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Carla Bolivar

Mrs. Newlon

English 122 | Reflections

9 May 2020

Reflections

Professionalism:

I truly believe that I deserve an A in this class for the following reasons. I was always in class

and I never missed a day in class. I participated in class when it came to work in groups such as

peer review or writing our own rubrics. I always arrived at class in time and completed my work

that was needed for the class in time. Every single class I tried to come prepared and if I needed

to bring something, I always brought it with me. If I had questions or I needed to talk to you I

would talk to you after class or even one time I went in during your office hours to talk about my

ethnography. I truly tried everything in my power to do well on this online class and I tried to

reflect this in my writing to the best of my abilities.

Ethnography: Emerging

The goal of the original ethnography was to figure out what characteristic’s child

caregivers needed to provide to be able to care for children. I partnered up with Laura to

figure out what makes a good child caregiver. We worked in areas where there happened

to be childcare. There are a lot of stereotypes when it comes to child caregivers such as

being older, married, white, females. But we believe that anyone including men are more
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then capable of taking care of children. There are a lot of stereotypes when it comes to

men taking care of children such as they are not trustworthy, capable, and caring as a

woman. We wanted to show the audience that anyone can take care of children, but they

need certain characteristics. The audience is targeted to people who want to learn more

about the proper characteristics of a child caregiver so it could include teachers, parents,

even companies that care for children, so they know what exactly to look for. We

changed our essay and repurposed it into an infographic because we wanted to explain

the needed information in a simple way with images. We both have stronger in

explaining what is needed in an infographic versus an essay which is why we decided to

repurpose it together. For this I met all my personal goals/outcomes. 1st be able to

communicate my ideas better, 2nd finding the correct research that applies, 3rd analyze

and summarize important information, 4th write in different styles of writing, clarified

structure and paragraph, and 5th , get extra help with revising and planning. The

information was repurposed to communicate better the goals of the project such as

anyone can be a caregiver and towards the bottom, we dedicated it to men who are

caregivers and the stereotypes they often faced. We compiled large amount of

information and only summarized what is important from the essay to the infographic

which qualifies as different styles of writing. The research and sources needed all applied

in the infographic since only the important highlights of the paper. Lastly, we only

needed to revise two times and get outside help to accomplish the assignment.

Op-ed: Proficient

The goal of the Op-ed was to try to write an opinionated article where I try to convince

the audience that the zero-tolerance policy violates the 8th amendment. The audience is targeted
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to people who want to believe that the Trump administration has done nothing wrong and to

democratic people to make them aware of the treatment of immigrants. The audience has stayed

the same throughout the paper because my goals remained the same I just needed to be more

opinionated. I needed to revise a bit from the original. The original had a lot of sources just to

show that I did my research shows ethos because and I took my time to plan out and research

what I wanted to communicate. My pathos consisted of having an emotional connection to those

families affected by the policy. It was upsetting to see their mistreatment, so I wanted to write

about them. My logos is the arguments I created in trying to prove that their mistreatment due to

a policy violated their rights and I try to make logical arguments to why it was wrong overall.

When I had to revise the second time around, I needed to add more of my opinion instead of

letting the sources talk for me so I shorten quotes and put my opinion in the papers. For this

assignment all my I met all of my personal goals/outcomes. 1st be able to communicate my ideas

better, 2nd finding the correct research that applies, 3rd analyze and summarize important

information, 4th write in different styles of writing, clarified structure and paragraph, and 5th, get

extra help with revising and planning. I accomplished it. For example, in this section of the

intro/thesis I communicate what I will bring up in the paper which also accomplishes the

structure and paragraphing of the essay. Different writing style I needed to add was more opinion

for this essay and I revised this paper at least three times and even talked reached out to the tutor

for extra help in helping plan and revise structure of the paper overall. In the second paragraph I

grabbed a lot of information and only wrote about what was important and needed to be

highlighted since the second paragraph is background info. Correct research and sources are

found in each paragraph to make the argument stronger.

Reporting Experience: Mastered

The purpose of this infographic was to bring broad background information about

undocumented immigrants. I decided to do an infographic because I am good at designing and

organizing pictures and information in a presentable way. Very little was changed because it was

mastered. The only thing that was done for this paper was adding citations at the end of the

infographics. The targeted audience for this infographic is for people who want to learn more

background information about undocumented immigrants. My ethos consists of doing proper

research and using ACC database to look up broad background information. My pathos to the

subject is knowing people who are undocumented and learning their struggles about living in

America without papers. My logos were using credible sources from the ACC database. For this

I met all my personal goals/outcomes. 1st be able to communicate my ideas better, 2nd finding

the correct research that applies, 3rd analyze and summarize important information, 4th write in

different styles of writing, clarified structure and paragraph, and 5th , get extra help with revising

and planning. The information on their communicated simple facts and background information

about the subject and this is found in places such as the diagrams. Correct information related to

background is the only thing on the infographic. I compiled a ton of information and picked out

the highlights of important info such as how they can apply for different visas. The structure

reads easily going down and it follows the pictures along with what was written.

Rhetorical Analysis: Deficient

Purpose: The purpose of this assignment was to deeply analyze and understand why the

author Blake wrote about the zero-tolerance policy and his opinion about it. The goal was to

prove or show that the author was either successful or failed to persuade their targeted audience.

In the original I lacked a lot of components such as easing reader into the topic, body flow,
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balance in summarizing and analysis, missing purpose, Audience, purpose. The main issue I

seemed to have was that I was doing more summarizing and talking about what he did as an

author instead of talking about why he did it. I needed to go back to the structure of my paper

and make sure that the only things that are talked about in the paper were relevant and I needed

to add some of the missing components that I mentioned earlier. My ethos is doing background

research on this paper and trying to learn and understand what happened during this time period

and what shaped Blakes writing. My pathos to his paper is being persuaded by his writing and

having his paper influence my emotions about the zero-tolerance policy. It shows me that his

paper truly was persuasive since it invokes some of my emotions as it did for many other people.

The type of logos used in this paper with arguments it. I met all my personal goals/outcomes. 1st

be able to communicate my ideas better, 2nd finding the correct research that applies, 3rd analyze

and summarize important information, 4th write in different styles of writing, clarified structure

and paragraph, and 5th , get extra help with revising and planning. In the first draft I struggled to

communicate what I was trying to tell my audience because I summarized more then told them

my ideas and what I wanted to tell them. An example where I fixed my paper to be more

communitive then the original draft was by important things in the first paragraph such as

purpose, audience, and context. I used the correct sources and research such as in paragraph four

where I talked about Blake’s ethos and I needed to find information and only add what is

important in the paper which also concerned compiling the correct information. I rewrote my

paper and instead of just summarizing everything I added more analysis of what the author is

trying to apply such as ethos, pathos, logos, and strength in argument. I rewrote this entire paper

and revised it at least 3 times even reaching out the tutor for extra help.

Argument Analysis: Proficient

The overall goal for the argument analysis was to analyze The Innocent Man

documentary and to show people that they did not agree with the death penalty since it could

cause a lot of irreversible effects. I was able to come up with a decent structure for the paper.

The thesis was the structure I decided to write about. That stayed the same throughout the paper

however certain components such as the analyzing part needed to be enforced. It was a struggle

writing the why instead of the what of the paper. Summarizing was an issue because I was

unsure about how much information I needed to tell the audience to make sure that they had all

the necessary background to understand what was going on. However, it was pointed out to me

that I summarized way more then I analyzed. The lack of explanation caused the paper to not be

at the level it needed to be. The audience is targeted to people who want to know more about the

producer’s motives and understand why this piece of film was made. I have ethos on this film

because I watched it and did background research of what the producer was trying to prove. The

pathos of is having an emotional connection to the documentary shown. It had an impact on my

opinion about the death penalty and brought awareness that I have never even known about. The

logos used were based off what the documentary provided and other outside sources. For this I

met all my personal goals/outcomes. 1st be able to communicate my ideas better, 2nd finding the

correct research that applies, 3rd analyze and summarize important information, 4th write in

different styles of writing, clarified structure and paragraph, and 5th, get extra help with revising

and planning. I communicated clearly in the thesis what the structure of my paper was going to

focus on and what the audience should be expecting. I communicate my idea of what I believe

The Innocent Man is trying to persuade their audience. I used the Netflix show as a source since

I’m just analyzing that, so I used what they provide to talk about if they persuaded by an

audience or not. I had to summarize only important information and condense it all so focus only
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on important things since I go off topic a lot. I reduced the pathos paragraph to highlight

important needed information that is part of the indented structure I got 3 different people (Not

from class) to look at my paper and help with the revision and structure of the paper. They

pointed out when I summarized and didn’t analyze enough which was mostly in the body of the

paper.

Argumentative writing experience: Emerging

Purpose: The goal of the paper is to write a persuasive piece based on the topic of

separating children from their parents at the border. I needed to explore and analyzed both sides

of the argument to understand why people may or may not agree with that policy. My original

draft had some grammatical issues, issues with balance of summary and argument, getting of

topic, and not being overly emotional about it. I did not realize how much emotion was in the

paper, so I needed to delete and rewrite a good chuck of my papers to make it less emotional. I

also needed to make the counterarguments more obvious since they were not significant enough

for people to pick them out as counter arguments, so I added a single paragraph dedicated to

counter arguments. The audience this paper is meant for is people who want to why some think

that children should not be separated from their parents at the border. Ethos are doing extensive

research on the subject. Pathos are having an emotional connection to those families negatively

affected and logos are using some statistic and arguments I met all my personal goals/outcomes

for the argumentative writing experience. 1st be able to communicate my ideas better, 2nd finding

the correct research that applies, 3rd analyze and summarize important information, 4th write in

different styles of writing, clarified structure and paragraph, and 5th, get extra help with revising

and planning. I showed clear communication of ideas in my thesis of the paper that explained

what will be argued in the paper and is shows the structure of the paper and what will be talked
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about. I looked for the correct information that fitted my topic and I compiled five different

sources into each paragraph written. For example, the third paragraph contained 2 different

sources that supported more my argument and only important parts of those extensive papers

were used for the strength of the argument. The thesis shows how the structure of the paper

should follow throughout the paper. Again, I struggled more with too much summarizing instead

of being analytic about the paper, so the style of the paper had to be changed into more of using

sources then going off based on opinions. An example of this is paragraph five where I added a

statistic found by General Investigations report about children being sent to homes of known

abused. For this paper I needed to be careful with the sources I used and looked for since not all

of them included strong logs like data or statistics but just strong argumentized debate.