U2L4 SN - Writing A Critique
U2L4 SN - Writing A Critique
U2L4 SN - Writing A Critique
Lesson outcomes:
Apply principles of what makes a good written summary and
critique
Construct a topic sentence and supporting sentences to
communicate a paragraph’s thesis and progression of ideas
Use attributive tags and reporting verbs to differentiate your
own voice from a source author’s voice
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A topic sentence for a critique: Today we focus on constructing a topic sentence for a critique of
a source (an analysis and evaluation of the source and its ideas). Follow the steps below:
1. Analyse and evaluate the article at the end of this document titled “Improving students’
academic performance – there’s an app for that”. Annotate 3 specific parts of the text
with a brief note to demonstrate your personal reflection/evaluation on the point.
2. Discuss your overall impression of the source/ideas with groupmates and try to justify
your opinion. Try to agree on a general thesis which communicates your group’s overall
evaluation/critique (not summary) of the source/ideas.
Make sure each sentence logically supports the thesis of your topic sentence.
You might include comments about the usefulness or relevance of particular ideas
and the trustworthiness of the source.
Use language to show the organization of ideas and connections between ideas.
Use attributive tags and reporting verbs if needed to help distinguish between the
authors’ ideas and your own ideas.
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Today’s topic supports the development of coherence (CO). Read about this below and
evaluate your skills.
In this course, to develop your skills with Coherence, we will focus on:
Developing logical ideas through a written and spoken text
Building strong paragraphs with well supported and organized ideas
Ensuring ideas are well linked in written and spoken text
Organizing ideas in a summary, critique and synthesis
Signposting/signally language to help indicate the structure of a text
Next lesson
U2L5 is an in-class peer evaluation session on your W1 assignment (academic blog practice).
Make sure to follow your teacher's instructions to submit a complete W1 draft. You will receive
comments and suggestions for improvements from your classmates in the next class. Also, your
teacher will offer feedback on your draft, which will help you develop your W1 into W2, an
assessed assignment.
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Science News
from research organizations
Improving students' academic performance
-- there's an app for that
Date: August 3, 2017
(1) A mobile learning app that uses game elements such as leaderboards and
digital badges may have positive effects on student academic performance,
engagement, and retention, according to a study published in the open
access International Journal of Educational Technology in Higher Education .
Researchers at Swinburne University of Technology, Australia developed a fully
customizable app that allowed lecturers to push quizzes based on course
content directly to their students' devices in order to motivate them, increase
their competitiveness, and keep them engaged with the course.
(4) Dr Pechenkina added: "Most studies into the use of mobile apps as learning
tools in higher education primarily focus on apps designed to address one main
aspect of the learning process, such as collaboration or motivation. We
developed our app to achieve multiple goals, including improving engagement
and measuring academic performance. In order to do that, we designed the app
to include multiple-choice quizzes, push notifications, digital leaderboards and
badges."
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prompts and the number of attempts it took them to get an answer right. For
each correct answer, students were assigned points which were collected in a
leaderboard.
(6) Dr Pechenkina said: "At a time when students' demand for personalized
education is growing, mobile apps could allow students to access course
material whenever they choose. Game elements like leaderboards and digital
badges generate feedback, allowing students to see how they are performing
compared to their peers. Taking advantage of mobile app technologies in this
way could help lecturers reach out to their students and keep them interested
in the course content."
(7) 394 students were recruited to test the app. Students were all enrolled in
the first-year accounting or science units at Swinburne University in Semester
2, 2015. Lecturers tailored the content of the app to fit their specific course.
(8) Dr Pechenkina said: "We were surprised to find that when analysed
separately, the app's positive impact for the science cohort was significantly
lower than for the accounting cohort, suggesting there are some interesting
cohort-specific dynamics worth exploring further."
(9) The authors point out that the initial success of the app may have been
partly the result of a novelty effect, which could mean that the app's perceived
usefulness may decline with longer-term use. The fact that students could
choose to use the app may have led to sampling bias, as more conscientious
students who were open to new experiences may have been more likely to be
included in the experiment. The authors also caution that while they observed a
positive correlation between students' scoring highly on the app and achieving
higher academic grades, any causal relationship between the two needs further
investigation.
Story Source:
Materials provided by BioMed Central. Note: Content may be edited for style and
length.
References
Pechenkina, E., Laurence, D., Oates, G., Eldridge, D., & Hunter, D. (2017). Using a gamified mobile
app to increase student engagement, retention and academic achievement. International Journal
of Educational Technology in Higher Education, 14(1). https://doi.org/10.1186/s41239-017-0069-
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