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The Human Resources department is developing a plan to increase employee retention. Furthermore, three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. As a result, we had to hire temporary staff to fill the position until new staff could be hired. Consequently, many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Therefore, employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources.
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The Human Resources department is developing a plan to increase employee retention. Furthermore, three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. As a result, we had to hire temporary staff to fill the position until new staff could be hired. Consequently, many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Therefore, employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources.
Here is the text with transitional expressions added:
The Human Resources department is developing a plan to increase employee retention. Furthermore, three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. As a result, we had to hire temporary staff to fill the position until new staff could be hired. Consequently, many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Therefore, employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources.
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The Human Resources department is developing a plan to increase employee retention. Furthermore, three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. As a result, we had to hire temporary staff to fill the position until new staff could be hired. Consequently, many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Therefore, employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources.
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COHERENCE
AND COHESION Subtitle OBJECTIVE
Identify the meaning of coherence
and cohesion
Describe a good paragraph;
Use transitional devices in
developing a good paragraph; Read and identify the meaning of the text
I couldn't seem to find the right room
none of them had the number designated on my pass. First, I went at the Department of Verification, then the Department of Misinformation, then some clerk from the Pressure Section advised me to try level eight, but on level eight they ignored me. ORIGINAL TEXT MARK UP
• I couldn't seem to find the right room *I couldn't seem to find the right room [the topic • none of them had the number sentence: all other sentences in this paragraph • designated on my pass. support this idea of confusion and disorientation] — • First, I went at the Department of none of *them [pronoun referring to "room"] had the Verification, number designated on my pass *First [enumeration], *I • then the Department of Misinformation, [pronoun] went up at the Department of Verification, • then some clerk from the Pressure *then [enumeration & transition of addition] the Section advised me to try level eight, Department of Misinformation, *then [enumeration & • but on level eight they ignored me. transition of addition] some clerk from the Pressure Section advised me to try level eight, *but [transition of contrast] on level eight they ignored me. Coherence
Refers to the rhetorical aspects of your
writing, which include developing and supporting your argument, synthesizing and integrating readings, organizing and clarifying ideas.
The term coherence means the overall
understandability of what you write or say. Cohesion
Is focused on the grammatical aspect of
writing.
It refers to the degree to which sentences
are connected so that the flow of ideas is easy to follow. Differences of coherence and cohesion
COHERENCE COHESION Involves Involves a.Introductory paragraph a. Cohesive devices (Transitional b.Logical order of ideas Devices) c.Separate major points by * addition paragraph * comparison d.Topic sentence for each * concession paragraphs * contrast e.Followed by supporting * emphasis sentences * example or illustration * summary * time sequence Read the paragraph below
The ancient Egyptians were masters of preserving dead people's bodies
by making mummies of them. Mummies several thousand years old have been discovered nearly intact. The skin, hair, teeth, fingernails and toenails, and facial features of the mummies were evident. It is possible to diagnose the disease they suffered in life, such as smallpox, arthritis, and nutritional deficiencies. The process was remarkably effective. Sometimes apparent were the fatal afflictions of the dead people: a middle-aged king died from a blow on the head, and polio killed a child king. Mummification consisted of removing the internal organs, applying natural preservatives inside and out, and then wrapping the body in layers of bandages. What is the topic sentence? Are the sentences that follow clearly related to the topic sentence? Is the entire paragraph unified? Does it contain irrelevant details? Read the paragraph below
The ancient Egyptians were masters of preserving dead people's
bodies by making mummies of them. In short, mummification consisted of removing the internal organs, applying natural preservatives inside and out, and then wrapping the body in layers of bandages. And the process was remarkably effective. Indeed, mummies several thousand years old have been discovered nearly intact. Their skin, hair, teeth, fingernails and toenails, and facial features are still evident. Their diseases in life, such as smallpox, arthritis, and nutritional deficiencies, are still diagnosable. Even their fatal afflictions are still apparent: a middle-aged king died from a blow on the head; a child king died from polio. Transitional Expressions Addition again, and, and then, besides, equally important, finally, first, further, furthermore, in addition, in the first place, last, moreover, next, second, still, too
Comparison also, in the same way, likewise, similarly
Concession granted, naturally, of course
Contrast although, and yet, at the same time, but at the same time, despite that, even so, even though, for all that, however, in contrast, in spite of, instead, nevertheless, notwithstanding, on the contrary, on the other hand, otherwise, regardless, still, though, yet. Emphasis Certainly, indeed, in fact, of course Example or Namely, specifically, for example, for instance, thus Illustration Summary all in all, altogether, as has been said, finally, in brief, in conclusion, in other words, in particular, in short, in simpler terms, in summary, on the whole, that is, therefore, to put it differently, to summarize Time Sequence after a while, afterward, again, also, and then, as long as, at last, at length, at that time, before, besides, earlier, eventually, finally, formerly, further, furthermore, in addition, in the first place, in the past, last, lately, meanwhile, moreover, next, now, presently, second, shortly, simultaneously, since, so far, soon, still, subsequently, then, thereafter, too, until, until now, when Use appropriate transitional expression to improve the text
The Human Resources department is
developing a plan to increase employee retention. Three employees resigned from the accounting department last month. We had to hire temporary staff to fill the position until new staff could be hired. Many important accounting tasks went unfinished. Employee retention has become a top priority for Human Resources
