
conventions discrepancies; an investigation to the one of the most rich source of the various
En. Fantasy characteristics and elements translated Ar. version will be held in the second part
of this dissertation. This chapter presents the practical study of the dissertation where an
attempt to investigate the fact and the efficiency of literary translation from En. into Ar. is
held through discussing and analyzing a published translation of Tolkiens novel The Lords of
the Rings: The Fellowship of the Ring.
By applying the findings of the tow previous chapters an evaluation and critical analysis will
be held in the coming lines for both emphasizing the positive areas and extracting the
weaknesses of the (TT) along with suggesting alternatives solutions to improve it. From one
hand, the main concern of this study will be in looking for the serious loss (TT) suffer in the
process in order to show how does this loss weakened the author intended effects and the
work aesthetic values? And to what extent the translator used strategies and techniques helps
in reducing the inevitable loss in the final product? How does this fiction fantasy epic
masterpiece contribute in the Ar. language and literally canon, on the other hand?
For shedding the light on these questions and more the coming lines of this study will go
deeply in the pages of the novel to examine the translated book via comparing it with the
original and evaluating its effectiveness to the Ar. writing.
III.1. Methodology
In attempt to examine the Ar. translation of the novel of fantasy The Fellowship of the
Ring, a comparative analysis between the (ST) and the (TT) is held in this chapter.
Subsequently, some patterns are investigated and compared with the (ST) in order to
determine to what extent the translator succeed in rendering its components and aesthetic
effects. The comparison is based on the proposed (BT) of the (TT) patterns which are
compared with their (TT) counterparts; in order to, measure the differences between (ST) and
(TT). As result, the amount of loss and gain is extracted and assed for determining to what
extent the translator manage to overcome the differences between (SL) and (TL) and her/his
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III.2. Corpus:
Because J.R.R. Tolkiens The Lord of the Rings is one amongst the most important source
of the 20th and 21stcentaury fantasy literary masterpieces, and it remains for long time the
tradition by which many works were written like (Shore, 2012). In addition to its linguistic
verities, cultural aspects, religious symbolism and mythical folklores makes it combined most
of the fictional fantasy writing characteristics. Hence, this corpus will reflect the content of
this dissertation by providing a full study about this literary genre via covering not only this
book but also extended to embody other fantasy written works.
were presented in all his written work later on. His books were also inspired from his
experience in the (WWII) and career. On Sep. 2nd, 1973Tolkien start his career as an En.
Studies, En. and literature professor in Oxford University. In the mean time Tolkien wrote
many books including The Hobbit, The Silmarillion, Middle-earth and The Lord of
the Rings Epic, and like it was mentioned earlier, all of his works reflect faire share of his
life and religion. And, in this dissertation an attempt to analyze the Ar. translated version of
the first volume of his the Ring epic novel will be provide.
III.2.2. Summary:
The Ring Epic novel describes the Great War of the Ring struggle between good and evil in
Middle-earth where fictional creatures and races including men are fighting the Dark Lord for
their freedom and trying to destroy his source of power the One Ring. The story events are
traces back to the time of the forging of the great rings that distributes among the three races
of men, dwarves and Elves who were deceived; for a master ring to control all others was
forged in the fires of Mount Doom by the dark lord Sauron. And by the power of this Ring the
lands of Middle Earth fell to the power of Sauron. Eventually, alliance of Men and Elves fight
against him and snatch his Ring. Yet, the evil Ring was not destroyed, and for 2500 years it
passed out of all knowledge deep in the mount caves. Until, the day it was founded by Bilbo
Baggins. Who took it to his home unaware of its nature.
The fellowship of the Ring opens with Bilbo 111th birthday party when he left the Shire
secretly leaving behind all his fortune including his ring ,who gives up on it only at the
determined urging of his old man friend Gandalf the Wizard, to his hire and cousin Frodo
Baggins. Gandalf asked Frodo to keep the ring a secret as he suspects that the ring is the
legendary one ring. After learning about the ring, he taught Frodo about the past of that evil
ring. After discussing the matter they decided that the Ring must be taken away from the
Shire because Frodo is chased by Saurons servants. Therefore, Frodo left the Shire with his
Hobbits friends Pippin and Sam heading towards the inn of Bree where they were suppose to
meet Gandalf to lead them into the Elves land for trying to seek way to destroy the Ring. But
Gandalf did not make it there and the four Hobbits were attacked by the Black Raiders who
would have killed them without the interference of Aragon and saving their lives and
introducing himself as a friend of Gandalf. And by his help they go to the Elves kingdom.
There, at the kingdom of Elves, Rivendell, Frodo met Gandalf who, with the help of the
Rivendells king, organized meeting between the three races of Men, Elves and Dwarves.
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This meeting was aiming at electing one brave warrior to take the Ring into the Land of
Mordor and destroy it in the fire of Mount Doom. Yet, because the three races were not
immune to the manipulating power of the Ring none of them volunteer to fulfill this quest.
Token by the love of his world and loyalty, Frodo volunteers to do this deadly quest and his
friends including the three Hobbits, Aragorn and Gandalf in addition to Elf named Legolas, a
Dwarf named Gimli, and a Man from the south named Boromir volunteer to accompany him
in this hazardous journey. In their way to Mount Doom, The fellowship of the Ring faced too
many hazards and lost Gandalf and Boromir in the course of it. Affected by the death of his
best friend and godfather, Frodos mind became confused and uncertain of the whole thing;
therefore, he decided to carry the quest alone. And, the first book finished by breaking the
fellowship.
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Although the (TT) presents the formal equivalence of the (ST) lake of precision and clearness
appears by (BT). Notably, the title of the book can be divided into two parts: reader- oriented
title, The Lord of the Rings, and content oriented subtitle, The Fellowship of the Ring;
therefore, it should be treated differently by applying different translation methods with each
part (see II.4.1.). Because the latter function is to introduce and sum up the content of the
story; applying the literal translation method produced an equivalent Ar. title with same
equivalent effect of (ST). However, the use of the word " "shows a lake of adequacy, as it
can be read as with which may mislead the reader from the content of the novel instead;
especially, in the first case which by all means has no relation with the content of the novel.
Thus, in order to avoid such vague; the subtitle could be translated into " "instead.
Contrastively, the loss in the former is more serious as not only a semantic loss was produced
but also a loss of effect. Similarly, this loss originates from the inadequate (ST) counterpart in
(TT) of the word Lord, as according to Cambridge Dictionaries lord is a name for God and its
Ar. synonym is or . , and it is also a British title. Evidently, this appears in the French
edition title -LE SEIGNEUR DES ANNEUX: LA COMMUNAUTE DE LANNEAU
(Tolkien, 2005)- by choosing Seigneur instead of Matre:""( Lord Seigneur La Rousse
dictionary ). Briefly, because the Ar. word ""is neutral general word and has weak sense of
authoritative unlike the word Lord which presents a strong effect of power and predominance.
And for that a serious loss of effect is presented in (TT) in addition to loss of meaning, and
the book at first sight looks too neutral and non-interesting. Accordingly, this loss would be
reduced if the title was translated by applying the literality; the element of thrilling and
attraction will be kept in the (TT).
(ST)
(TT)
(BT)
06
10
Strider.
Strider.*
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descriptive title it shall be literally kept (see, II.4.1.) in order to avoid any loss. Similarly,
transcribing the tenth chapter instead of translating it causes an avertable loss because the
translator treats it as a loaded-proper name (see, I.4.2) who carry no particular indication.
Strider is conventional proper noun (see, I.4.2), that servers as coded or nicked name to the
warrior Aragorn, who was well-known by it among the people of Bree, which reflects the way
of his walking and appearance. Because Strider is driven from the verb to stride that refers
to the way soldier walk in long and steady steps it was translated in the adopted movie of the
novel by " (" , 2001) and with Grand-pas (Tolkien J. , 2005) in the French
version. Notably, unlike the first translation the second and the third ones are imaginatively
kept (see, 4.1.) by which an equivalent effect has been achieved in translating the 10th title.
Eventually, this proves that the translator tendency in literal translation turns him a blind to
even the translatable words.
(TT)
(BT)
Elf.
Jinn.*
Goblins.
Ogres.*
Trolls.
Afreet.*
Dwarfs.
Dwarves*
Orcs
Orcs.*
Hobbits
Hobbits.*
Middle-Earth.
Table III.3.3.2 .Samples of the Loss in the translated names and races.
Because most of the character names are loaded proper nouns, like Frodo /"",
Aragorn/"", Tom Bombadil / " "etc, they were successfully rendered into
Ar. by using the transcription method, often. By contrast, many problems are raised in
translating the setting names because most of them are conventional-proper nouns originating
from Old En. and Anglo-Saxon literature. Accordingly, an implicit loss occurs in translating
the expression Middle Earth, which originates from the Old English name of the earth
Midden-erde, and Mordor, which means a murder in Old English, (Harvey, 2003). As
result, translating Middle-Earth by " "is misleading and depicting a complete
different notion in the Arab reader mind, as Tolkiens Middle-Earth is the name of the world
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of the novel and not the middle position in the land. While, transcribing the second word by
"" make no significance to what that land may look like.
Likewise, the translation of the different races of the novel created explicit, implicit,
modified and semantic loss when the translator adapts them by well-known Ar. races.
Applying the adaptation method with the three first examples produce a serious explicit,
modified (see, I.3.2.2) and semantic loss (see, 3.2.1) because both the etics and emics aspects
of these expressions has been absent in (TT) producing an equivalence with different
meaning. Namely, adapting the Elves, Goblines and Trolls by an Ar. well known races
produces a modified cultural loss, as it takes the story races from the imaginative level to the
reality. For instance, in Ar. ""and ""are not the storyteller creation but the Gods
existing creatures just like the human race. Likewise translating the word goblin that refers to
a fictional small ugly harmful creature (Cambridge) by "", which is a witch from the Jinn
( " " dictionary), is inadequate choice from the part of the translator. On contrast,
transcribing and transliterating the three next fictional races is correct choice made by the
translator because he does not only kept the sense of the original but also avoid a
morphological and semantic loss, as he need not to support it with footnotes as the description
in the preceding lines of the story will provide a full image about them. Despite, the certain
loss the (TT) suffers due to the translator inadequate translation method it could be avoided
by choosing the safest strategy which is the transliteration because the details will be provided
as the story goes on eventually.
III.3.1.4. Pattern 04 : Translating of the Songs .
ST. Hey dol! Merrydol! ring a dong dillo!
Ring a dong! hop along! Fallal the willow! (Tolkien , 1954, p. 159)
TT.
"
) 147. 2009 " (
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The above table present samples of the speaking habits of the Character of Tom Bombadil, as
he sings his speech all the time. Notably, a phonological loss along with semantic loss has
been produced in the (TT) that was not compensated for in both the first and the second
patterns unlike the third sample where it was somehow compensate for.
To begin with, the phonological loss in the pattern N: 01 originates from the elimination of
the repition of the word dol in the first line of the song and the phrase ring a dong in the
(ST). Additionally, the uncompensated original alliteration that originates from the repetition
of the D consonant many times in the first line; as well as, the repetition of the vowel O
in the whole song weaken the auditory appealing function of the final product (see, I.3.2.1).
Lastly, the absence of the rhyme between the words (Dilo/ Willow, / (erases
the poetic nature of the (TT). Apparently, the translator did not attempt in producing a text
with an equivalent function in the (TL), but he emphasized on producing the meaning of the
intended message of the (ST) by translating the text literary. Consequently, the
uncompensated phonological loss in the (TT) produces stylistic/rhetorical loss (see, I.3.2.1)
that weakened the aesthetic values and the musical effect of the lyrical poem that meant to be
sung in the (ST). Ironically, the semantic loss in this pattern originates from rendering a
meaningful (TT) because the song work as meaningless and nonsense humming songs that
characterizes the way Toms speaking which appears clearly in the (BT).
As matter of fact the translator efficiency is under the question as his inability to classify these
poems according to their priority proves that. For instance, it appears that there is less effort in
rendering the pattern N:02, which sum up all the plot of the novel by indicating the incidents
that happened in the past, and giving an insights to the coming events in the story, than in
rendering another less important ballads, songs and poems (III. 4.2.2. Pattern), by keeping
both its form and content in the (TT).
III.3.1.5. Pattern 05 : Translating of the poems .
ST. One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in darkness bind them(Tolkien, 1954, p. 70)
TT.
"
) 62 2009 " (.
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BT. And Ring to rule them all, and ring to find all of them
Ring bring them all, and in darkness brig them.*
Apparently, the aesthetic function of the poem was not produced in (TT). As result, the
acoustic and the sound-effects of the (ST) was lost in the process of translation causing not
only a loss on the phonological level of the (TT) but also a semantic and texture loss. Notably,
the unnecessarily omission of the word One in the (TT) produces an avertable semantic
loss. Consequently, this semantic loss was the reason behind the failure of the translator in
producing an equivalent effect of the intended message of the (ST) in (TT). As, there are nine
other rings within the novel, and the one Ring refers to Saurons ring, which author names it
by The One Ring in order to distinguish it from the others. Also, the lack of cohesion and
coherent was obvious in this poem, which produces a serious texture loss. It seems that, the
addition to the coordinator Wa in (TT) does more harm to the text instead of good because
this addition turns the first line into dependent clause. Syntactically speaking, this dependent
clause creates a gap in the structure of the (TT) which weaken its stylistic and aesthetic
function.
Additionally, the translator failure in rendering to the sound-effects of the (ST) adds fuel to
the fire, as this failure ruins the aesthetic and the expressive function of the text completely.
As result, a (TT) with weak auditory appealing effect has been introduced to the Ar. reader.
The loss of the sound-effects occurs due to the disability of the translating in rendering the
rhetorical devices into (TT), in the first place. In addition to the fact that, he did not
compensate for the non-translated acoustic and prosodic features of (ST) including the
consonance, assonance, rhyme, alliteration and repetition. Illustratively, the translator
disability in rendering the alliterations from the (ST) into (TT) is due to his focus on
producing the equivalence of the words without any effort to be selective in these
equivalences: (ring/rule vs. / ( (bind/bring vs. /). Next, by translating the
assonance (find/bind vs. /) creates phonological loss, as the Ar. equivalences do not
carry the acoustic characteristics of the existing vowel sound (ai) between the words bind and
find. Las but not least, although rendering the repetition did not produce equivalent effect in
(TT) it contributes in evading more phonological and semantic loss by stressing on the point
of the Ring significance.
To sum up with, despite that fact of the untranslatability of the poetry the translator could, at
least, reduce the loss. By varying his translation methods according to the translated line, in
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the first place, by being selective in choosing his words (see, II.) and by resorting to
compensation strategies (see, I.) .
III.3.1.6. Pattern 06: Translating the Imagery:
ST. In a chair, at the far side of the room facing the outer door, sat
a woman. Her long yellow hair rippled down her shoulders; her gown
was green, green as young reeds, shot with silver like beads of dew;
and her belt was of gold, shaped like a chain of flag-lilies set with the
pale-blue eyes of forget-me-nots. About her feet in wide vessels of
green and brown earthenware, white water-lilies were floating, so
that she seemed to be enthroned in the midst of a pool.
(Tolkien, 1954, p. 164)
TT.
"
.
.)1 (
".
)152 2009 (
BT. In chair, in the far side of the room, there was woman sitting facing the outside door her
yellow long hair on her shoulder she was wearing a green dress green like stick of cane and
on it the raindrop like silver and her belt from the gold shaping like chain of lilies decorated
with blue eyes of forget me not and around her feet in large earthenware of green and brown .*
Linguistically speaking, the translator renders the above example correctly and the back
translated text shows that the full equivalence of the words has been produced in (TT).
However, because this presents an imaginary reflecting a creative and vivid image produced
by the author that serve in appealing and moving the reader senses by portraying the
magnificence creature sitting in the in the front of the four hobbits the Ar. text seems dull and
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lifeless. Notably, the translator tendency in rendering the text literary weakens the intended
effect of the author, as he is only focusing on producing an equivalence of the (ST) instead of
its equivalent effect.
III.3.1.7. Pattern 07: Translating the Dialogue.
ST. I don't see why the likes o' thee
Without axin' leave should go makin' free
With the shank or the shin o' my father's kin;
So hand the old bone over!
Rover! Trover! (Tolkien, 1954, p. 271)
"
TT.
"
)252 2001 (
BT. I do not understand why the likes of you allow themselves
Without permission to act deliberately
With the leg and the skin of my fathers cousins
Then give the old bone back
You pirate! You thief ! *
Apparently, the (TT) presents the (ST) message equivalence since the (BT) produced the
same meaning of the (ST). However, the loss of the etics aspects of the (ST) in (TT) is serious
because the translator could not shows the old fashioned En. manner of writing and speaking
of the character. Here, the words thee/ axin/ kin are an old En. one, and their Ar.
counterparts " " / " " /" " , and the (BT) will never produce this old fashioned
words unless with pre-knowledge of the (ST). Similarly, a phonological and morphological
loss, as for the former, this loss occurs due to the disability in rendering the acoustic and
sound-effect of the (ST) into (TT). While for the latter, the loss occurs due to distortion of the
poetic mold of the (ST).
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thag [ ..."
: . ] you very buch
"
)38 2009 (
BT. Though I had cold at that time and I couldnt say but [ thag you very buch[ thank you
very much. But now I repeat it more correctly: Thank you very much for coming to my
humble little party.*
The avertable loss in the above example did not only break the flow of the readers attention;
but also, produces unnecessarily semantic loss. Because the monolingual reader will not be
able to realize what the interpolation stands for; whereas, the bilingual reader whom reading a
translated novel in Ar. is not looking for an En. explanation, as s/he can access it any time
they want. Obviously, it is the misuse of this technique which provide such loss, and the
translator could easily avoid the loss of effect and meaning by translating the sentence that
indicates the characters disability of uttering the sentence properly by deforming the Ar.
utterance counterpart as the following: " " . Additionally, the use of the word "
"is confusing and the collocation of the word cold in Ar. is " ". The misuse of the
interpolation strategy (see, II.5) appears in many occasions within the (TT) for example the
translator misuses it in the following sentences ( p.37) :
E.g.[ - Grand ] G for Grand
The above translation provides more serious loss of effect and meaning and shows the
translator weakness in his mother tongue, as he is supposed to find an alternative in his tongue
which provides the same effect not to copy the original language.
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The three previous samples are few examples of the semantic and morphological loss (see,
I.3.2. 1.) that happen both due to the translator deficiency in both choosing the strategy of
translation, and the weakness in his (SL) knowledge. And providing such inadequate Ar.
counterparts did not only mislead the reader, but also affects badly on the aesthetic values of
the final product.
III.3.1.9. Pattern 09: Texture Loss Sample (01).
ST.An exclamation of dismay came from the empty boat. A paddle
swirled and the boat put about. Frodo was just in time to grasp Sam
by the hair as he came up, bubbling and struggling. Fear was staring
in his round brown eyes.
(Tolkien, 1954, p. 523)
TT. .
"
".
)490 2009 (
BT. A scream of horror came from the empty boat, and the paddle turns quickly and the boat
changes its direction. And Frodo reached Sams hair.*
The texture loss in the above example is clear resulting from the absence of cohesion and
coherence in the (TT). Similarly, this kind of loss can be seen in the whole text which
originates mainly from the literally and word-for-word translation method that does not match
with Tolkien tendency in using short sentences in portraying the actions, settings and
characters. Moreover, it may produce a semantic loss and false meaning like what occur in
due to the mistranslating of the phrase of Gandalf Fly! You fools!(Tolkien, 1954, p.
363)by)400 2009 ! (instead of" " . Also, it could be
considered as an implicit loss resulting from the disability of the translator in reading between
the lines. Thus, for avoiding such loss and producing a cohesive, comprehensible and readable
text; the translation should be focus in rendering the content of (ST) primary by seeking a
dynamic equivalence via applying communicative translation methods. Instead of focusing on
rendering the images literally which will cause a serious loss of effect by producing an
cohesive and dull (TT).
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:"
TT.
".
)91 2009 (
BT. He used to say there was one road and it is like great river; its springs at every doorstep.
And, each path of its road tributary.*
Tolkien tendency in using similes and metaphors more than any other stylistics devices
imposes an extra burden on the translator who is supposed to produce and equivalent effect
along with preserving the original comparison components in the process. For instance, the
above example by using comparing the road with the flowing river which carries travelers
along with his current Tolkien refers to the content of the plot, as like the sailing in the great
river the road Frodo and his company were taking into unknown and dangerous places.
Furthermore, the road serves as a metaphor , as the road represents the passing of time and
the ages that time sweeps into the past, just as the road sweeps travelers off into the distant
horizon. The road also represents the interconnectedness of all things, the fact that even the
smallest footpath in the Shire leads, through many merges and branches, to the most distant
and sinister places in Middle-earth. Though the Shire itself may be a place of comfort and
familiarity, the road serves as a subtle yet constant reminder that the unknown outside world
is present, and merely a journey away.
III.3.2. The Aspects of Gain in (TT):
The following patterns present samples of the gained features in the (TT) and (TL).
(ST)
(TT)
(BT)
11
03
02
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Because most of the chapters titles are content-oriented there was no loss of any kind while
rendering them into Arabic. For instance, by applying the literally translation method, like in
the eleventh chapter title, and the compensation strategies, the translator produces the
adequate equivalence of (ST) often. likewise, and in order to avoid a semantic loss in
translating the second chapter title he combines both the shift method (see II.4.1) and
compensation in kind strategy (see I.3.3). Notably, the translator avoids a semantic loss by
using the word ""as an equivalent to the word shadow which implies that the events
and the characters of the story are in situation which something dark is about to happen
implicitly which is expressed by the word explicitly. Similarly, translating the verbal
sentence of the title (N:03) by nominal phrase helps in preserving the same meaning of the
(ST) into then (TT).
III. 4.2.2. Pattern 12: Translating of the Allusion and Names.
(ST)
(TT)
(BT)
Undehill
Anderhill*
Appealdore
Appledoor*
Mount Doom.
Table III.4.2.2 .Samples of the Gained Features in the translated names and races.
While, the literally translation of the expression Mount doom by "" was great choice
on the part of the translator who avoids an implicit loss by rendering its emics features of the
(SL) producing an equivalent effect via keeping the destructive concept of the mount
.Likewise, transliterating and the transcribing in addition in supporting them with footnotes;
some conventional names like (Appealdore/ " )" and (Underhill/ ")"enable him to
convey both their meaning mitigation the loss by sacrificing with their etics instead of their
emics aspects. Thus, an implicit cultural and semantic loss has been avoided and an the
intended message of (ST) has been reproduced in the (TT).
III.3.2.2. Pattern 13: Translating of the Songs/Ballads.
ST. The Road goes ever on and on
Down from the door, where it began.
Now far ahead the Road has gone,
And I must follow, if I can,(Tolkien, 1954, p. 51)
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TT.
"
""
)147 2009 .(
BT. Little fingers of fire went licking in the furrow dry rind of the old tree.*
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By depicting the flames of the fire with the fingers and their way of burning against the dray
rind of the tree like a licking tongue, the author created a vivid and fascinating metaphorical
strong image in portraying the scene. Likewise, the (TT) produces the equivalent effect of the
(ST) because the metaphorical image has been rendered successfully into the Ar. text.
Notably, the translator decision in translating the original metaphor with an equivalent one,
despite its peculiar image (i.e assimilating the flames with fingers which were assimilated by
tongue),
produces a sort of gain that enrich the (TL) (see, I.4.1.1) and (TT)(see,I.4.1.2. ).
""
)144 2009.(
BT. Behind them, the great cracks were widely open like openmouthed to receive them.*
The above pattern shows the author way in using the figurative language and stylistic devices
in portraying and rendering them into the mind of his readers to appeal and manipulate their
visual senses and make them engage within the events of the novel effectively. By replacing
the personification (the great cracks gaped) by the simile the translator did
not only render the image of the way the cracks looked like, but also added an extra aesthetic
value by using the simile strengthen the (TT) stylistic features (see, II.4.5).
III.3.2.5. Pattern 16 : Translating the Dialogue .
ST. Annon edhellen, edro hi ammen!
Fennas nogothrim, lasto beth lammen! (Tolkien, 1954, p. 397)
TT.
. "
)372 2001 " (
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The above example presents one of the Elvish invented language that has been used in the text
along with other tongues and symbols. Notably, applying the transcription literary translation
method contributes in rendering both the etics and emics aspects of the (ST) in (TT); in
addition to, producing a similar effect in the mind of the Ar. reader. Evidently, the (BT)
produces an equivalence text to the (ST). As result, by avoiding such loss the translator
transmits the spirit of the original in his final (TT) which can be considered as gain to the Ar.
(TT) which uses only the standard Ar. language.
III.3.2.6. Pattern 17: Texture Gain Sample.
ST.Many that live deserve death. And some that die deserve life. Can
you give it to them? Then do not be too eager to deal out death in
judgment. For even the very wise cannot see all ends.
(Tolkien, 1954, p. 82)
TT.
."
.
.
)73 2009 (
" .
BT. Many from who live deserve death and some of that live deserve life. Can you give it to
them? In this case, do not be eager more than needed on giving death in judgment because
even the wise, extreme wise, cannot see all the ends. *
By rendering this pattern successfully the translator helps in preserving the moral values of
the memorial saying of Gandalf. Because the author motive behind this utterance is creating a
lasting wisdom, and he put it in attractive and effective linguistic and aesthetic mold to serve
this purpose. Equally, the produced dynamic equivalence (see, I.2.1) of (TT) performs the
same function of its (TT), as the translator achieved a similar equivalent effect by rendering
both its form and content which has been clearly in the (BT). This successful translated
pattern could be considered as a gain to the literary canon to the Ar. language which gains
new well-saying.
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III.4. Conclusion:
The difficulties in translating Tolkiens the ring epic raises from both his language and style
in writing. As for the former, the variety of tongues used within the novel creates a dilemma
to the Ar. translator who has no choice but to use the one standard Ar. tongue which can be
tackled down in the translation of the novel where the translator could not show the
differences between the characters different way of speaking. For the latter, the author
tendency in using short sentences makes it hard for the translator to deal with it. Although, the
complexity of The Fellowship of the Ring; the translation Ar. version has some positive area
as well as a negative one.
Despite the ability of the translator in rendering all of the linguistics components of the
original text a weak version of (TT) have been introduced to the Ar. reader resulting from the
absence of the equivalent effect of the (ST) which occurs for various reasons. To begin with,
focusing on rendering the words instead of the general meaning they carry produces Ar.
incorrect sentences that do not match with their En. counterpart. Next, applying the word-forword and literally translation method makes the final product lakes the element of cohesion,
and many texture loss has been tackled in various places within the text. Moreover, the
misuse of compensation strategies and the excessive use of them turns the story into a
dictionary and kills the element of thrill and mystery that leave no chance for the reader to
work with their own imagination and minds into both depicting or analyzing the situation.
Contrastively, the faithfulness to the content and the form is one of the positive points in the
Ar. version, as the Ar. reader has been introduced to every single thing within the original.
Moreover, the rendering of the images and portrays has been also successfully rendered into
(TT). The rendering of most of the literary stylistic devices particularly the similes and
metaphors has been successfully into Arabic.
Briefly, the main reason behind the deficiency of the translation was methodologically due to
applying the old linguistics translation methods. Thus, for overcoming the differences
between Arabic and English. in translating Tolkiens book applying the communicative
translation theories, mainly action translation theory and the text type theory will be the best
choice. As, focusing on producing a functionally communicative text to the reader by
applying the findings of the action translation theory along with the text type suggested
methods in translating the expressive text will grantee rending the linguistic, the function and
the aesthetic values of the original .
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Conclusion
Conclusion
Despite the fact that the discrepancies between Ar. and En. linguistic systems enhance the
loss and reduce the gain in translation, the flexibility of Ar. language enables it in expressing
itself in many ways. This gives the translator extra options and choices to cope with these
asymmetrical linguistic characteristics between both. However, the cultural and religious
discrepancies between both may cause more harm to the text than the previous factors. As
coping with these extralinguistic characteristics is harder than the linguistic one, and the
translator had no choice but to eliminate these elements from the (TT). As a result s/he ought
to betray the (ST) in order to minimize the loss. Therefore, an awareness of the phenomenon
of loss and gain in translation should be established among literary translators who, in
addition to mastering bilingual knowledge, must also posses certain qualifications along with
bicultural and bicultural knowledge.
The translation loss refers to any absences of the (ST) linguistics and extralinguistic elements
in the (TT) which can be tackled on its both deep and surface structure. Namely, the loss in
the (TT) surface structure refers to the morphological, grammatical, syntactic, stylistic,
rhetorical and semantic lost elements. While the deep structure loss refers to the lost of the
implicit characteristics of the (ST) that could not be produced in (TT). These implicit
characteristics include the message intended effect, the author intention and the connotative
meaning of the different expressions.
The loss occurs due to the asymmetrical linguistic discrepancies of En. and Ar., their
asymmetrical living institutions and the text type. Consequently, these
asymmetrical
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the religion aspects within the (TL) would be produced due to the elimination of most of these
elements. Since it is always the translator decisions that controls the amount of loss; her/his
efficiency and methods consider as another factor to the translation loss.
However these differences can be overcame and dealt with by learning and being aware of
them as separate criteria that must be taking in count while translating any text. As, it would
keep the translator mind alert not only to the (ST) sequence of words, but also it implicit,
explicit, function and purpose. As result, an equal focus on all the (TT) aspects would be
produced in the process of the translation. And this makes her/him predict the loss that occurs
or may occur in addition to its type and nature since her/his choices and decisions would be
based on not an intuition and luck but on scientific statistics and analysis. Additionally, such
study would provide her/him with compensation and compromising strategies in order to
decrease the loss within the text; in addition to, techniques like paraphrasing, explication and
footing. Therefore, learning about the loss and gain will not only make the translator aware of
the areas in which the loss may happen, but also it will provide him with strategies and
methods that help in overcoming the differences between (TL) and (SL) and reducing the loss
eventually by compensating and compromising on it.
Eventually, reducing the loss in the translation is considered as form of gain itself. By
definition, the gain in translation is not a betrayal to the original by adding non-existed
elements into the target but it is in fact occurs on the abstract level of the text which can be
categorized into three forms. First, it takes the form of the extra values the target text posses
after the translating process which can be seen in it aesthetic and function aspects. The
competent translator will always find way not only in conveying the aesthetic values of the
(ST) in way that accord with the (TL) and present the equivalence of the (SL), but also he will
seek way to strengthen and enhance their impact in way that compel the reader more and
more. Next, enriching the target language is the second form of the gain which perhaps the
first aim behind the process of the translation itself, as for long time the translation role was
exchanging the knowledge and expertise between the different speech communities. It is the
translator task to introduce new genres, concepts and words into the literary canon of (TL) for
contributing in its development and growth. Also, introducing and making the target readers
aware of the source customs, cultures and religions will provide an acceptance among them
and eventually bring the gap and buried their differences by making them an open-minded to
whatever and whoever differs from them. And as was mentioned earlier, overcoming some
type of loss can be considered as gain to the text for not losing too much. Also, unlike what
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has been claimed before the gain is not an illusion and every competent translator can reach it.
As matter of fact, there even a methods and strategies that can be applied in order to enhance
the translation gain including compensation, explication, annotationsetc. Therefore, an
establishment of an awareness of the gain theory principals and significance will encourage
inputting his/her own touch in the translated text without touching or distorting its identity.
Moreover, s/he will be encouraged to render new styles and forms that will contribute in the
development of the Ar. literary canon.
In brief, producing a theory in loss and gain will make the translation process more accurate,
as it gives both insights to both systems of (TL) and (SL) and makes the translator aware of
the cultural aspects of the texts in translating it. Additionally, because the loss is an avoidable
inevitability in every translation, and the asymmetrical characteristics are stable fact among
languages it is the translator efficiency that will help in overcoming and compensating on
both. Furthermore, it is recommended that, since the discrepancies between En. and Ar. are
fact that cannot be changed, the translation theories must focus on produce an alternatives and
substitutions to fill the linguistic and the cultural gap between both and cope with their
differences ; instead of, attempting to seek impossible universal solutions to overcome these
discrepancies. Likewise, in the case of the loss and gain phenomena the translator should be
encouraged in seeking the whole picture of the expressions instead of holding on to the vague
isolated words which will reflect on the (ST) either on the semantic or the cohesive level
producing a dull text. Moreover, s/he focuses on learning about both the target and the source
conventions, traditions, ethics, religion, living style and the way they expressed themselves
which enable her/him to create neutral fact and language that convey all the components of
(SL) without eliminating any of the (ST) characteristics in way that accord with the (TL).
Also, concerning the literary translation should be specialized in his/her author because it is
the only way to interpret and understand the intended message of the text in order to convey it
accurately. As matter of fact, in translating the En. fantasy into Ar. the translator is obliged to
convey the complete cultural and religious components of the text in the first place, as most of
the fantasy works are inspired from the folklore and the bible stories, rather than its linguistic
aspects because the cultural aspects of the fictional writing is the predominate element in
portraying and developing the plot and the theme of the story; even though, if these aspects
contradict with the Ar. cultural conventions. And, in order to not touch the values the target
translator could resort to the allegorical and symbolism in rendering these aspects instead of
eliminating them, and by putting them in Ar. literary mold; an extra esthetic and expressive
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values will be added to (TT), eventually. The translator must also acquire the old Ar. and try
to invent some variety of his own when it comes to distinguish between the varieties of the
different tongues in the novel. However, theses invented variety shall not contradict with the
Ar. high standard language attitude, and it can be only by ascribing a certain language usage
to a certain personality. Concerning the slangs the translator shall not ignore them simply but
s/he is obliged to find alternatives to compensate on their absence in the target.
To conclude with, since the literary texts are not only a sequence of words and sentences, but
a complete human experience of humans thoughts and attitudes a bicultural in addition to
bilingual should be provided among to the literary translator in order to find a neutral way to
adapt and overcome these differences without disturbing the (TT) or betraying the (ST).
Mastering both (TL) and (SL) help the translator in producing an equivalent effect along with
preserving the aesthetic values of the (ST). Moreover, mastering the (TC) and (SC) will help
her/him in rendering the sense of (ST) more accurately and correctly. However, the only
problem that may face him/her with the mythological and legendary that most of the fictional
stories are originating from and the personal style of the author which will be needed to be
investigated and studied for successfully interpreting and understanding it. And even though,
the loss is more likely to happen than the gain while translating literary text from En. into Ar.
it is up to the translator efficiency and skills in dealing with any sort of difficulties that may
hinder the process of translation or the incomplete replication of the (ST) into (TT). As, the
dynamism of the Ar. language allow the multiplicity of choices to be employed in
overcoming most of the linguistic differences among both En. and Ar. and the translator need
to be clever in his translation decisions.
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Appendixes
Appendixes
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Adaptation
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Assonance
Back translation
Characters
Characterization
conscious loss
Coinage
Compensation
Compensation by merging
Compensation by splitting
Compensation in kind
Compensation in place
Complete loss.
Compromising strategies
Consonance
Content- oriented title
Cultural equivalent
Dialogue
Domestication
Dynamic equivalence
Emics
Equivalent
Equivalent effect
Explication
Explicit loss
Etics
Fantasy
Figurative language
Formal equivalence
Idiom
Imagery
Impact
Implicit loss
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Interpretation
Inevitable loss
Interpolation
Irony
Knowledge lacuna
Literal translation
Literary translation
Loaded proper noun
Gain
Gloss translation
Metaphor
Metonymy
Modified Loss
Naturalization
Onomatopoeia
Phonological loss
Plot
Reader-oriented title
Rhetorical loss
Rhyme
Rhythm
Semantic loss
Shift
Semitic language
Setting
Simile
Skopos theory
Source language
Sourcerers
Supernatural
Stylistic loss
Syntactical loss
Target language
Targeteers
Text type theory
Texture loss
Transcription
Translation action theory
Translationese
Transfer
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Abstract
This study aims at investigating the phenomena of loss and gain in the translation of
the fiction fantasy literary text from English into Arabic. By examining the different
factors behind this phenomena, including the linguistic and extralinguistic aspects
of both the (SL) and (TL), along with proposing solutions to deal with it; a
comparative study between English and Arabic linguistic systems, culture and
literature has been investigated in the first two chapters of this research.
Subsequently, by applying the findings of the first chapters, an analytical critical
study to the Arabic translated version of J.R.R Epic The Lord of the Rings: The
Fellowship of the Ring was surveyed as corpus in the third chapter. Consequently,
it has been discovered that: although the loss is highly expected rather than gain in
the literary translation it still not to be considered as flaw since this loss occurs in
order to avoid a worse one.
Keywords: Loss, Gain, Fantasy, Translation, English and Arabic.
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