Talk:Vilna offensive/GA1

GA Review

1. Well written?: ~~Fail~~ Pass

1.1 Prose

Although generally good, I feel that the entire article could benefit from a copyedit. If you wish, I can do this myself (I already copyedited the section that had the "please copyedit" tag on it, so I'm off to a start). Of particular note:

There's quite a bit of information that relies on parentheses (which tends to disrupt the flow of the article). Would it be possible to work the text in the parentheses into the article itself without that disruption? For example:
- ~~"After three days of street fighting (April 19-21)" could be reworded as "After three days of street fighting from April 19-21"~~
- "The forces moving on Vilna included the cavalry group of Colonel Władysław Belina-Prażmowski (nine squadrons supported by a light battery of horse artillery, about 800 men) and infantry under General Edward Rydz-Śmigły (three battalions of the Polish 1st Legions Infantry Division with two batteries of heavy artillery, about 2,500 men).[3]" should probably be reworded to:
  - "The forces moving on Vilna included the cavalry grou pf Colonel Wladyslaw Belina-Prazmowski, composed of 800 men in nine cavalry squadrons and a battery of horse artillery; and infantry under General Edward Rydz-Smigly, his force containing 2,500 men in three battalions of the Polish 1st Legions Infantry Division and two batteries of heavy artillery."
Generally, military ranks shouldn't be shortened to Col. Gen. Luit.-Gen. etc. Although us military history junkies (you and I included) will know what that means, someone coming to the page to locate information on the offensive probably won't. It just helps to make the page as clear as possible

Good point. I found and expanded two col.'s and one lt.'s :) --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk} 19:28, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

*In the section Jewish Deaths, you say that "dozens of people connected with Litbel were arrested, and some were executed". then, in the Soviet counteroffensive section, you state "The Polish victory infuriated the Soviets, leading to dozens of arrests and several executions among those connected to Litbel". I'd suggest removing one of these to avoid the redundancy of it.

Actually, this is not a redundancy: in Jewish deaths, we are discussing executions by Poles (who were executing Soviet symphatisers); in Soviet section - executions made by the Soviets (who were executing their own scapegoats).--_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk} 19:25, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oh. Ok, don't know why I didn't catch that before. Cam (Chat) 19:19, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

for those page viewers who don't know where Vilna is, it may help to expand upon where exactly Vilna is located in Poland/Lithania. Although you and I both know where Vilnius is located, most people won't.

1.2 MoS

There are a couple issues concerning the formating of date wikilinks. Most notably:
- ~~Dates should be wikilinked at their first appearance. I didn't catch a wikilink for April 15, although I did catch one for April 19, just something to check.~~

2. Factually accurate?: ~~Minor Fail~~ Pass

Very well cited. However...

Looking through the article history, there seems to be some disagreement concerning what some of the sources said about certain events or statistics. To be on the safe-side, I'd double-check the errors to ensure that they are errors.

"*Well, I can try to answer specific questions, but as far as I remember (it was some time ago that I wrote this article), the sources used were reliable... --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk} 19:29, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ok. I'm able to take that stuff in stride. Cam (Chat)

3. Broad in coverage?: Pass

coverage is quite broad and comprehensive. No objections.

4. Neutral point of view?: Pass

5. Article stability? Pass

Although there has been a lot of editing lately, none of it appears to be in the form of edit-warring. As such, this section is passed.

6. Images?: Pass with comment

The maps check out ok for copyrights. However, I'd be interested to see whether there is a Polish Public-Domain template in place for use in the copyright for the infobox image.

As such, I have placed this article On Hold. Although (technically), it says "one week until pass/fail" I feel that some common sense has to be applied when reviewing GA-Articles. Provided that progress is made, I won't be failing this article any time soon. If you have questions, feel free to contact me on My Talk Page. All the best, Cam (Chat) 05:49, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Passing GA...Cam (Chat) 19:19, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Congratulations! —PētersV (talk) 22:35, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]