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Creative Nonfiction
Module 10
HUMMS - Creative Non-Fiction
Module 10
First Edition, 2020

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Creative Non-Fiction
Module 10
 Target

Hats off to you for creating a piece of writing that no one has ever written or

read before. You have turned a blank piece of paper into a work of art. However,

your task as a writer does not end there. After producing your draft, you also need

to carefully evaluate and revise what you have written.

In the previous module, you were asked to write a draft of creative nonfiction

piece based on memorable real-life experience.

This module will help you complete the last stage of the writing process─

revising. The topics included and activities prepared will allow you to critically and

objectively evaluate your written work.

After completing this module, you are expected to:

1. demonstrate prior knowledge on revising

2. evaluate your paper to improve content and organization, style, and conventions

3. revise the draft of creative nonfiction piece to produce a finished work; and

4. use a rubric in evaluating your finished work.

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 Module
10 Revising
No writer could do away from the significant task of revising. It is a vital task

every writer needs to undertake to improve his/her draft. You might think that

since you strictly followed the rules and accurately applied the concepts discussed

in the previous module, only minor revisions are needed to be made in your draft.

However, even proficient writers need to improve their draft. Now that you have

completed the process of writing your draft, you are now ready to REVISE and turn

your writing to the best it can possibly be.

Jumpstart

Let’s start off with this preliminary activity which would surely bring you some

fun-filled memories. Do you still remember the iconic movies below? They’re

about to give you a swift trip down memory lane.

Good luck and enjoy the activity!

Activity 1: Correct Me if I’m Wrong!

Directions: Correct the errors in convention such as spelling, capitalization,

punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and language use in the famous movie lines

that follow.

1. “it is not our abilities that show what we truely are…it

is our choices?.” ─Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the

Chamber of Secrets

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2. “i keep telling Everybody they should move on and

grow. Some do. But not us.” ─Steve Rogers, Avengers:

Endgame

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3. “hope. It is the only thing stronger than fair. A little

hope is effective. A lot of hope is dangerous. A spark are

fine, as long as it’s contained.” ─President Snow, The

Hunger Games

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4. “Do, or do not. their is no “try”. ─Yoda, Star Wars

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5. “Just keep swimming. just keep swimming. Just keep

swimming, Swimming, swimming. What do we do: We

swim, swim.” ─Dory, Finding Nemo

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 Discover

After coming up with your draft, your most important work as a writer

comes in. Revising a draft which is usually rough and incomplete requires

thorough evaluation. As a writer, you have to examine your writing carefully and

work diligently towards its improvement. To help you get through the process of

revising, Lee Odell, Richard Vacca and Renee Hobbs (2001) suggest the following

steps for potential writers to follow in order to make their draft as good as it can be.

1. Evaluate your draft.

Assess your draft by paying attention to its strengths and weaknesses. Read

your work at least three times, focusing first on content, then on organization, and

finally on style. You can ask a peer to read your draft and to extend an honest

feedback.

2. Revise the draft to improve its content and organization.

After identifying your writing’s strengths and weaknesses, fixing problems

follows. It would be more beneficial to do this with a peer for he/she might mention

points of improvement or offer suggestions for changes. You can use the following

strategies to improve your draft’s content and organization.

a. Add. Adding sensory details, interesting facts, examples, and illustrations

will surely give life to your writing. Add connecting words and phrases such as

moreover, as a result, however, furthermore, also, yet, for example, and therefore to

indicate relationships of ideas.

b. Delete. Be tolerant of eliminating repetition and wordiness in your

sentences. Omit any words, phrases, or sentences that do not contribute to the

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main idea of a given paragraph for these can only contribute to the vagueness of

the message or idea.

c. Replace. Replace clichés and vague verbs and nouns with clearer and

more precise language. Make sure to keep a dictionary and a thesaurus beside you

while revising for these are invaluable tools to help you.

d. Rearrange. To ensure that sentences in each paragraph flow logically and

clearly from one to another, move any idea that seems out of place to a more

appropriate paragraph.

e. Elaborate. Your main ideas need an adequate support. Thus, you may

need to elaborate your idea with additional details, facts, examples, illustrations,

sensory images, quotations, or anecdotes.

3. Revise the draft to improve its style.

Revise for style by considering some of the following strategies:

a. Get rid of slang, clichés, and worn-out verbs.

b. Use the active voice more often.

c. Ensure that sentence length and sentence beginnings are varied.

d. Combine sentences to add variety or complexity.

4. Proofread, or edit your final draft.

After completing steps one to three, re-reading your final version is

worthwhile. This is done so as to catch and correct each error. Proofreading is a

thorough and tiring work. As a writer, you have to exhaust your utmost

concentration as you read and re-read your draft. Proofread your draft three times-

the second time aloud. Sometimes your ears catch inconsistencies that your eyes

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miss. Use a dictionary to double-check spellings of words of which you are

uncertain. Make sure your final draft follows the conventions of written language.

Revising and Proofreading Symbols

To some people, editing is simply making corrections, while to others, it

includes both revising and proofreading. When you are revising or proofreading

your own or a peer’s work, you can use the following symbols to indicate any

changes that should be made.

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 Explore

The only way to get your writing close to perfection is to capture a candid picture

of it showcasing its strengths and weaknesses. To come up with your writing’s

best picture, bring out your draft (the output you were asked to produce in

Module 9) and accomplish the enrichment activities that follow.

Activity 2: For Better, not for Worse!

Directions: For this activity, evaluate and revise the content, organization, style

and convention of your writing through accomplishing the succeeding activities.

Make sure to be objective and critical in your evaluation to find out and keep

details of the necessary changes and/or improvements to be made in your writing.

Enrichment Activity 1.1

Stage 2 You can now

RECHECK proceed to
the next
activity.
Underline the
Stage 1 sentences in the
REFLECT introduction that
capture the reader's
attention.
Will the introduction
grab the reader's
Cross out
attention? Will it pull
sentence/sentences
readers into the story?
that seem to be out of
place.
Is the writing focused
on the given topic?

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Assessment 1
Directions: If there are no underlines in your draft, do as instructed:

Replace the opening sentences with one or two sentences that will grab the reader's

attention.

Enrichment Activity 1.2

You can now

Stage 2
proceed to
RECHECK
the next
Stage 1 Double underline activity.
REFLECT each phrase or
sentence that
Does the narrative provides memorable
include details that details about each
make the events, event.
people, and place
memorable?

Assessment 2
Directions: If there are no double underlines in your draft, do as instructed:

Add memorable details or elaborate on existing details.

Enrichment Activity 1.3

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 You can now
Stage 2
proceed to
RECHECK
the next
Highlight any activity.
Stage 1 sentences that
REFLECT describe any
thoughts or
Can the reader find feelings.
descriptions of the
writer's thoughts and
feelings? Is my feeling
about the topic
reflected in my
writing?

Assessment 3
Directions: If there are no highlights in your draft, do as instructed:

Add or elaborate details about your thoughts and feelings and those of other people

in the narrative.

Enrichment Activity 1.4

You can now

Stage 2 proceed to
the next
RECHECK
Number the events activity.
in the narrative,
looking for gaps.
Stage 1 Are the events of the
narrative easy to follow? Put an X next to the
REFLECT Are actions presented in event that does not
chronological order? seem to fit into the
narrative.
Are any events
unnecessary to the
experience?

Assessment 4
Directions: If there are numbers or X marks in your draft, do as instructed:

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Reorder the events in a way that will be clearer for the reader.

Remove any events marked with an X.

Enrichment Activity 1.5

Stage 2 You can now

RECHECK proceed to
Stage 1 Box any sentences the next
REFLECT that state why the activity.
Does the experience was
conclusion state important to the
the significance or writer.
meaning of the
experience?

Assessment 5
Directions: If there are no boxes in your draft, do as instructed:

Add one or two sentences to the conclusion that clearly state the significance or

meaning of the experience.

Enrichment Activity 1.6

You can now

Stage 2 proceed to
RECHECK the next
Enclose with a box activity.
those sentences with
Stage 1 five to seven words.
REFLECT Is there a series of sentences
that are the same length? Do
I have a variety of sentence
lengths and beginnings?

Assessment 6
Directions: If there are boxes in your draft, do as instructed:

Combine sentences using participial phrases to add variety to sentence length.

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Enrichment Activity 1.7

Stage 2 You can now

RECHECK proceed to
Stage 1 Bracket words,
phrases or the next
REFLECT activity.
sentences with
Does your draft errors in spelling,
follow conventions punctuation, or
of written grammar.
language?

Assessment 7
Directions: If there are brackets in your draft, do as instructed:

Correct any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors.

Consider the outcomes of all of the revision exercises you have noted in the

previous section. Compile these together with the peer review in the next section

to complete your final edits.

Deepen

Getting a feedback from a trusted peer provides you with an opportunity to learn

which part of your writing brings him/her delight or confusion. Being your first

real audience, he/she will share constructive criticism regarding your writing so

that you can improve your work before sharing your final draft to a wider

audience.

Activity 3: I have You. You have Me!

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Directions: Share you writing with a classmate whom you trust to give you honest

feedback. Have him/her read your writing. If possible, exchange writings with

him/her and complete the Peer Review Form of each other’s draft in progress.

Accomplish the activity in a separate sheet of paper.

Peer Review Form

Writer’s name: ________________________________________________________

Partner’s name: _______________________________________________________

Title: __________________________________________________________________

1. What I really like this about your writing is…

__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

2. Your beginning paragraph…

__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

3. Your middle paragraphs…

__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

4. Your ending paragraph…

__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

5. Your writing can be improved by:

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__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

After evaluating your own work and conducting peer evaluation, the inputs you

have gathered will be of great help in your final edits. Now you need to complete

the process of revising and create a finished work. Good luck!

Gauge

By this time, you have surely witnessed the beauty of your writing unfold before

your very eyes. You deeply owe it to your patience and determination in

completing the series of tasks given to you. At this point, you are down to the

last but one of the most crucial tasks in this module. It will not only test your

skill but also your integrity as a writer. So good luck! Give it your best shot!

Activity 4: Looking Through My Eyes

Directions: Evaluate your finished work using the rubric below. Be objective and

critical in your evaluation. Use a separate sheet of paper in accomplishing the task.

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 Criteria Advanced Proficient Average
3 2 1
CONTENT My writing My writing My writing lacks
demonstrates an in- demonstrates a development and
depth reflective reflective analysis. self-reflection.
analysis. It includes It lacks details to
It includes experiences/activiti support
experiences/activitie es supported by experiences/activit
s supported by details. ies mentioned.
specific and
illustrative details.
ORGANIZATION I presented the series I presented the I presented the
of events in the series of events in series of events in
reflection in a highly- the reflection in a the reflection in a
organized manner. well-organized not so organized
My writing includes manner. manner.
the following My writing includes Some elements of
elements: the following my writing
 catchy and elements: (introduction,
interesting  common/si transitions,
introduction mple conclusion) are
 excellent introduction missing that
transitions  smooth impedes
 reflective and transitions understanding.
well-developed  clear
ending/conclu ending/conc
sion lusion
STYLE I made use of clear, I made use of I made use of
coherent and appropriate slang and
appropriate language, word inappropriate
language, word choice, and language, word
choice, and sentence sentence structure. choice, and
structure. sentence
structure.
CONVENTIONS My writing has very I have some errors I have many errors
few grammatical to correct. that makes my
errors. I have incurred 2-3 autobiography
I have incurred 0-1 errors in: hard to
error in: understand.

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  Spelling  Spelling I have incurred 4
 Grammar  Grammar or more errors in:
 Mechanics  Mechanics  Spelling
 Grammar
 Mechanics
SCORE
TOTAL SCORE
Here’s the result of your evaluation:

 9-12 points= Awesome Author!

 5-8 points=Wonderful Writer!

 0-4 points= Clever Creator!

Congratulations for making it until the end of this module. This only means that

you likewise have reached the end of the course. However, this is not yet the end

of your journey as a writer. So grab that pen once again because you still have a

lot of stories to tell. Good luck!

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References

Printed Materials:

Lee, O., Vacca, R. and Hobbs, R., 2001. Elements of Language: Fourth Course.

Holt, Rinehart and Winston

Website:

Free Proofreading Marks Handouts. Retrieved July 23, 2020 from

https://www.pinterest.ph/pin/713257659705883614

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