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Talk:Maumoon Abdul Gayoom/GA1

Latest comment: 9 days ago by MAL MALDIVE in topic GA Review

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Nominator: MAL MALDIVE (talk · contribs) 16:16, 11 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Czarking0 (talk · contribs) 17:03, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking this one Czarking0 (talk) 17:03, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

Initial thoughts with more to come I see progress is being made on the article.


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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • His birth name was Abdulla Maumoon Khairi, and he was familiarly known as Lhaseedi (Seedi Jr.) at home, while in school, he was called Abdulla Maumoon. This is a run on sentence of questionable notability. Czarking0 (talk)
  • his first degree This seems like an odd way to state this. Czarking0 (talk)
  • I believe "minister of transport" should be capitalized Czarking0 (talk)
  • then-president Ibrahim Nasir and Gayoom were nominated as candidates to be chosen as the sole presidential candidate Does this convey the intention better? I feel like this is mistranslation here? "Ibrahim Nasir and Gayoom were nominated as party candidates to become the sole presidential nominee"
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • lead length seems good, maybe slightly long
  • year after their marriage, Maumoon Abdul Gayoom and Nasreena welcomed their first children Just double checking are these all their children? It would be odd to split up the family info into multiple sectionsCzarking0 (talk)
  • Having "Career" as a subsection in "Early Careeer" is odd. I think this should be reorganized into a subsection on Academia, then Return and Imprisonment, then Bureaucrat Czarking0 (talk)
  • In the 1978 election section I would link an explanation of how the secret ballot works or just explain it here
  • I question separating the election info from the historical events of his presidencies. In theory, they should impact each other though it sounds like the Maldives may not have been democratic enough for that to be the case.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  • leading to the loss of 62% of the GDP I don't think the plain English meaning of this sentence is true. The reader should understand that if the 2003 GDP was 100 then the 2004 GDP was 38. This does not align with data I see. Czarking0 (talk)
  • before moving to Nigeria for Gayoom to study at Ahmadu Bello University. The talk page highlights some disagreement on this point. Can you clarify? Also the source is maybe not the best for the non-wedding info. Czarking0 (talk)
  • 1980 assassination attempt has pretty weak sources for what seem controversial Czarking0 (talk)
  • Many of the PLOTE mercenaries were captured, while others fled the country. Is unsourced. Also does this indicate that no one was killed or wounded ?Czarking0 (talk)
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  • The Sun Online is used at several points. Can you establish the credibility of this source?
  2c. it contains no original research.
  • Earwig looks good
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  • After serving at the Ahmadu Bello University, Gayoom returned to the Maldives in early 1971. So I presume his ban was lifted? That seems like a notable thing to mention here.Czarking0 (talk)
  • 1969-1978 is a bit sparse on what he did in his various roles. We can collaborate on what should be covered here if you need ideas.

If sources are sparse then I guess this is fine. Czarking0 (talk)

  • During his tenure, Gayoom focused on improving the country's transportation infrastructure. This seems like fairly light coverage Czarking0 (talk)
  • There is like no info on why he became president? Czarking0 (talk)
  • There seems to be an unexplained gap between him being released from prison and becoming undersecretary of government telecommunications.Czarking0 (talk)
  • One of the first things Gayoom did at the beginning of his administration was upgrading the education and healthcare system in the Maldives. By doing what? Czarking0 (talk)
  • For 1983–1998 if you can find info on how how the Citizen's Majlis voted that might be more insightful. Also were there any campaigns?
  • For his first term basically the only info was that there were assassination attempts. Surely, that is not the only notable thing the president did
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  • His name was changed to Maumoon Abdul Gayoom due to a clerical mistake during the issuance of his passport for overseas education in 1947. When completing the passport form, an assistant mistakenly combined his commonly used name, "Maumoon", with his father's name, resulting in the name Maumoon Abdul Gayoom. This seems like a lot of detail. Czarking0 (talk)
  • at the age of twelve, at 4:00 a.m. This seems like a lot of detail. Czarking0 (talk)
  • Gayoom identified his area of research for his thesis and submitted a proposal, which was accepted by the university, leading to his registration as a PhD student. This should be rephrased to something like "Gayoom was then admitted as a PhD student to study <subject> "Czarking0 (talk)
  • They were provided with arms and promised a payment of US$60,000 each for their services too much detail? Czarking0 (talk)
  • Strategic discussions regarding a sea-borne raid began in 1987, influenced by the deployment of the Indian Peace Keeping Force in Sri Lanka This is not the right level of detail. Either the influence is notable enough that you should state what the influence was or it is not notable enough to be mentioned.
  • highlighting the complexities of the political situation during Gayoom's rule. This is weak presentation. Either go into what the complexities were that this highlights or just let the reader understand that the the military was partially supportive of the coup.
  • His oath was administered by judge Moosa Fathhy. Either explain why this is notable or remove it.
  • Male bombing needs a bit more context on how this relates to the president.
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.


6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment.

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Sorry for the late response. Okay, I will try to improve the things you suggested. Ask other questions if need! MAL MALDIVE (talk) 14:17, 10 November 2024 (UTC)Reply