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Writing 1 - Task 1

The graph illustrates the total value of exports and the breakdown of fuel, food, and manufactured goods exported by a country from 2000 to 2005. Overall, the total value of exports increased significantly after a decline in the early years, reaching nearly 450,000 million dollars by 2005. While food exports remained relatively stable below 10,000 million dollars, fuel exports halved from 45,000 million dollars in 2000 to 20,000 million dollars in 2005, and manufactured goods saw a slight increase from just below 20,000 million dollars to just above that amount.

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Writing 1 - Task 1

The graph illustrates the total value of exports and the breakdown of fuel, food, and manufactured goods exported by a country from 2000 to 2005. Overall, the total value of exports increased significantly after a decline in the early years, reaching nearly 450,000 million dollars by 2005. While food exports remained relatively stable below 10,000 million dollars, fuel exports halved from 45,000 million dollars in 2000 to 20,000 million dollars in 2005, and manufactured goods saw a slight increase from just below 20,000 million dollars to just above that amount.

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods
exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Model Answer

The graph shows the value of fuel, food, manufactured goods and the total value of exports in one country from
2000 to 2005.

As we can see the total value of exports grows up during last four years. In year 2000; 2001 and 2002 the total
export was droping down, but after that situation gets better and the total export in year 2005 is nearly 450,000
million dollars.

We can see that the export of food is almost the same for all years, every year below 10,000 millions dollars. The
export of fuel in year 2000 was about 45.000 million dollars but it was getting down and in year 2005 was only half
this amount, what is mean 20.000 millions dollars. Manufactured food in the year 2000 was a little below 20.000
millions dollars and in the year 2005 a little above 20.000 million dollars.

(145 words)

Commentary

Task Achievement

The summary is factually accurate, and statements are supported by relevant data. In some respects, the writer
focuses on the less interesting information in the graph and neglects to highlight more significant features. In
particular, although the overall picture is summarised in the second paragraph, the writer fails to make explicit
comparisons between the different export groups in the final paragraph, or summarise the main trends in those
areas.

The first paragraph restates the task rubric with minor modification, so this loses marks in the assessment and a
penalty is given for being underlength (145 words).

Coherence and Cohesion

Information is organised clearly and logically, and paragraphing is appropriate. Relationships within sentences are
clearly signalled, for example (that) situation in the second paragraph. Phrases are also reduced as appropriate,
for example and in the year 2005 a little above ... .
The answer may have attracted a higher band in this category if more use had been made of Linking Words to
mark topic shifts, e.g. on the other hand in the third paragraph.
Lexical Resource

The range of vocabulary used in this answer is fairly narrow. To some extent this is probably a reflection of its
shortness, but omissions are evident too. The writer does not always seem to use the most appropriate lexis for
this type of summary, and resorts to phrases such as droping down, grows up, and gets better. The range of
adverbs at the writer’s disposal also seems to be limited: using words such as sharply or slightly would have
made a more accurate and suitable response. There is only one isolated spelling error: droping.
Despite some of the inadequacies referred to above, the answer is readily understandable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

In such a short answer there is not much scope for structural range, but the grammar is mainly accurate and
produces an impression of fluency. The main problem is the inconsistent choice of verb forms: the mixture of
present and past tenses is not always appropriate, neither is the mixture of simple and continuous forms: was
droping, was getting down.
Marks

This answer would probably have achieved a Band 5, and may have achieved a Band 6 had it been at the
required length.

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