TeAnn Smith

11/26/18

English 101

Maple

Critical Reflection

During this course, the work and the essays challenged me because I wasn’t used to being

content with guidelines and making sure I stuck to what the prompt is asking for. However, this

course allowed me to be creative and construct my own thoughts while still following the

courses requirements along with learning different writing styles. I was able to still write about

subjects I am interested in. Before this course I never found outlines or revisions useful. My

first essay to the very last in English 101, Improved with answering the prompt clearly, that is

with doing heavier analysis is something that I do see improvement in. To do so I set my website

up to show what SLOs I've attained first to last, Included my revised and better essay process.

No furthermore I've encountered the ability to explain on my website and my papers how to

successfully illustrate what I understand about rhetorical concepts how to process and go about

revisions, explain the components in what I've learned that makes me a better writer.

With doing my revisions I chose the rhetorical analysis because it was the lowest essay

grade I’ve received, and it was the essay that I struggle the most with. I was told that to improve

that essay, I would need to go more into detail and analyze on the examples that I used. I

interpreted that to mean that I should have explained my reasoning on why I claimed certain parts

to be an example of logos, pathos or ethos. To start with that being my major issue, I reread my

paper and started to highlight places where I could’ve identified why I thought an example was
qualified as one of the rhetorical spheres instead of giving examples then I did a reverse outline

then finally followed through with a higher and lower concern chart.

Without looking at my original, I skimmed it to look at and try to see what my expectations

for my paper were, what ideas where either too broad or what seemed to limit me on what I

could’ve said in my paper. I then read my paper and while for each paragraph I group up 1-2 major

points. I noticed I did follow my outline however I noticed in my outline I didn’t include “explain

why my examples where in the rhetorical spheres. I liked my intro and conclusion but it that

showed me that my outline may have not covered the whole prompt.

With the higher and lower concern chart I needed to go over and look for things in my

essay like a thesis, my organization, analysis etc. were all okay. I think that everything in my paper

went well. I think with creating an outline a following through with it has already made my paper

organized. Looking at my thesis had allowed to have a set idea on what to prove in my paper. It

was simply my analysis that lacked. I identified that I needed to address what rhetorical appeal

was being used, why the author used it. How the examples are validating and making their

arguments better for my rhetorical analysis.

To start I noticed that in the first topic sentence are when I could address rhetorical appeals.

(P2) I said. “In her argument she uses pathos when she talks about some of the things she has

endured being a woman in the television industry and shares how she can relate to sexism because

she’s experienced it herself and she can better connect to her audience that have also .”, I’m letting

the my reader know what rhetorical example is being used and a prompt answer to how its pathos,

that is because she is relating to her audience using personal experiences. Instead of saying, like

in the original essay “in her argument she talks about some of the things she endured as a woman”

then I just jump into the examples. I also did the same thing in other places like in when I’m
explaining why my speaker uses logos. In The revised version I add on to my speaker’s example

by saying “to begin her logos appeal she starts to give statistics on the inequality of education to

prove the gender gap between men and women.” (P3). Throughout my essay I notice even thought

I wasn’t on my second speakers, Emins side, I could’ve further analyzed her part better. in one

particular par I added to introduced example of her pathos I first tell the reason behind it and why

the following examples are pathos. “Emin wants to get her audience to feel what she is saying, to

develop a connection to her topic and get younger girls to understand her concerns with their own

emotions.” (paragraph 7) By directly stating my rhetorical appeal and explain why the author gave

it is crucial to my analysis because it gives a better understanding of how I see the speakers

augment as successful.

Another huge thing I did for my revision was add more the fit the meal plan. I changed a

lot of my topic sentences in my revisions. For example, “Priyanka concludes to her point as she

states how women tend to only serve as the motherly figure, the one who takes care of the house

and take care of the family. To prove her logos for her argument she does this, so her audience can

see the indifferences I address immediately what my rhetorical appeal in my paragraph would be

about. I added some changes in how I worded things as well as put my examples in then put my

analysis in. Overall with my revisions my paper was more concise and was more analyzed I also

think my paper runs a lot smoother with that same format for all my body paragraphs.

For my website I started with first doing my critical analyses, because I wanted to have my

final essay be the first thing that you see on my website. The critical analysis contains what all the

things I’ve learned in short, therefore I think it’s essential to put my best work at the front. Then

as I Introduce my revised paper and with my revised paper, which reflects SLO 3 is my rhetorical

analysis. That of course used and employed rhetorical concepts because it was part of doing my
analysis of my arguments. Then for I decided to include SLO 5 with my first draft of writing the

beginning to my personal narrative, it included many revisions, I read it aloud to myself and this

shows my first thoughts before getting into detail in my narrative. It was also the first SLO I had

gotten the concept of. It also shows were I began from the start of the year. The next page on my

website I am showing my SLO 2, I know my outline implements how I started my argument and

what I needed to build my major topics on to prove y point on my rhetorical analysis. felt like with

my rhetorical analysis the outline was necessary for me to determine whether by arguments would

be strong enough. Lastly, I used SLO 6 for my website reflection. After doing the rhetorical

analysis I become better at analysis to improve my argument. During my reflection I say that i like

what my website had become and how I think I did a good job giving evidence on my topic,

especailly6 cause my website topic was very new and controversial. But I think my reflection

shows how passionate I was about the topic. I also used my website for SLO4 because I summarize

quotes and paraphrase on my website. Overall on my website I organized the order of my SLOS

based off which SLO did I complete and accomplish first.

Overall my website organized it to overall illustrate what I've learned from this course by

organizing my SLOs according to that. I Understand that when accomplishing the SLOS is

something that would benefit me in the future. The story I tell on my website shows that

progression of how I've changed in my writing capabilities. I can now understand how beneficial

it is to review and strategies. That what I think is important, in which it’s something I wanted my

website to illustration my growth.