Personal Statement
Personal Statement
Personal Statement
Because your personal statement can have an impact on your acceptance or rejection, it is important that you
leave a valuable impression on the admissions committee. Your job is to let the reader know why you should
be the one that is accepted. After answering the questions described above, your next step is to use this
information and create an organized and structured essay. Remember that the only way to write a unique
essay is to have experiences that support whatever topic you come up with.
Tips on Writing Your Personal Statement
It is important to start early and plan to spend time developing and rewriting your essay multiple times.
If you are to respond to specific questions on a form provided by the program, make a photocopy to use as
a draft. Re-type on the original for a clean and error-free submission.
Before you begin to write, make a list of points you would like to cover in your essay. Considering your
educational and career goals, select items from your list that reflect experience, skills and interests that
relate.
Outline the main points you want to make and in what order. Have a beginning, middle and end to your
essay. If you have any questions or problems with structuring your writing, BU’s Writing Center, located in
LN 1209 is a great resource. They will not proof your essay, but will help you to create a well-written
document and will teach you how to identify and correct your own errors.
Focus on one significant experience, or a maximum of 2 or 3 issues. An effective personal statement is one
that shows you have analyzed and carefully considered a few of your major life experiences and how they
relate to your preparation for study in the field.
Unite your essay and give it direction by having a theme or thesis. The thesis is the main point you want to
communicate. Have a consistent story line.
Use concrete examples from your life experience to support your thesis and distinguish yourself from other
applicants.
Write about what interests you. You are more likely to create a successful essay if you are excited about
your topic.
Start your essay with an attention grabbing lead – anecdote, question, or engaging description of a scene.
Vary your sentences and use transitions. The best essays contain a variety of sentence lengths and a good
transition flows from the natural thought progression of your argument.
Be positive and upbeat.
Be honest about your ambitions, accomplishments, and plans.
Write simply, clearly and succinctly. Rely on nouns and action verbs, not adjectives and adverbs, to carry
your story.
Make it easy to read and interesting for the readers, both with writing style and appearance.
End your essay with a conclusion that refers back to your lead without restating your thesis verbatim.
Utilize anybody who is willing to review your statement and offer feedback, especially people who are in
your specific field.
Edit, edit, edit. Rewrite, rewrite, rewrite.
Make sure your final product has perfect spelling, punctuation and grammar.
Your first draft will not be your final copy; you will edit and rewrite several times. Strive for an honest, thoughtful
essay that will give the reader a sense of who you are and why you want to pursue this particular program at
this particular institution or organization. Remember, the reader does not know you.
Do’s
Address the questions/assignment given.
Develop paragraphs purposefully, be specific and make every word count.
Use action verbs and numbers to indicate the scope of your responsibility.
Back up claims with facts/evidence.
If discussing a problem or deficit, do not apologize or sound defensive. State the facts but do not whine
then move on to positive statements about what you learned and how you grew from that experience.
Use simple sentences; do not try to sound “fancy.”
Let your personality come through your writing.
Demonstrate your commitment to the field.
Let them know why you picked them.
Don’ts
Try to impress the readers by using words that are not a part of your normal vocabulary or writing.
Overstate accomplishments.
Be cute, flippant, profane, or glib.
Use jargon, slang, unusual abbreviations, flowery language, or cluttered imagery.
Include information that does not support your thesis.
Start your essay with, “I was born in…,” or, “My parents came from…”
Write an autobiography, itinerary, or résumé in prose.
Be afraid to start over if the essay just isn’t working or doesn’t answer the question.
Rely exclusively on your computer to check your spelling.
Give excuses for your low GPA or test scores.
Be negative.
Make things up.
Overuse “I.”
Over-elaborate, or be too brief or superficial.
Additional Resources in the Fleishman Center for Career and Professional Development
For further assistance with writing your personal statement, feel free to come to Fleishman Center and check
out one of the following books:
Peterson’s How to Write the Perfect Personal Statement
Graduate Admissions Essays: Write Your Way into the Graduate School of Your Choice
Be sure to bring your Binghamton University ID when checking out books. The Fleishman Center has an
overnight checkout policy for our library books in order to benefit the optimal amount of students.
Updated 9/14