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    Speech Title: May Fifteen Edited/Revised Version Speech Editing Principle

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    This document is an edited draft of a journal entry. It has been revised for clarity, continuity, and flow. The original draft jumps between different times and details without a clear progression. The revised version streamlines the details into a more cohesive narrative. It begins by establishing the date and the speaker's happy mood as they recall graduating college 10 years ago. It then describes finding their old graduation photo and reflecting on how far they've come. The speaker decides to write in their journal, paying tribute to influential people from their career. They introduce their first pick who often disagreed with their ideas, such as over their college major choice.

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    This document is an edited draft of a journal entry. It has been revised for clarity, continuity, and flow. The original draft jumps between different times and details without a clear progression. The revised version streamlines the details into a more cohesive narrative. It begins by establishing the date and the speaker's happy mood as they recall graduating college 10 years ago. It then describes finding their old graduation photo and reflecting on how far they've come. The speaker decides to write in their journal, paying tribute to influential people from their career. They introduce their first pick who often disagreed with their ideas, such as over their college major choice.

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    This document is an edited draft of a journal entry. It has been revised for clarity, continuity, and flow. The original draft jumps between different times and details without a clear progression. The revised version streamlines the details into a more cohesive narrative. It begins by establishing the date and the speaker's happy mood as they recall graduating college 10 years ago. It then describes finding their old graduation photo and reflecting on how far they've come. The speaker decides to write in their journal, paying tribute to influential people from their career. They introduce their first pick who often disagreed with their ideas, such as over their college major choice.

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    May 15 of this year, I woke up with May 15 of this year, I woke up


    a happy heart. I thought to myself, with good spirits and a blissful heart.
    “when I reach 50 years old, 60 or Today was a memorable day. My Edit for clarity and continuity
    beyond, I will look back to this head was spinning from various
    day and smile.” Then, I paid attention things but one thing stood out to me.
    to my college graduation picture, I suddenly thought to myself,
    framed on a 4x6 decorative wood “when I reach 50 years old, 60 or
    edging emblazoned with beautiful beyond, I will look back to this day
    memories. I reached for it, and held it and smile.” I got out from my bed
    closely, and uttered, “10 years, and I and walked to my closet but I came
    think you did a pretty good job!” I across a picture frame that I recently
    slowly put it back to the side table, placed on the top of my drawer. I
    off to my working station across my paid attention to my college
    sliding window to fulfill one in my graduation picture, framed on a
    daily routine: journal writing. 4x6decorative wood edging
    Then, I started: Dear journal, emblazoned with beautiful memories.
    “In my 10 years as a member of the I reminisced about the times I had
    noblest profession in the universe, I made friends and faced hardships or
    have encountered several influential, troubles. But in the end, they were all
    inspiring and fabulous people. So, worth it. I looked at the picture
    today, as a tribute, I’m going to write fondly, reached for it, and held it
    about them, starting off with my top closely, and uttered, “It has been 10
    three favorites”. years, and I think you did a pretty
    good job!” I slowly put it back to the
    To begin with, I did not like my first side table. I refreshed myself by
    pick. She was someone who would doing my daily rituals and went to my
    always, always disagree with my ideas working station across to fulfill one in
    and decisions. I remember one time my daily routine: journal writing.
    while I asked her to sign my college
    admission papers, she was infuriated It was few years ago when I found
    because of my choice because I ticked the beauty in narrating significant
    Mass Communications as my priority. It events that occurred in my life. I
    was a very long battle of verbal opened up my journal, using my
    argument. As expected, I did notwin. favorite pen and started writing:
    Another, I came home from school Dear journal, “In my 10 years as a
    sharing I would want to extract the tooth member of the noblest profession in
    of my lab partner with out an anesthesia the universe, I have encountered
    because he’s irresponsible and several influential and inspiring
    ridiculous. Instead of letting me vent and people. They were my mentors in life
    giving me a back rub, she defended the and they taugh tme things I would Edit for continuity and clarity
    behavior of my lab partner saying, “He never forget. So, today, as a tribute,
    must have a bad day.You have to I’m going to write about them,
    understand.” Precisely, she’s a devil’s starting off with my top three
    advocate favorites.

    To start off, I did not always like


    my first pick. She was someone who
    would always, always disagree with
    my ideas and decisions. I remember
    one time while I asked her to sign my
    college admission papers, she was Edit for continuity
    infuriated of my choice because I
    ticked Mass Communications as my
    first priority. It was a very long battle
    of verbal argument. And as
    expected, I did not
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