Bad News Email
Bad News Email
chapter seven
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
Upon completing this chapter, you will be able to write indirect
responses to convey bad news. To reach this goal, you should be
able to
1 Determine which situations require using the indirect order for the
most effective response.
2 Write indirect-order messages following the general plan.
3 Use tact and courtesy in refusals of requests.
4 Write adjustment refusals that minimize and overcome bad
impressions.
5 Compose tactful, yet clear, credit refusals that foster goodwill.
6 Write negative announcements that maintain goodwill.
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necessary. Or you might cite the expert opinion of authorities whom both you and your
reader respect. It might even be possible to show that your reasons for the negative
decision actually will benefit the reader in the long run. Whatever explanatory strategy
you have chosen, these reasons should follow your buffer and precede the negative
news itself. In other words, the paragraph after the buffer should start explaining the
situation in such a way that, by the time the negative news comes, the reader should
be prepared to receive it in the most favorable light possible. Examples of how to
accomplish this follow.
REFUSED REQUESTS
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Refused Requests
As in Chapter 6, assume again the role of assistant to the Pinnacle vice president. Today your boss assigned you
the task of responding to a request from the local chapter of the National Association of Peace Officers. This worthy
organization has asked Pinnacle to contribute to a scholarship fund for certain needy children.
The request is persuasive. It points out that the scholarship fund is terribly short. As a result, the association is
not able to take care of all the needy children. Many of them are the children of officers who were killed in the line of
duty. You have been moved by the persuasion, and you would like to comply, but you cannot.
You cannot contribute now because Pinnacle policy does not permit it. Even though you do not like the effects
of the policy in this case, you think the policy is good. Each year Pinnacle earmarks a fixed amount—all it can
afford—for contributions. Then it doles out this amount to the causes that a committee of its executives considers
the most worthy. Unfortunately, all the money earmarked for this year has already been given away. You will have to
say no to the request, at least for now. You can offer to consider the association’s cause next year.
Your response must report the bad news, though it can hold out hope for the future. Because you like the associa-
tion and because you want it to like Pinnacle, you will try to handle the situation delicately. The task will require your
best strategy and your best writing skills.
• Refusing a request
involves both saying no
The refusal of a request is definitely bad news. Your reader has asked for something,
and you must say no. Your primary goal, of course, is to present this bad news. You
and maintaining goodwill.
could do this easily with a direct refusal. But as a courteous and caring businessperson,
you have the secondary goal of maintaining goodwill. To achieve this second goal, you
must convince your reader that the refusal is fair and reasonable.
This beginning, on-subject comment clearly marks the message as a response to the
inquiry. It implies neither a yes nor a no answer. The statement, “It deserves the help
of those who are in a position to give it,” sets up the explanation, which will point out
that the company is not in a position to give. Also, it puts the reader in an agreeable or
open frame of mind—ready to accept the explanation that follows.
• and positively. To state the refusal positively, you should study carefully the effects of your words.
Such harsh words as I refuse, will not, and cannot stand out. So do such timeworn
apologies as “I deeply regret to inform you . . .” and “I am sorry to say . . .” You can
usually phrase your refusal in terms of a positive statement of policy. For example,
instead of writing “your insurance does not cover damage to buildings not connected
to the house,” write “your insurance covers damage to the house only.” Or instead of
writing “We must refuse,” a wholesaler could deny a discount by writing “We can
grant discounts only when . . .” In some cases, your job may be to educate the reader.
Not only will this be your explanation for the refusal, but it also will build goodwill.
Contrasting Refusals
The advantage of the indirect order in refusal messages is evident from the following
contrasting examples. Both refuse clearly. But only the one that uses the indirect order
is likely to gain reader goodwill.
Harshness in the Direct Refusal. The first example states the bad news right away.
This blunt treatment puts the reader in an unreceptive frame of mind. The result is that the
reader is less likely to accept the explanation that follows. The explanation is clear, but
note the unnecessary use of negative words (exhausted, regret, cannot consider). Note
also how the closing words leave the reader with a strong reminder of the bad news.
Tact and Courtesy in an Indirect Refusal. The second example skillfully han-
dles the negative message. Its opening words are on subject and neutral. They set up the
explanation that follows. The clear and logical explanation ties in with the opening. Using
no negative words, the explanation leads smoothly to the refusal. Note that the refusal also
is handled without negative words and yet is clear. The friendly close fits the one case.
ADJUSTMENT REFUSALS
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Adjustment Refusals
Sometimes your job at Pinnacle involves handling an unhappy person. Today you have to do that, for the morn-
ing email has brought a strong claim for adjustment on an order for Pinnacle’s Do-Craft fabrics. The claim writer,
Ms. Arlene Sanderson, explains that a Do-Craft fabric her upholstering company used on some outdoor furniture has
faded badly in less than 10 months. She even includes photographs of the fabric to prove her point. She contends
that the product is defective, and she wants her money back—all $2,517 of it.
Inspection of the photographs reveals that the fabric has been subjected to strong sunlight for long periods. Do-Craft fab-
rics are for inside use only. Both the Pinnacle brochures on the product and the catalog description stress this point. In fact,
you have difficulty understanding how Ms. Sanderson missed it when she ordered from the catalog. Anyway, as you see it,
Pinnacle is not responsible and does not intend to refund the money. At the same time, it wants to keep Ms. Sanderson as
a repeat customer. Now you must write the message that will do just that. The following discussion tells you how.
C A S E I L L U S T R AT I O N
Refused Request Message (Refusing a Request for Examples). Tact and strategy mark this refusal in which an office
manager turns down a textbook author’s request. The author has asked for model email messages that can be used as ex-
amples in a communication guidebook. The office manager reasons that complying with this request would take more time than
he is willing or able to give.
Cyril Kesten
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C A S E I L L U S T R AT I O N
Refused Request Message (Turning Down a Speaking Invitation). This example shows good strategy in turning
down a request to speak at a convention.
thgooch@apc.com
beginning–
Mr. Gooch,
compliment
gains Your invitation to address the National Association of Small Business Owners is a Sets up
reader’s most distinct honor to me personally. I am well aware of the high quality of NASBO’s
explanation
favor membership.
Presenting a major paper to this quality group deserves a thorough and competent
effort. Obviously, such an effort requires time. Because my time is fully committed to a
writing project for the months ahead, may I suggest that you contact Ms. Paula Reasonable,
Offer of Perkins of my staff about this speaking opportunity? Paula is an outstanding speaker convincing
alternative and an expert on women’s issues in small business, particularly issues in getting explanation
shows financing through bank loans and venture capital. Paula can be reached at
pperkins@sbcglobal.net.
concern–
builds If I can help you further in your efforts, please email me again. I wish you good luck
goodwill with the program.
Goodwill
Forrest Y. Wilkerson, President
close– Wilkerson Associates
adapted (Voice) 608.989.7865
to this (Fax) 608.989.7661
one case
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TECHNOLOGY IN BRIEF
Adjustment refusals are a special type of refused request. Your reader has made a claim
asking for a remedy. Usually you grant claims. Most are legitimate, and you want to
correct any error for which you are responsible. But such is not the case here. The facts
do not justify correction. You must say no.
The explanation that follows this sentence will show that the apartment in question is
not an ordinary apartment.
Another strategy is to build the case that the claim for adjustment goes beyond what • Another is to show that
the claim goes beyond
can reasonably be expected. A beginning such as this one sets it up:
what is reasonable.
Assisting families to enjoy beautifully decorated homes at budget prices is one of our
most satisfying goals. We do all we reasonably can to reach it.
The explanation that follows this sentence will show that the requested adjustment
goes beyond what can be reasonably expected.
As in all bad-news messages, you should end this one with some appropriate,
positive comment. You could reinforce the message that you care about the reader’s
business or the quality of your products. In cases where it would not seem selfish, you
could write about new products or services, industry news, or such. Neither negative
apologies nor words that recall the problem are appropriate here.
Bluntness in a Direct Refusal. The bad email begins bluntly with a direct state-
ment of the refusal. The language is negative (regret, must reject, claim, refuse, damage,
Tact and Indirect Order in a Courteous Refusal. The good message begins with
friendly talk on a point of agreement that also sets up the explanation. Without accusations,
anger, or negative words, it reviews the facts of the case, which free the company of blame.
The refusal is clear, even though it is made by implication rather than by direct words. It is
skillfully handled. It uses no negatives, and it does not receive undue emphasis. The close
shifts to helpful suggestions that fit the one case—suggestions that may actually result in
a future sale. Friendliness and resale are evident throughout the message, but especially in
the close.
This better email Subject: Your May 3 message about Do-Craft fabric
is indirect, tactful,
and helpful. Ms. Sanderson,
Certainly, you have a right to expect the best possible service from Do-Craft fabrics.
Every Do-Craft product is the result of years of experimentation. And we manufacture
each yard under the most careful controls. We are determined that our products will
do for you what we say they will do.
Because we do want our fabrics to please, we carefully inspected the photos of Do-
Craft Fabric 103 you sent us. It is apparent that each sample has been subjected to
long periods in extreme sunlight. Since we have known from the beginning that Do-
Craft fabrics cannot withstand exposure to sunlight, we have clearly noted this in all
our advertising, in the catalog from which you ordered, and in a stamped reminder
on the back of every yard of the fabric. Under the circumstances, all we can do
concerning your request is suggest that you change to one of our outdoor fabrics. As
you can see from our catalog, all of the fabrics in the 200 series are recommended for
outdoor use.
You may also be interested in the new Duck Back cotton fabrics listed in our 500
series. These plastic-coated cotton fabrics are most economical, and they resist sun
and rain remarkably well. If we can help you further in your selection, please contact
us at service@pinnacle.com.
Marilyn Cox, Consumer Relations
C A S E I L L U S T R AT I O N
Adjustment Refusal Letter (Refusing a Refund for a Woman’s Dress). An out-of-town customer bought an expensive
dress from the writer and mailed it back three weeks later, asking for a refund. The customer explained that the dress was not a
good fit and that she really did not like it anymore. But perspiration stains on the dress proved that she had worn it. This letter
skillfully presents the refusal.
Fashions
103 BREAKER RD. HOUSTON, TX 77015 713-454-6778 Fax: 713-454-6771
Marie O. Mitchell
President
dm
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CREDIT REFUSALS
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Credit Refusals
Although Chester Carter, your boss at Pinnacle, is in charge of the credit department, you do not normally get in-
volved in credit work. But exceptions occur. Today, for example, the credit manager consulted with Chester about
a request for credit from Bell Builders Supply Company, one of Pinnacle’s longtime cash customers. The financial
information Bell submitted with the request does not justify credit. Bell has more debt than it can afford, and still more
debt would only make matters worse.
Because a refusal appears to be best for all concerned, Pinnacle will turn down Bell’s request. The decision is
fair, but it will not be good news to Bell. In fact, it might even end this firm’s cash business with Pinnacle. Handling
the situation is obviously a delicate task.
The importance of the case prompts Chester to ask you to write the refusal for his signature. A refusal from a top
executive, Chester thinks, just might be effective. Now you are faced with the task of writing the message that will
refuse the request yet keep the reader as a cash customer.
• Because credit is
personal, use tact in
Messages that refuse credit are more negative than most refusals. The very nature of
credit makes them so. Credit is tied to personal characteristics, such as industrious-
refusing it.
ness, stability, and trustworthiness. So, unless skillfully handled, a credit refusal can
be viewed as a personal insult. For the most positive results, such a refusal requires the
indirect order and a strategy that demonstrates careful courtesy.
• Some think tact is not
necessary.
Some will argue that you need not be concerned about the reader’s reactions in this
situation. Since you are turning down the reader’s business, why spend time trying to
be tactful? Why not just say no quickly and let it go at that? If you will study the situ-
ation, the answer will become obvious.
• But treating people
tactfully pleases us
In the first place, being kind to people is personally pleasing to all of us. At least, it
personally.
should be. The rewards in business are not all measured in dollars and cents. Other rewards
exist, such as the good feelings that come from treating people with courtesy and respect.
In the second place, being kind to people is profitable in the long run. People who
are refused credit still have needs. They are likely to satisfy those needs somewhere.
They may have to buy for cash. If you are friendly to them, they just might buy from
you. In addition, the fact that people are bad credit risks now does not mean that they
• It also gains future will never be good credit risks. Many people who are good credit accounts today were
customers for your bad risks at some time in the past. By not offending bad risks now, you may keep them
business. as friends of your company until they become good risks.
C O M M U N I C AT I O N M AT T E R S
A Not-So-Successful Refusal
Trusty old Mr. Whiffle bought an umbrella from a mail-order company. When the umbrella did not function to his require-
ments, Mr. Whiffle wrote the company a letter asking for his money back.
The mail-order company answered with a well-written letter of refusal.
Again Mr. Whiffle wrote, and again the company replied with a nicely written refusal.
Mr. Whiffle wrote a third time. The mail-order company refused a third time.
So angry was Mr. Whiffle that he boarded a bus, traveled to the home office of the mail-order company, and paid a visit
to the company’s adjustment correspondent. After a quick explanation of his purpose, Mr. Whiffle broke the umbrella over
the adjustment correspondent’s head. The correspondent then gave Mr. Whiffle his money.
“Now why didn’t you do this before?” Mr. Whiffle asked. “You had all the evidence.”
Replied the correspondent, “But you never explained it so clearly before.”
If you are refusing because your applicant’s financial condition is weak, your task • Frank discussion is
effective with weak
is easier. Weak finances are not necessarily a reflection on character, for instead of
financial risks.
being related to personal qualities, they can be related to such factors as illness, un-
employment, and bad luck. Thus, with applicants whose finances are weak, you can
talk about the subject more directly. You also can talk more hopefully about granting
credit in the future. In actual practice, credit-refusal cases do not fit neatly into these
two groups. But you should be able to adapt the suggestions that follow to the facts
of each case.
The strategy this opening sets up is to explain that well-managed businesses hold down
indebtedness—something the reader needs to do.
• A thank-you for the
request is an appropriate
A popular and appropriate strategy is to begin with a simple expression of grati-
tude for the credit application and then lead into a courteous explanation and refusal.
and popular strategy.
Although it is usually effective, the timeworn “Thank you for your application”
variety is better replaced with different wording, such as this:
We are sincerely grateful for your credit application and will do all that we reasonably
can to help you get your business started.
The following explanation will show that the facts of this case make granting credit
something beyond what the writer can reasonably do.
• Explanations to bad
character risks can be
The explanation set up by the opening can be an additional point of difference. If
you are refusing because of the reader’s bad credit character, you need to say little.
vague.
Bad character risks know their records. You need only to imply that you also know.
For example, this sentence handles such an explanation well, and it also gives the
answer.
Our review of your credit record requires that we serve you only on a cash basis at
this time.
• Explanations to weak
financial risks with good
Your explanation to applicants with good character but weak finances can be more
character can be more
open financial discussions of the facts of the case. Even so, you should select your
open. words carefully to avoid any unintended negative effect. In some cases, you might
want to show concern for the reader’s credit problem.
• Refuse clearly and
positively.
Whatever explanation you use, your words should lead to a clear but positive
refusal. For a good character risk with bad finances, this one does the job well:
Thus, in the best interest of both of us, we must postpone extending credit until your
current assets-to-liabilities ratio reaches 2 to 1.
As in the other bad-news messages, you should end the credit refusal with words • Close with positive,
friendly words that fit the
of goodwill. Preferably, avoid anything routine, and make the words fit the one case.
one case.
A suggestion for cash buying or comments about merchandise or service can be ef-
fective. So can a forward look to whatever future relations appear appropriate. This
closing meets these requirements:
As one of Print Safe’s cash customers, you will continue to receive the same cour-
tesy, quality merchandise, and low prices we give to all our customers. We look
forward to serving you soon.
Courtesy and Tact in a Clear Refusal. The better email generally follows the
plan outlined in preceding pages. Its on-subject, neutral opening sets up the explanation.
The explanation is thorough and tactful. Throughout, the impression of genuine concern
for the reader is clear. Perhaps the explanation of the values of cash buying would be out
C A S E I L L U S T R AT I O N
Credit Refusal Message (A Form Refusal for Bad Character Risks). As the merge information in the address area
indicates, this is a department store’s form letter refusing credit to bad character risks. Such stores ordinarily use form
letters because they must handle credit on a mass basis. Because form letters must fit a variety of people and cases,
they tend to be general.
Date
We look forward to seeing you in the store again and serving you Friendly
Positively very soon.
worded closing words
refusal Sincerely,
Cynthia R. Wunch
Credit Manager
hts
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C O M M U N I C AT I O N M AT T E R S
Words of Wisdom
Some scholars argue that authors delivering a negative message should use an indirect organization, which consists of delaying
the main point. Such an approach is believed to secure reader understanding before risking the loss of the reader’s attention
by delivering bad news. . . . The current results (of the authors’ research) appear to support the use of an indirect organization
scheme in a negative situation.
Annette N. Shelby and N. Lamar Reinsch, Jr., “Positive Emphasis and You-Attitude: An Empirical Study,” Journal of Business Communication 32 (1995): 322.
of place in some cases. In this case, however, the past relationship between reader and
writer justifies it. The message ends with pleasant words that look to the future.
NEGATIVE ANNOUNCEMENTS
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Negative Announcements
In your role as assistant to Pinnacle’s vice president for administration, you have been given the difficult assignment
of writing a bad-news message for your boss. She has just returned from a meeting of the company’s top executives
in which the decision was made to deduct 25 percent of the employees’ medical insurance premiums from their
paychecks. Until now, Pinnacle has paid it all. But the rising cost of health coverage is forcing the company to cut
back on these benefits, especially since Pinnacle’s profits have declined for the past several quarters. Something
has to give if Pinnacle is to remain competitive while also avoiding lay-offs. The administrators decided on a number
of cost-cutting measures including this reduction in Pinnacle’s payment for medical insurance. The message you will
write to Pinnacle employees is a negative announcement.
• Sometimes negative
announcements are
Occasionally, businesses must announce bad news to their customers or employees.
For example, a company might need to announce that prices are going up, that a ser-
necessary.
vice or product line is being discontinued, or that a branch of the business is closing.
Or a company might need to tell its employees that the company is in some kind of
trouble, that people will need to be laid off, or, as in the example above, that employee
benefits must be reduced. Such announcements generally follow the instructions previ-
ously given in this chapter.
C A S E I L L U S T R AT I O N
Negative Announcement (A Message Reporting a Price Increase). Here a TV cable company informs a customer of
a rate increase. The cordial opening makes friendly contact that leads to an explanation of the action. Then the news is
presented clearly yet positively. The goodwill close continues the cordiality established earlier in the message.
Cordial Your cable company has been working extra hard to provide you with the
opening highest-quality TV entertainment. We think we have succeeded. The quantity of
contact programming as well as its quality has continued to improve over the past year.
We have also been working hard to keep the cost of these services as low as Explanation
possible and continue to maintain high standards. Last year we were able to do sets up bad
this and pass along savings of up to 20 percent on two of our premium news
services. As you may have heard in the news, our costs continue to increase. Bad news
Thus, in order to continue to maintain our goals of high quality at the lowest presented
possible cost, we are announcing a price adjustment effective April 1. The in terms of
Positive monthly cost of your basic package of 59 stations will increase $1.50 (from reader
information $37.99 to $39.49) The cost of all premium services (HBO, Cinemax, Encore, interests
ends Starz, and Showtime) will remain the same.
paragraph
In our continuing efforts to improve your total entertainment value, we are Friendly
planning a number of exciting new projects. We will announce them before forward
the year’s end. look follows
Cordial bad news
words We appreciate your business and assure you that we will continue to bring you
end the the very best in service and entertainment.
message
Sincerely,
Carlos H. Rodriguez
President
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Directness Here Alarms the Readers. This bad example clearly upsets the
readers with its abrupt announcement in the beginning. The readers aren’t prepared
to receive the negative message. Probably they don’t understand the reasons behind
the negative news. The explanation comes later, but the readers are not likely to be
in a receptive mood when they see it. The message ends with a repetition of the bad
news.
benefits that are designed to offset the effects of the bad news. As in all announcements
with some negative element, this part must be handled in good positive language. Also, the
message should end on a goodwill note. The preceding example of a mail-order/depart-
ment store’s announcement discontinuing a customer program illustrates this situation.
1
1. When the main point of your message is bad news, use the indirect order.
Determine which • But exceptions exist, as when you believe that the news will be received routinely.
situations require using
the indirect order for the • Make exceptions also when you think the reader will appreciate directness.
most effective response. 2. In general, bad-news messages follow this general plan.
• Begin with a buffer that sets up the strategy.
2 Write indirect-order
messages following the
general plan.
• Develop the strategy.
• Present the bad news as a logical result of the strategy.
• Try to offer an alternative solution.
• End on a positive note.
3
3. The refusal of a request is one bad-news situation that you will probably choose to
Use tact and courtesy in treat indirectly.
refusals of requests.
• In such situations, strive to achieve two main goals:
— to refuse and
— to maintain goodwill.
• Begin by thinking through the problem, looking for a logical explanation (or
reasoning).
• Write an opening that sets up this explanation.
• Then present your explanation (reasoning), taking care to use convincing and
positive language.
• Refuse clearly yet positively.
• Use a compromise when practical.
• Close with appropriate, friendly talk that does not recall the bad news.
5
5. Messages refusing credit are more negative than most other types of refusals, for
Compose tactful, yet the refusal is tied to personal things.
clear, credit refusals that
foster goodwill.
• As with other types of refusals, begin by thinking through a strategy.
• If you are refusing because of the applicant’s bad credit character, use a
roundabout approach.
• If you are refusing because of the applicant’s weak finances, be more direct.
• In either case, choose opening words that set up your strategy, are neutral, and tie
in with the request being answered.
• To the bad character risk, imply the facts rather than stating them bluntly.
• In refusals because of weak finances, look hopefully to credit in the future.
• End all credit refusals with appropriate positive words, perhaps suggesting cash
buying, customer services, or other appropriate topics.
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6. Sometimes businesses must announce bad news to their customers or employees.
• Indirect organization usually is better for these announcements. Write negative
announcements that
• This means that convincing explanation precedes the bad news. maintain goodwill.
• And positive words are used to cover the bad news.
• Sometimes directness is appropriate.
• This is the case when the news is expected or will have little negative impact.
• Even so, handle the negative with positive wording.
1 Give examples of times (or situations) when directness not permit granting claims in such cases. Was this expla-
is appropriate for responses giving negative (bad-news) nation adequate? Discuss.
information.
6 Is there justification for positive writing in a message
2 Writing in the indirect order usually requires more words refusing credit? You are not going to sell to the reader,
than does writing in the direct order. Since conciseness so why try to maintain goodwill?
is a virtue in writing, how can the indirect order be
justified?
7 Discuss the difference between refusing credit to a good
risk with bad finances or in a poor economic environment
3 What strategy is best in a message refusing a request and refusing credit to one with character problems.
when the reasons for the refusal are strictly in the writer’s
best interests?
8 Negative announcements usually need to include much
more than the announcement. Explain.
4 Apologies in refusals are negative for they call attention
9 Give examples of negative announcements that appro-
to what you are refusing. Thus, you should avoid using
priately are written in direct order.
them. Discuss.
5 An adjustment correspondent explained the refusal of an
adjustment request by saying that company policy did
1 Point out the shortcomings in the following email Subject: Your May 12 claim
message from a sports celebrity declining an invitation Mr. Skinner:
to speak at the kickoff meeting for workers in a fund-
raising campaign for a charity. Your May 12 claim of defective workmanship in
your Model 227 Dandy Klipper riding mower has
Subject: Your request for free lecture been reviewed. After considering the information
Ms. Chung: received, I regret to report that we cannot refund
the purchase price.
As much as I would like to, I must decline your re- You have had the mower for 15 months, which is
quest that I give your membership a free lecture next well beyond our one-year guarantee. Even though
month. I receive many requests to give free lectures. your repair person says that you had problems
I grant some of them, but I simply cannot do them earlier, he is not one of our authorized repair peo-
all. Unfortunately, yours is one that I must decline. ple. If you will read the warranty you refer to in your
I regret that I cannot serve you this time. If I can be letter, you will see that we honor the warranty only
of further service in the future, please call on me. when our authorized repair people find defects.
Sincerely yours, I think you will understand why we must follow this
procedure.
2 Criticize the following message refusing the claim for a If you will take the machine to the authorized ser-
defective riding lawn mower. The mower was purchased vice center in your area (La Rue Lawn and Garden
15 months earlier. The purchaser has had difficulties with Center), I am confident they can correct the defect
it for some time and submitted with the claim a statement at a reasonable charge.
from a local repair service verifying the difficulties. The If I can be of additional service, please contact me.
writer’s reason for refusing is evident from the email. Sincerely,
Refused Requests
1 As director of Eastern State University’s Executive De- and Gas, Inc. Today, the fourth day of the program, you
velopment Program, you are pleased that your three-week learn why.
program is off to a good start, except for two no-shows. From Stephanie Matocha, the Middleton training director,
The two missing people are executives with Middleton Oil you receive an email message announcing that the two
executives asked to be excused from attending, citing un- your decision is justified for another reason. You limit each
expected heavy work demands. The company has honored class to the optimum size of 20 students. Demand has been
their request. Now Ms. Matocha brazenly requests that you good for some time. In fact, you turned down seven for this
refund the money Middleton has paid—all $27,000 of it class.
($13,500 each). Now you must write an email message to this training
You have a problem. Eastern State University runs this director giving her the bad news. You will work hard to con-
program as a service to the area. It sets prices designed to vince her that yours is a fair and reasonable decision. And
break even, not to make a profit. There is absolutely no you’ll do what you can to maintain goodwill.
room for a loss. You cannot refund the money. You think
2 Play the role of a distinguished professor of business com- hometown. You will see kinfolk you have not seen in years.
munication and assume that you have received an invitation Out of love and loyalty you must attend the reunion. In fact,
to present the keynote address at the international meeting you have promised to attend and have made a generous con-
of the Association for Business Communication next June tribution to the expenses of the event.
14. It is a fitting reward for your professional development Much as you regret it, you will have to refuse the speak-
over the past years, and you are greatly honored. The meet- ing engagement. But you’ll try to make the refusal so agree-
ing will be in Singapore, and this adds to the excitement. able that you might be recommended for another such
Your excitement and happiness are dashed, however, when assignment in the future. Send your message by email to
you check the date on your calendar. This is the date of your Professor Diana Chan of Singapore University, the program
family reunion. For the past two years, your Aunt Mildred chairperson. She is the one who extended the invitation.
and Uncle Tony have been arranging this reunion in your old
3 You, the owner of Data Management, Inc., have just re- Your political sympathies lie with Concerned Citizens.
ceived a persuasive message from Ms. Claudine Kennedy, You know that many of your customers also sympathize
president of Concerned Citizens, a powerful local politi- with the organization. But you also know that many of your
cal action organization. She wants you to buy advertising customers do not. As you see it, you cannot afford to take a
space in Concerned Citizens’ annual election publication, stand publicly. It would be bad for business.
Vigilance. As she worded her request, “A $250 contribution So you must refuse the request—politely and with convinc-
would display your company’s name prominently in a ing explanation. The organization may get your support at the
2-column, 4-inch space and would mark you as one who polls, but not in print. Write the email message to Ms. Kennedy
stands up for good government.” that will courteously refuse her request using logical reasoning.
4 For this assignment play the role of manager of the un- proximate causes create excessive costs, policies are subject
derwriting department of the Sentinel Insurance Company. to cancellation.” You assumed that Mr. McDonald would
You must write Wilbur McDonald telling him that Senti- read and understand these words.
nel is canceling his homeowner’s insurance policy when it Yesterday you received another claim, this one for $2,990 for
comes up for renewal next month. damages to the Sheetrock in the same room. Your investigator
Three months ago Mr. McDonald submitted a claim for reported that another big rain had caused damage through the
$3,417 for rain damage to the Sheetrock in his living room. same skylight. You are obligated to pay for this loss, but under
It was a legitimate claim, and you paid it. Your investigator conditions of the contract you will cancel his policy when it
reported that the cause was a leaking skylight in the living comes up for renewal at the end of next month.
room. Five inches of rain had fallen. After the $500 deduct- Now write him a tactful message giving him the bad
ible, Sentinel paid Mr. McDonald $2,917. news. What you are doing is well within the law and is sound
In the letter that accompanied his check you mentioned policy. You can’t keep him as a customer, but you can try to
the cancellation clause in your contract with him: “Should make him see the logic of Sentinel’s decision.
5 You have been hired as a screener in the Office of Human company]. Your job is to check submitted résumés against
Resources at the main office of [you decide what kind of posted job openings, screen out those with insufficient
qualifications, rank the ones that are left, and pass these on
Subject line: [name of your company] Employment Results
to the hiring manager for the opening. You are also expected
Dear [candidate’s first and last name]:
to take part in job fairs at colleges, do some preliminary in-
Thank you for interviewing with us for the position listed below:
terviewing, write routine job-related communications, and
[title of the position]
offer any suggestions you may have on the company’s hiring
We have identified other candidates with backgrounds that more closely
procedures. match our specific needs. As a result, we are unable to move your
Your company regularly interviews students at the local candidacy forward at this time.
university for jobs. The student first signs up for an on-campus [Name of the company] sincerely appreciates your interest, and we wish
you the best in your career.
interview time slot and sends his or her résumé electronically
If you have any questions, please contact your recruiter.
to the campus recruiter. If this stage goes well, the student is
[Signed, the company]
invited to the company to take several tests, including a per-
sonality test, a writing test, and a test in the given functional
area (accounting, economics, finance, information systems,
management, marketing, and the like). These take about three As the person who sends out these emails, you are trou-
hours. If the student does well on this part, he or she is invited bled by their impersonal quality. They seem particularly bad
back to the company for an in-depth interview with the hiring for those who made it all the way to the in-depth interview
manager. After this step, the manager either hires the student at the main office. After all, these people will have spent
or informs him or her that he or she did not get the job. about five hours on the hiring process, and to brush them
Here’s the email template that the company uses to tell off with such hastily written boilerplate seems rude. It also
all rejected candidates who interviewed with the company— isn’t likely to generate a good buzz on campus about your
whether on campus or at the main office—that they didn’t company—and you’re sure it wouldn’t be wise to alienate
get the job: this huge pool of well-trained job applicants.
You know that it’s relatively easy to create different fields
on a form letter that you can fill in with specifics from the
candidate’s online file. With this knowledge, write a special
template for rejecting the candidates who made it to the last
stage of the process. At the next staff meeting, you’ll share
your new template and make your case for using it.
6 You own and run a small business [you decide what While you wish you could accommodate the request,
kind] in your town. You’ve just received a letter from $500 is a lot of money—and you had already planned to
the Boys and Girls League that you suspect has gone to sponsor your own son’s baseball team this year. You have
many local business owners. The letter describes the orga- to say no, and you’re not confident that you can say yes
nization’s athletic program for underprivileged youth and any time in the near future. However, you would like to
asks if you can help them out by sponsoring a spring soc- help out in some way, and you would like to be included
cer team for $500. The money would go toward uniforms, among the League’s supporters (the organization surely
equipment, transportation, and hiring referees. Because provides other forms of PR, too, even if it’s just listing
sponsors’ names will be on the jerseys, helping out the kids their sponsors in their newsletter). Do some checking
would also give your company positive PR. The letter ends around, think about what might be a feasible alternative
with a form for you to complete, tear off, and send in with to offer, and write the League informing them of your
your check. decision.
7 As President and CEO of a small company [you kind of precedent for your lunch meetings. You instituted
choose it], you’ve just received an email from an employee, these as a way for employees and managers at all levels to
Jake Rehnquist. He is currently a volunteer for the Peace share their work-related concerns and ideas, not to promote
Collaborative, a program that brings trained volunteers into special interests. If you let Jake use this forum in this way,
the schools to teach conflict-resolution strategies. He would who knows how many others would also want to talk about
like to use one of your company’s monthly lunch meetings their favorite causes at these meetings? You have to write
to tell others about the program and encourage them to vol- Jake a refusal—but in such a way that he feels supported
unteer as well. in his efforts to contribute to the community. Think of good
You admire Jake for his altruism, you appreciate the work reasons why it is important to continue to focus these meet-
of the Collaborative, and you do want to encourage volun- ings on company matters, and also of how you might accom-
teerism in the company. But you really don’t want to set this modate Jake’s request in some way.
8 Today you received an email request from one of your which included airfare, room and board, and training, would
employees, Kate McPhee, for immersion language training be a good investment for the company.
in Spain. As one of your top domestic marketing executives, While you agree that some immersion training in Spanish is a
Kate has accepted a new position with you in South America good idea for her, going to Spain for it is not something you can
to get exposure to your international marketing program agree to since you believe there are other equally effective and
there. She is very excited about the move; in fact, she and less expensive alternatives. One particularly good new program
her husband, Rob, have decided to move their whole family some other employees have attended is at BridgeLinguatec in
there. Her email request that the company fund her language Denver, a safe, friendly, and beautiful city. In addition to Kate’s
training is clearly related to this upcoming move, and her receiving immersion training with native speakers from a vari-
enthusiasm to do well in her new assignment is clear. ety of Spanish-speaking countries, her husband could attend for
The program she identified was recommended to her by free. And this program is also just four weeks long. Its cost is
a friend who had participated in it several years ago. She less than half the cost of the program she suggested.
reported that in just four weeks the friend felt competent So while you’ll refuse her request to participate in the
enough to speak fluently with native speakers and compre- immersion program in Spain, you want to help her keep her
hend them easily. She was convinced that the $15,000 fee, enthusiasm for her new position by offering the alternative
program in Denver.
9 Today’s email brought a request from Lisa Miller, one of current workloads, enabling you to make good matches. You
your outstanding new hires. She is requesting to be allowed also know the desired outcome of mentoring, which isn’t al-
to choose her own mentor, but your company’s practice has ways clear to new hires.
been to assign them. You realize that some companies per- However, you have recently learned that programs at Citi-
mit new employees to choose, but your company prefers group, Motorola, and the U.S. Air Force seem to be setting a
assignment. You believe you can make better matches on new trend where both mentors and protégés can choose each
objective criteria that are important to your company rath- other. Companies determine which employees would be good
er than on subjective ones that naive new employees often mentors for particular new hires; then both are given the op-
use. You have designed a program that gives all new hires a tion to choose. However, the company makes the final match.
rich resource for well-rounded training. You know the back- While you haven’t tried it yet, you might offer it as an alterna-
grounds and expertise of your employees as well as their tive to Lisa when you refuse her request to choose a mentor.
10 As Ryan Penne, director of your school’s career center, The biggest drawback is funding. You are on a shoestring
you received an email today with a good suggestion from a budget as is, and a program like this is likely to be costly. If
second-term junior, Stephanie Chang. In fact, from her ex- you did have such a program, you would have to find a way to
tremely clear, persuasive message, you could tell she had care- offer it to everyone, even those without their own cell phones.
fully thought through the benefits of her idea of implementing Furthermore, you would have to offer some staff training and
text messaging in the center’s on-campus interview program. develop some text message templates that were clear. You also
She mentioned that since nearly all students have cell phones, wonder how receptive faculty would be to such a program,
you could text message those students on waiting lists to see re- especially since some have no cell phone rules and many al-
cruiters when there were last-minute schedule openings—either ready strictly forbid text messaging during class.
because of no-shows or revised schedules. She reasoned that So while Stephanie’s suggestion is an interesting one, you’ll
texting would be a way to reach students without interrupting have to refuse it at this time. However, once you can get answers
classes. And by filling in the schedule gaps, your school would to your questions about cost, availability, and faculty receptive-
be better serving both the students and the companies recruiting ness, you would be willing to reconsider it. If she’d like to take
there. And she is right. However, there some drawbacks, too. that project on, you’d be glad to work with her on it.
Adjustment Refusals
11 As the regional sales manager for EZL, Inc., you have grease has resulted in the gumming and jamming of the con-
just received an email message from Sebastian Coco, man- veyor system.” You have evidence to the contrary.
ager of the Central States Seed and Feed Company of Kansas Four months ago Soledad Garcia, your salesperson for
City. Mr. Coco says that your EZL #449 grease is responsible the Kansas City area, acquired the account of the Central
for $3,855 of damage to his conveyor system, and he insists States organization. In selling to this account, she had your
that you pay for the repairs. As he explains the problem, “your technical assistance people perform numerous tests for the
lubricating needs of Central States. They recommended that EZL’s advice, citing his 30 years of experience in running
the conveyor be lubricated every 12 hours with EZL #449 this equipment. She warned him about the potential problem
and not every 8 hours, as was the case with the other grease on two occasions, but to no avail. And now the “gumming
they were using. Overlubricating, they explained, would and jamming” has occurred. And they want to be reimbursed
lead to “gumming and jamming” of the system. Even though for their loss?
your EZL #449 was a little higher priced than the other You will refuse, of course, but you will do it tactfully
grease, your people believed that EZL would save money and courteously. You will try to make your explanation so
for Central States. positive and clear that it will be accepted. Even though you
From Ms. Garcia you learned that Tyrone Capaccio, the must decline this unjustified claim, you would like to keep
maintenance supervisor at Central States, openly rejected the account.
12 Today’s mail brings you, the owner/manager of Green instructions of all. The instruction booklet clearly gives this
Thumb Nurseries, a claim from Amelia Placky of Mission warning, boxed and in bold type: “Plant bulbs one month be-
Valley, Texas. You remember Ms. Placky well. A few months fore the average frost date in the fall. Keep refrigerated until
ago she emailed an order for 50 dozen assorted annual spring planting.” If she planted them soon after receiving them, she
bulbs (tulips, daffodils, irises, and the like). You sent them planted them too early. She received the bulbs in early Sep-
to her without delay, and she promptly paid the $405 she tember, and September is a hot month in Texas (average highs
owed for them. In today’s message Ms. Placky notes that she of around 85 degrees). November 15 is the average first frost
planted the bulbs right after she received them (early Sep- date for the area. It is no wonder the bulbs did not survive.
tember) and that they didn’t come up in the spring. She also Because your printed instructions are crystal clear, you are
says she followed your planting instructions and included going to refuse her claim. But you don’t want to belittle or em-
the recommended fertilizer with each bulb. barrass her in the process. She is a good customer, and you want
In checking into the situation, you confirm most of what to keep her. So you’ll explain why you can’t give her money
Ms. Placky says. But she didn’t follow the most important back in a way that will keep her doing business with you.
13 You are the director of convention services for the of 131 members who have reported to me their overpayment.
Pickins House, a large and prestigious hotel. The National Please check your records and refund the difference. You
Association of Appraisers met at your hotel last month. All have their addresses in your registration information. Please
told, almost 1,300 appraisers met for three days to exchange send me verification that you have made the refunds.”
ideas and receive industry information about their work. The You go back to your files to find your information on the
meeting was a profitable one for your hotel. You want these meeting. Yes, you did agree to the rates Ms. Alvarez men-
people back for another convention, and you want them to tioned. But to get them the attendees had to reserve their rooms
tell their friends about your competence, hospitality, and ex- 15 days prior to the meeting. And those arriving after 6:00 P.M.
cellent facilities. had to guarantee their registrations through prepayment by
Today you received a letter from Roberta Alvarez, who credit card. Your check of the 131 people indicates that none of
is executive director for the organization. She reports that them met these requirements. Experience has convinced you
many of the members did not get the convention rates they that if you don’t use these restrictions you often end up with
had been promised. As she stated the problem, “You’ll re- empty rooms. These requirements are standard in the industry.
member that we have a contract for $105 single rooms and You cannot grant this claim. But you want to retain the
$125 doubles. Many of our participants have reported that goodwill of Ms. Alvarez and her large group. And you want
when they checked out they were charged your usual rates a shot at future meetings. Write the message that will accom-
of $140 for a single and $175 for a double. Attached is a list plish these goals. You’ll send it by email.
14 You’ve just received a package in the mail from one You remember this customer. She was on her first trip to
Laketa Young, from a small town in North Carolina. California, and she was enchanted with your stylish, if expen-
In it is the leather jacket that she purchased from the up- sive, clothes. As luck would have it, all your leather goods
scale women’s clothing store where you work, Elaine’s, in were on sale when she visited your store. It was the end of
Laguna Beach, California. With the jacket is a request that the winter season, and this was your last effort to sell the sea-
you refund her money for the jacket, as well as for the cost son’s leather goods before getting in your spring line. And
of shipping the jacket back to you (she had also purchased high-quality goods they were, too—all made by Angaro’s
insurance and delivery confirmation for the package). of Italy. Ms. Young had gotten a $700 jacket for $379. And
it had looked great on her. All in all, you remember feeling back now, how would you sell it? All your winter merchan-
pleased by the experience. dise has been bought up by a discount house, so you don’t
But now Ms. Young reports that the jacket turned out to even have an appropriate rack to display the jacket on. You
be defective. When she got it home and into the daylight, she can’t ship the coat back to Angaro’s for a refund, because
noticed that one panel of the jacket was a somewhat different they won’t agree that the jacket is defective, and they don’t
color than the other panels. You take it over to a window to want to get stuck with last season’s goods either.
look, and while you think you see what she means, the jacket Write Ms. Young to refuse her request while convincing
looks fine to your experienced eye. As a tag on the jacket her that your decision is fair and that she has a high-quality
had said, leather is a natural material and, as such, will con- garment. Unfortunately, you will also have to ask her in what
tain subtle variations in coloring and texture. The panel fits form she wants to pay the $18 that it will cost to ship the
well into the overall look of the jacket. You, therefore, do not jacket, insured and with delivery confirmation, back to her.
want to refund Ms. Young’s money. Moreover, many signs You’ll include a form with the letter that will allow her to
above the sale racks had proclaimed “All sales final,” and resubmit her credit card information if she would like to pay
you had brought this fact to Ms. Young’s attention as well for the shipping this way.
before you rang up the sale. If you were to take the jacket
15 You’re the service manager for IT Solutions, an on-call looked fine. Also, he had asked her if she wanted the two
PC repair and troubleshooting company. Today you received drives immediately, and she had said yes. True, he hadn’t
an email from Susan Patel, whose laptop your company re- pointed out the prices to her, but he had certainly been willing
cently serviced (see problem 48 in Chapter 6). She does not to tell her had she asked. He did tell her that the drives were,
want to pay the $510 bill for the service. Yes, Ray Stampe, in IT Solution’s opinion, the most reliable on the market and
the service person assigned to this job, did recover most of that IT Solutions would guarantee them for three years, which
the files from the damaged hard drive, but Ms. Patel discov- is two years and nine months longer than she could get from
ered after he left that the recovery was not complete. She is any dealer unless she paid for the extra coverage.
still missing some important customer and business informa- All in all, you think that what you are charging is fair. Ray
tion. Also, she complains that the internal and external drives saved Ms. Patel a good bit of trouble and delay by providing
that Ray provided were too expensive. She found out that she the hardware on the spot, and it came with a great warranty.
could have gotten these more cheaply online or at a PC center. As for the unrecovered files, you doubt that there’s anything
She would like Ray to return, at no charge, to try to recover you can do, but you’d be willing to have one of your service
the missing files, and she wants you to match the price for the people try again. But you won’t come to her house—at least,
two drives that she would pay if ordering them online. not without a fee. She’ll need to bring the laptop in, and she
You discuss the situation with Ray and find out several may need to leave it for a day. Write her to let her know that
important things. First, he had asked Ms. Patel before he left this is the best you can do while also making her feel that she
to check the recovered files, and she had told him that they got fair treatment and a good deal overall.
16 As owner of Clark’s Tree Service, you’ve just received customer’s door to discuss the matter with him, but no one
the kind of letter you always hate to get. A customer whose is home. You’ll just have to respond to his letter—which
tree you serviced last fall angrily reports that much of the isn’t all bad, since, if things do get ugly, you’ll want your
tree appears to have died over the winter. He wants you to reply to be on record.
refund his money for the tree trimming, pay for the remov- Write the customer to convey your refusal. Tell him that
al of the tree, and compensate him for the loss of the tree. your service people followed accepted procedures for trim-
You drive by his house to take a look, and there’s no doubt ming the tree, including performing the service in the op-
about it—the tree is so severely compromised that it re- timum season for this kind of tree and removing a conser-
ally should be removed. But you are sure that your people vative amount of the tree’s crown. Tell him what, in your
did a good job. In fact, you supervised them yourself, and estimation, caused the demise of the tree (you can consult
you are a certified arborist. You had advised the customer an Internet source such as the University of Minnesota’s
that the tree, a variety of birch, was very old, and you had Extension Service at <http://www.extension.umn.edu/
recommended such measures as cabling the weak stems to- distribution/horticulture/DG1411.html> for additional logi-
gether, ample fertilizing and watering, protecting the tree cal details). Then tell him what you could do to help him
from severe weather with burlap screens, and keeping deic- solve his problem—namely, remove the dead tree and replace
ing salt away from the roots of the tree. But it looks as if the it with another, hardier type of tree. You would need to talk
severe winter took its toll, breaking off a couple of major with him about his preferences in order to work up an esti-
stems and killing most of what remained. You knock on the mate for these additional services.
17 As Manny Konedeng, customer relations manager The primary reason his claim was denied was that it
for American Family Insurance, you were surprised to get includes an exclusion for dogs with a history of biting. You
the following email from one of your long-time customers, have this exclusion because dog bites account for nearly one-
David Seaton. He sent the following claim arguing for cov- quarter of homeowner’s insurance liability claims, costing
erage of medical expenses related to a dog bite. You thought the industry over $300 million with the average claim over
he clearly understood his homeowner’s coverage after nearly $16,000. To keep the cost of insurance reasonable for all, the
11 years with you. policy has this exclusion. In fact, some companies are even
asking all homeowners to sign liability waivers for dog bites
Manny,
while others are offering discounts for not owning dogs.
I was extremely disappointed to get the rejection of a claim I submitted
Furthermore, according to the Centers for Disease Control,
to you last week to cover the medical expenses for my neighbor who dog bite fatalities are the highest for pit bulls followed by
was bitten by my dog. I believe I am covered by my homeowner’s policy, rottweilers, German shepherds, huskies, and malamutes.
which has $300,000 in liability coverage.
David’s pit bull is in this group of dogs with long histories of
While this bill was for nearly $30,000, it doesn’t come close to the limit. And
the care my neighbor got wasn’t excessive since both her arm and shoulder
biting.
were torn. Additionally, she’s being a very good neighbor, stating that Although your company doesn’t write special policies for
accidents can happen and not suing for pain and suffering or anything else. pit bulls because it would just be too expensive, you might sug-
Five years ago, you covered the expenses when Prince, our old collie, gave a gest other things he could do to prevent future incidents. He
friendly bite in the rear to a neighborhood child not even on our property. This
time it occurred in our own home. I believe you should pay it immediately
could have his dog spayed or neutered, reducing the likelihood
both to keep her goodwill and because it is the right thing to do. of biting. Or he could also get special training for the dog that
Sincerely, teaches it how to interact with other people and animals. And he
David Seaton could help modify aggressive behavior by playing only nonag-
gressive games with it, such as fetch rather than tug-of-war.
As you can tell from David’s letter, he doesn’t understand Feel free to add anything else you think would help
his policy thoroughly. Your job is to educate him while keep- retain your customer’s goodwill but clearly refuse the
ing his goodwill, too. adjustment.
18 As Sara Meersman, customer service representative for He is requesting full reimbursement of his $2,500 shipping
LuggageFree, your job is usually a pleasant one. Most cus- fees and $5,000 as a penalty for the lost sales. His message
tomers report that they are delighted with your competent ser- said that this payment is the only way you can keep him as a
vice, which typically exceeds what they’re promised. Today’s satisfied customer, so you know you will have to work hard
email, however, brought a claim from Lee McLaughlin, an to keep his business when you refuse his claim.
executive with Bee Line Trucking, requesting reimburse- You believe you have sound legal and ethical grounds to
ment for lost business potential based on a delayed shipment stand on when refusing. On your website at <http://www.
of products to a trade show in Miami last August. luggagefree.com> where he completed the request for ser-
Mr. McLaughlin’s message is polite and even mentions vice form, the limitation of your company’s liability is clearly
that he has used your service many times for personal trips for stated. While you will cover physical damage of luggage up
golf outings where his golf clubs arrived in a timely fashion to $1,000, your policy clearly states you will not cover “ad-
every time. Based on this good experience, he decided to use ditional costs incurred by the customer if a shipment is late
your service to ship some of his new wheel service and frame or any other costs outside the cash value.” Furthermore, your
products to exhibit at a trade show. website presents this paragraph in bold and in a very readable
He reported that this trade show is the key one his com- font size. And in checking your records of this shipment, you
pany representatives attend, and they were extremely disap- learned that air traffic all over the Southern Florida area was
pointed that the products did not arrive until the second day delayed that day due to the activity of tropical storm Rebekah.
of the show. In fact, one of their potential customers came You do want to keep Mr. McLaughlin’s business and
by the company’s booth the first day when they were without goodwill, so you’ll give him the choice of 50 percent off his
anything to show and demonstrate. He is convinced this lost next personal use of your service or 10 percent off the next
business cost the company at least $50,000 in net profits. business use.
19 As Owen Smith, manager of customer service for virus when he accidentally answered an incoming call la-
Verizon in your city, you received a request that you hadn’t beled “UNAVAILABLE.” He was so shocked he dropped
encountered before to return a phone. The customer, Colin the phone, and it hasn’t worked right ever since. He wants to
Deftos, wants to cancel his service and return a phone he change to a safer network even though he has six months left
has had nearly 18 months. Colin claims his phone caught a on his contract with you.
While you will refuse this adjustment, you understand to virus attacks. In fact, at this time Bluetooth technology
that a big part of your job in keeping Colin’s business and as well as other enhancements such as ring tones, cameras,
goodwill is one of educating him. There has been a rumor and other additions do make phones more vulnerable to
going around for a couple of years now about a virus being viruses. But the discoverable feature on a Bluetooth phone
caught when one is answering a call; however, it cannot hap- can be turned off, and virus software is already available from
pen this way. In fact, Verizon has had no reports of people both McAfee and Norton and a few other companies to pro-
getting phone viruses through daily use. As of today, there tect these phones from being infected. To keep his goodwill,
are only five known viruses for phones, and usually only you may want to offer Colin a new basic phone (similar to
security experts are interested in them. Additionally, these his old one without enhancements) or $50 off any phone
viruses do little damage and can be easily removed. of his choice over $100 with a two-year renewable service
You do believe that eventually as more phones become contract.
more like minicomputers, they will become more susceptible
Credit Refusals
20 Kim Gao is opening a ladies’ shoe store in a new shop- situation and take care of her needs better than a distant
ping mall in her home town, and apparently she wants sup- supplier.
pliers to finance her. Today, as credit manager for Fifth Your information doesn’t tell you much about Ms. Gao.
Avenue Shoes, Inc., you received her application for credit. Your sales representative in the area tells you that she knows
From the information she supplies you, it is evident that she the woman casually. She reports also that Ms. Gao appears
has everything she needs except money. to be competent and that she has a good reputation. But she
The financial information she sent with her credit appli- also believes that although the new store is in a good loca-
cation does not justify credit. She has very little cash and tion, there is no shortage of ladies’ shoe stores in the area.
apparently plans to finance her business mainly through Now you must write Ms. Gao, refusing credit. In time
her suppliers. Your company simply does not do business you hope to be able to grant it. Meanwhile, you’d like to get
that way. She should get local financing first. After all, her her cash business.
home-town bankers are in a position to understand her
21 Assume that you are the credit manager for Duby’s, an more of the new applicants. You will need some new credit-
importer and wholesaler of Asian china and glassware. The refusal model messages to guide you.
business is conscious of its impact in the industry. Its past You remember from your college training that most cred-
credit policy has tended to be quite liberal; but this policy it refusals must be made to two types of applicants: people
has increased the need for collection efforts, some of which with inadequate capital and people with character shortcom-
have been unsuccessful. As a result of these past policies, ings. You will need a model refusal message for each. Now
delinquent accounts have increased to a danger point. Some- you will write one of these (your instructor will determine
thing must be done about it. And it has been. which). In either case you will be courteous and specific.
Today the store’s management informed you that from You will watch out for needless negatives¸ trite wordings,
now on, credit will be tighter. You will have to screen new and anything brusque. And you’ll try to keep the reader a
applicants closely. This means that you will be turning down friend of the company.
22 For this assignment assume that you are just beginning Dear :
your working career with Chargit, a credit-card company. We at Chargit were pleased to receive your recent application. Based on
The company is national and international in scope and a the information we have received about you, however, we respectfully
regret that we must deny your request.
widely accepted symbol of credit buying. The company dif- We trust that you will understand our position and hope you continue to
fers from other such companies in that it offers credit only to progress in your career.
top-rated applicants. It favors young professionals—people Sincerely
on the way up the success ladder.
Today your boss gives you your first major assignment. So now you must rewrite this form message. It’s your
“I want you to revise our standard refusal message,” she tells first chance to show your new employer what you can do.
you. “It was written years ago, and just doesn’t project the Be sure to include all the information that is legally required
image we want.” Here is the old message: where you live.
23 You work in the business office for a Home Bodies the last three years. She lists her occupation as “Freelance
store, part of a large national chain that sells home furnish- Interior Designer,” so she works for herself. She estimates
ings, maintenance supplies, and light-construction materials her annual income at $30,000, but there’s no one who can
to do-it-yourself home decorators and remodelers. The chain confirm or dispute this figure (your company is not autho-
has its own credit program. LeeAnn Thomas recently sub- rized to access personal income tax information). You sus-
mitted an application to open a Home Bodies account with a pect that it is not a reliable indicator of her current income
$3,000 line of credit. You hate to say no, but you’re going to anyway since she just moved here and probably has not yet
have to. generated many clients.
While headquarters gives each store some latitude for ac- Your company’s practice is to write each credit appli-
cepting or rejecting such applications, it has the following cant a letter, conveying the good or bad news. Write to Ms.
general guidelines: applicants must have lived at the current Thomas to explain why she cannot be granted the line of
address for at least six months, have moved not more than credit she seeks. Offer her $500 credit for now (at 10.5 per-
twice in the previous three years, have a steady job with a cent interest) and tell her what she needs to do to increase
stable company, and earn an income of at least eight times her chances of a higher limit in the future. Try to win her
the credit line they’re requesting. business even though you cannot approve her request at
According to her application, Ms. Thomas has lived in this time. Your boss, the accounts manager for your store,
your city only four months, and she moved three times over will sign the letter.
24 As office manager for a large dental clinic, you some- and the news wasn’t good. He recently defaulted on a car
times purchase credit checks on patients with little or no den- loan and the car was repossessed. He also has a poor record
tal insurance who nevertheless need expensive work done. of paying his other bills. While you wish you could set up a
These checks, perfomed by major credit bureaus, tell you the payment plan for him, you do not have any confidence that
patient’s bill and loan payment history and current degree of he would abide by the terms of the plan.
debt, as well as whether or not the patient has ever declared Send Mr. Gami a letter telling him of your decision. For-
bankruptcy, been sued, or been convicted of a crime. This tunately, not all his dental work needs to be done right away.
information is useful in the case of new patients who have If he will return for a free follow-up to his first diagnostic ap-
not yet built up a strong record of paying their bills. pointment, the doctor can work out a treatment plan for him
Today you ordered such a check on Sushil Gami, a new that will stagger the work over several months. You can also
patient who needs to have work done that will cost $2,500. point him in the direction of several websites that describe
He indicated on your financing request form that he makes dental “credit cards” and other options for those with little
a good salary, but from a company that offers no dental in- or no dental insurance. Make your decision and the reasons
surance. As with all new patients requesting financing, you behind it clear while demonstrating genuine interest in help-
ordered a credit check on Mr. Gami from a credit bureau, ing Mr. Gami get the dental care he needs.
25 As Sharon Garbett, owner and operator of a private, local you to extend him full credit for his tuition and books at your
software applications training company, Garbett and Associ- school; he promises to pay you on a regular schedule once he
ates, you review all student applications. In most cases you finishes the program and begins working.
are looking to see whether or not the prospective students are While you admire his initiative, you are not a bank. And
ready for your training, but an application you reviewed today plenty of them turned him down for lack of collateral or a
from Matt Gregory was his financial application. co-signer. Since you think he’s capable, you don’t want to
After graduating from college five years ago with a degree discourage him even though you will refuse credit. You can
in fine arts, Matt has been working in theater and is interested in offer him part-time assistant work during the afternoon to
moving into the business side of theater. His theater experience cover the cost of books and class materials. That would al-
is well rounded, which when combined with some business low him to take day classes and work nights in the theater
skills should prepare him well for this kind of work. However, business office, earning the money he need is for tuition as
at the moment he is unable to get any kind of financial aid. He well as giving him the experience he needs to get an even
has tried numerous public and private sources, including both better position once he finishes your program. Furthermore,
scholarships and loans. His persuasive message to you asked he could start his new career path debt free.
26 As Don Price, owner of Price Acura, you received from your new MDX. She’s asking that the contract be amended
one of your young new sales staff, Carol Weissmann, an email to allow the client to prepay for 10,000 additional miles on
concerning a transaction she closed on a lease agreement for credit. Apparently the client recomputed his average weekly
driving miles and discovered that if he drove at that rate for the client told Carol that he has steep college bills to pay,
the length of the lease he’d run over his limit by 10,000– which is the reason for his decision to lease rather than buy
15,000 miles. So he has asked her to modify the lease terms a new car. At this point his credit score is very low; in fact,
to include 10,000 prepaid miles. He realizes that this change in most cases you would not have leased to him. But with a
will raise his monthly payment a bit, but he’d rather pay new job and college behind him, he looks like a good risk
the higher rate than be hit with a large fee at the end of the to you. But pushing his credit line further at this time is too
lease. risky. So while you will refuse her client the credit now, you
On checking the client’s credit record, you learned he is can suggest that he consider renegotiating the terms after
a recent college graduate with only part-time work in his job one year of prompt payments. Or he could be reminded that
history. While his new employer has verified his employment, he can always purchase the car at the end of the lease.
Negative Announcements
27 For this assignment you are the executive assistant to time for us to get back to reality,” President Delaware tells
Pierre Delaware, president of EconoAir Airlines. EconoAir be- you. “We must reduce this award to one point for one mile
gan operations only two years ago and has made great strides of travel. That’s what the other airlines do. This two-for-one
in its short existence. At the beginning, it offered various incen- plan is costing us too much.”
tives to lure passengers to its airplanes. Apparently, the incen- President Delaware then assigned you the task of writ-
tives worked since currently the company is solidly entrenched ing members, announcing the decision to reduce the mileage
in the travel business. In spite of its solid growth, however, given in its frequent flyer program. You see your problem as
EconoAir is beginning to experience the effects of competi- a difficult one. EconoAir is reducing its rewards primarily
tion in the industry. Profits have begun to decline. President because of its need to save money. The members of the plan
Delaware is determined to turn things around by taking steps to have nothing to gain from the change. So how will you ex-
avoid the problems experienced by some of the other airlines. plain the change to their satisfaction? Will you appeal to the
One of the incentives EconoAir used at the beginning members’ reason? Their sense of fair play? You will have to
was a “double mileage” award in its frequent-flyer program. think through the situation carefully before selecting a strat-
Specifically, this meant that it gave two points rather than the egy. Then you will write the announcement.
conventional one for every mile flown with EconoAir. “It’s
28 You are secretary to the board of regents of Central and hard. They concluded that given the university’s finan-
State University. At today’s meeting, the board approved a cial status, this was the only feasible route. Anyway, as one
plan to build new parking lots and generally to better control board member put it, “We don’t have to face the faculty. Our
the parking situation. As a means of paying for a part of the trusty secretary will write the announcement that will inform
construction costs, the board approved a plan to charge fac- them. He/she is gifted with words. I’m sure he/she will make
ulty for parking privileges. For parking in the interior streets them understand.”
and small interior lots, the charge will be $40 a month. The Using your imagination logically to fill in any missing in-
charge for parking in the streets and small lots in the perim- formation, now prove that the regent is right. (In using your
eter areas will be $25 a month. No charge will be made for imagination, be guided by what you can see at your univer-
parking in the large lots adjacent to the campus. sity. Your may want to include a map with your message
Knowing that charging for the privilege of parking would showing the parking areas.)
be protested vigorously, the board debated the matter long
29 For this assignment you are assistant to the president President Beckwith explains the matter to you in these
of Beckwith Manufacturing Company, Inc. For more than words: “We are going to leave this old plant. Just too obso-
30 years Beckwith has been manufacturing replacement lete and too expensive to renovate. In the future, we’ll do all
parts for the automobile industry in two plants—the original our manufacturing in Detroit. We have sufficient unused ca-
one in Flint and a relatively new one in Detroit. You have pacity there. As you know, sales have declined significantly
known for some time that things haven’t been going well in anyway. Too much competition. Now we’ll have to break the
the old Flint plant—that it was becoming obsolete. You have news to our employees here in Flint. As well as we can, we
also known that it would have to be either renovated exten- will transfer to Detroit those who choose to go there. We will
sively or abandoned. Today you receive the news you have do this based on our need for their skills and their seniority.
been anticipating from your boss, Amos T. Beckwith. We cannot guarantee everybody the level of employment
they have now, but we’ll do the best we can. For those After giving you some additional information (which you
approaching retirement age, we’ll work out an early retire- may construct from your logical imagination), Mr. Beckwith
ment package. And for those who don’t choose to transfer or assigns you the task of writing the announcement for his sig-
whom we just can’t use, we’ll give three months’ terminal nature that will go to all employees at the Flint plant. An-
pay. No, we cannot afford to pay any moving expenses, but other announcement, which you will write later, will inform
this isn’t a long move.” the Detroit employees of what is happening.
30 The Brothers Club is a not-for-profit organization in have tended to gravitate toward the more upscale, expen-
your city. It is loosely affiliated with the Catholic Church, sive club. As a result of this lost business, it has become too
but its primary mission is social, not religious. It runs many costly to maintain the exercise rooms and equipment at the
programs for disadvantaged youth, including teen discus- club. Also, upkeep on the club’s extensive facilities has been
sion groups, basketball tournaments, summer camps, and a drain on money that the board feels would have been better
the like. The club is funded largely by the United Way spent on the youth whom the Club is intended to serve. Mov-
and by corporate and individual donations, but it has also ing to a smaller location with more limited facilities reserved
been operating as a private athletic club, whose members for the youth alone would make the club more financially
have been paying a fee (anywhere from $300 to $450 per viable and also more focused on its central mission.
year, depending on the level of membership) for use of the Your boss, the executive director of the Brothers Club,
facilities. has asked you, the assistant director, to write a letter an-
The board of directors for the Club recently met and de- nouncing these changes to the athletic-club members. She
cided to discontinue the athletic-club part of the operation as has also discussed with you how the members will be reim-
well as to move the organization to a new location. Two fac- bursed for the time remaining on their yearly memberships,
tors influenced this decision. First, there have been too few so you will give the members this important information as
paying customers over the last several years. The facilities well. Write the letter for your boss’s signature, and see if you
are functional but not terribly attractive, and the equipment can minimize your readers’ disappointment while also keep-
is not as high-tech as that of the nearby YMCA. Customers ing them interested in supporting the club.
31 As Customer Service Supervisor at Billing Software, not related to business. You discussed your findings with
Inc., you need to send an email to your staff announcing a your boss, one of the owners of the company, and he agreed
new policy affecting them. Specifically, the company is go- that it’s time to monitor service calls, as so many companies
ing to begin randomly monitoring its help-desk representa- already do.
tives’ telephone calls. This monitoring will give you a more What makes the situation complex is that you do want
dependable way to evaluate trainees, but the main reason for your staff to continue to be cordial on the phone and gener-
the new policy is that your people are spending too much ous with their time and information. Quality customer ser-
time on the phone with the callers. You routinely ask your vice is one edge you have over the competition, and you
clients—businesses that use your software for their billing don’t want to do anything that will turn your helpful, friend-
procedures—to evaluate your services, and lately these eval- ly staff into impersonal automatons who don’t fully solve
uations have included some complaints about being put on the callers’ problems. You also realize that an occasional off-
hold too much and too long. There’s no good reason for the topic discussion can relieve the tedium of answering calls
clogged phone lines; you have sufficient staff for the number all day. Still, staying too long on the phone with one caller
of clients you have, your software is not that complicated, can keep the next one from getting the help he or she needs
and all help-desk staff are thoroughly trained on the soft- in timely fashion. And your company promotes efficiency as
ware. To find out the cause of the problem, you hung around one of the main benefits of its software.
the help-desk area more than usual over the last couple of Write your staff an email that will help them receive the
weeks (often without being noticed), and you learned that news of the policy as positively as possible so that you will
your people often talk with clients too long and about matters get the reactions you want, not the ones you don’t.
32 The employees of [you decide] have been making tuition costs. But this generous benefit is about to be cut back.
good use of one of your most attractive company benefits— The cost of tuition has risen dramatically nationwide (think
namely, tuition reimbursement for college coursework. For of your own tuition bills, or check the Internet for facts about
courses approved by the company (that is, courses that are other schools). The costs of running a business keep rising,
related to employees’ current or likely future positions in the too, as energy bills increase, technology has to be updated,
company), employees have been paying only 33 percent of and health coverage takes bigger and bigger bites out of
revenue. At a recent meeting, the executives of the company that are likely to be approved under the new policy. On
targeted tuition coverage as part of a general cost-cutting the other hand, at least some tuition coverage does remain,
campaign. Your boss, the VP of human resources, has asked and—at least for now—none of the other benefits are being
you to write an announcement to the employees regarding affected. Plus, online courses are often cheaper than those
the tuition cutbacks. offered on-site, so maybe employees can find ways to offset
In the message, you will need to state that the company the increased costs of taking courses.
will now cover only 40 percent of the tuition for approved Figure out how to write this message so that you give
courses. You know that this will be particularly bad news for employees a clear sense of the facts and their options. Help
those who are in the middle of a degree program, but there them to feel positive about the company and encouraged to
were never any guarantees that the coverage would remain continue to seek out relevant college coursework—which,
at its current level, and the change simply can’t be helped. after all, does save the company in-house training costs and
You will also need to inform the employees that there will be results in a better qualified workforce. Your boss has left it to
more rigorous screening of tuition-reimbursement requests. you to decide the best way to distribute this announcement.
You should probably give examples of the kinds of courses
33 As your workplace is becoming more diverse in race, improve the morale of those who speak only English while
religion, and culture, you are beginning to realize that in or- making all transactions transparent as well. And it would
der for employees to work together more effectively you are greatly improve the collaborations that go on daily in the
going to have to stress similarities rather than differences in workplace.
all your business practices. And just as English has been a You know that courts have traditionally upheld English-
unifying aspect throughout United States history as well as only workplace policies because they are not seen as discrimi-
in the world of business, it should help unite your company’s natory. So write the announcement of an English-only policy
staff as well. You believe an English-only policy would help in a way that bilingual speakers will not find offensive.
34 Your employees have always searched for Internet con- also release beta products that vary widely in quality. There-
tent useful to your business, and they seem both to enjoy fore, you have decided to implement a new policy restrict-
doing it and to be the first to use what they find. This practice ing the use of web-based beta applications. However, you
has helped give your business a reputation for innovative do not want to discourage forward-looking work, so you are
work, easily responsible for generating over half your new setting up a system in which those testing particular beta ap-
business this year. But lately many of your employees have plications regularly can record their experience with them
consumed hours of valuable time in bad experiences with on a blog you have set up for this purpose. Employees will
new beta versions of Web 2.0 applications. be required to check this blog of users of these applications
While some of these applications work beautifully from before deciding to use these new applications.
the start, others crash and freeze the users’ computers on a While this announcement will mean users of these new ap-
regular basis, requiring hours of troubleshooting to get back plications need to be a bit more proactive in assuring the safety
in business. And there seems to be no consistent guideline to of their computers, the new policy is aimed at saving the user
follow in determining which ones work well and which ones time in the long run by learning from others’ firsthand expe-
don’t. Big companies like Microsoft and Google release riences. Write the announcement so it will have the desired
betas that range from raw to polished, and small companies effect while continuing to encourge employee innovation.
35 Today’s mail brought an anonymous note tattling on sitting well with you. Letting people use small supplies for
staff who use the new color copier to make personal wrap- personal use might suggest it’s OK to appropriate other items
ping paper for their holiday gifts. Apparently, the Gap pub- as well. So you need to let your staff know that personal
lished a gift guide on its website outlining how to create use of the copier is not appropriate. You can remind them
wrapping paper on color copiers. It took only one employee of both the business and ethical reasons for refraining from
doing it and showing others the beautiful result to have the practice. But you don’t want to be viewed as miserly at
others follow. this time of the year, so you’ll include a $10 gift card for the
At first it seemed clever, and the cost could probably be neighborhood copy center to send along with the bad news.
absorbed without much trouble. But the precedent it sets isn’t