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    The document discusses the positive and negative impacts of peer pressure on adolescents, noting that peer pressure can strengthen self-motivation but also cause distraction from schoolwork and adoption of unhealthy habits if not properly handled.

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    The document discusses the positive and negative impacts of peer pressure on adolescents, noting that peer pressure can strengthen self-motivation but also cause distraction from schoolwork and adoption of unhealthy habits if not properly handled.

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    The document discusses the positive and negative impacts of peer pressure on adolescents, noting that peer pressure can strengthen self-motivation but also cause distraction from schoolwork and adoption of unhealthy habits if not properly handled.

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    Peer Pressure 2

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    Kim Yến
    The document discusses the positive and negative impacts of peer pressure on adolescents, noting that peer pressure can strengthen self-motivation but also cause distraction from schoolwork and adoption of unhealthy habits if not properly handled.

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    Kim Yen 10 anh

    Peer pressure :

    In present days, a growing number of adolescents have suffered from peer pressure. There are
    numerous effects, both positive and negative, and positive resulting from this occurrence →
    combine 2 sentences into 1: There is a growing concern on the impacts of peer pressure on
    adolescents . SS1:On the one hand, being influenced by peers can produce a number of benefits.
    Benefit 1: strengthen teenagers’ self-motivation. On observing others’ achievements, the young
    have a propensity for making more effort→ + s to attain their goals, which contributes to success
    in later stages of life. Moreover, it also results in the introduction to positive habits and interests,
    namely eating healthy, reading,…, (take 2 eg, E1 and/or E2), thus developing a healthier
    lifestyle.

    SS2: too narrow. On the other hand, exposure to peer pressure may lead to distraction from
    studying. Being compared with other friends, for instance in terms of fashion, hairstyle,… can
    cause youngsters to dedicate more time and attention to overtaking their peers and therefore,
    ignore the responsibilities at school. Furthermore, teenagers may unintentionally imitate negative
    habits from peers such as: smoking, drinking alcohol, using illegal drugs,…, which is detrimental
    to long-term development. Considering the above-mentioned illustrations, that peer pressure is
    either beneficial or harmful is based on the way of handling it.

    Need to Revise: Topic sentence (1 sentence)

    Form: Supporting sentences are too narrow/ specific. (more general)

    Good points: good flow of expression, good use of collocation, logical explanation esp effect
    logic .

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