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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:HMS Sea Rover/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:22, 28 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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1. Prose  Pass

2. Verifiability  Pass

3. Depth of Coverage  Pass

4. Neutral  Pass

5. Stable  Pass

6. Illustrations  Pass

7. Miscellaneous  Pass

Comments

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1.

  • "sinking one transport, one gunboat, one merchant, three sailing vessels" - Consider linking
    • Linked merchant. Transport, gunboat, and sailing vessel are too broad.
  • "Sea Rover collided with an Australian corvette" - Link corvette. At least in the US, the corvette car is better known that the corvette ship
    • Done.
  • "It is uncertain if Sea Rover was completed with a 20-millimetre (0.8 in) Oerlikon light AA gun or had one added later." - The prose suggests ambiguity on this point, but the infobox states that it was added later. If there's ambiguity, it should be reflected evenly everywhere.
    • Done.
  • "The third-batch S-class boats were fitted with either a Type 129AR or 138 ASDIC system and a Type 291 or 291W early-warning radar" - Infobox suggests ambiguity for the ASDIC system, but only gives one type for the early-warning; if there's ambiguity in the sources, then that should also be reflected in the infobox.
    • From what I get, the 291W was the submarine-specific version. Changed to only Type 192W radar
  • Link Casablanca
    • Done
  • "On 21 February 1944, the boat went on patrol in the Strait of Malacca; On 3 March she sighted a Japanese submarine, possibly the Ro-100-class submarine RO-111 and fired a full spread of six torpedoes; The submarine was seen to alter its course, possibly to evade the torpedoes, and no hits were seen" - Twice in here you have a semicolon followed by a capital letter, it should either be a period instead of the semicolon, or it should be lowercase
    • Done - I have a bad habit of putting capitals after semicolons.
  • "she laid a minefield of 8 mines off the Malay Peninsula" - MOS:NUMERALS
    • Done.
  • "Sea Rover was depth charged by two Japanese anti-submarine ships South of Penang" - I don't think South should be capitalized here.
    • Done.
  • "No allied aircraft were seen" - Capitalize Allied
    • Done.

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  • Move Colledge to a Further reading section, since it isn't used as a source.
    • Actually, I've removed it.

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  • The source link for the badge isn't functional. I'm not the best with fair-use rationales, but I think a working source link is needed.
    • Found a version on Pinterest, artistic works by the UK gov before 1970 are PD.

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Good work. Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 19:16, 28 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]