Here is a revised script that addresses some issues in the original:
- Adds more dialogue and description to build suspense and engagement
- Makes the wolf's intentions less obvious from the start
- Adjusts some language to be more natural for children
"Mama, may I take this cake and butter to Grandma?" asked Little Red Riding Hood. "I heard she's feeling poorly."
"Of course, dear," said Mama. "But you must hurry through the forest - it's getting late. And remember, stay on the path."
Little Red Riding Hood put on her red cloak and basket. She skipped into the forest, enjoying the flowers and birds.
But as she
3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the use of the custom shape tool (grass) to create the feathers around the
neck of the chicken. I also like how on the chicken I have added a drop shadow
that allows the head of the chicken to be seen as a separate layer from the body. I
also feel as though the eyes on the chicken are good. Overall I feel that the
chicken is much better than the bear. The reasons for this is because I have added
more detail to the chicken than I have to the bear.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was going to improve anything it would be he use of the gradient tool on the
chicken. I would have also made it so the feathers of the lower body also stuck out
into a 3d shape. For the bear I would have added a drop shadow or gradient tool
to bring out the depth of the bears head from its body. I would also may have
used the custom shape tool to create a more distinct fur around the body of the
bear.
5. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I feel that I have captured the shape and colours his suit. I also feel that I have
captured the elements on his face but I would add more detail to improve
this.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve my work I would created more precise shapes within the beard
and hair. I would also maybe add a gradient to his hair o make it look more
realistic. I would also add more detail to his face (shadows upon the left side
of the face and more wrinkles near to the eyes).
7. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the use of different colours to identify each individual bush
and tree.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was going to do it again I would be more precise when rotoscoping to
ensure that I gain a clear understanding of what the image is (so that different
layers are easier to identify).
9. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the use of gradient overlay to add a range of different patterns over the
top of my font.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do it again I would find an image of better quality to add to the text
I clip masked (image behind the text).
14. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the use of the threshold overlay on the images. I also like how the use of
the hue and saturation tool allowed me to enhance certain colours from the
image.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was going to do it again I would attempt to be more precise when adding
colours to certain parts of the image. For edit 2 I would attempt to add
certain colour certain sections of the image. For example I would add a shade
of dark green to the small bushes on the right hand side of the Image.
16. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the filters I used when editing my images. I also like the use of threshold
to create a faint outline around the subject of my images.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If was going to do it again I would include more attention to detail when
editing my images. I might also attempt to take clearer photos.
18. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the use of the threshold overlay on the image. I also like the small
sections of rotoscoping I added to the the shadows. I also like the font I have
chosen on the text.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do it again I would add a better stroke and drop shadow to the text.
I would maybe add more rotoscope to the image.
23. Proposal
Dimensions
My story will include 8-9 pages
Story Overview
My story is based upon Red riding hood. Red riding hood has been told by her mum
she has to deliver the cakes she has baked to her grandmother on the other side of the
forest. On her journey she hears weird and unusual noises. What red riding hood
doesn’t know is that she is being followed by a monster. When Red riding hood arrives
at her grandmothers house things don’t feel normal. Her grandmother has an unusual
amount of eyes and teeth and a scaly skin. After a conversation with the monster, the
monster reveals its identity but just before the monster can get to red riding hood a
woodman appears to save the day.
Export Format
JPEG
Advantages: Great for Graphic artwork and have a short file transfer time.
Disadvantages: May give loss of image quality the more the file is opened.
24. Deadline
15th January.
Audience
The target audience for my story is for children ages 1+. The book will be for both
genders. The price of the book will be relatively low therefore people of all classes
can purchase the book. The book will be for all races and will be sold within the UK
first then later branch out to other countries around the world.
Production Methods
The production methods will consist of working with Adobe Photoshop to
rotoscope and colour the images for my story. The colours of my story will be bright
and vibrant creating a positive feel to the story. The font of the text will be in Sans
serif to create a bold and clear text so the children are able to easily read it.
25. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
You have chosen a good export format with a good
advantage and disadvantage about using JPEG. I
also like your target audience as its very wide and
will include a lot of people.
The proposal needs completing, I would also use
an actual age range instead of using 1+ because
that isn’t specific enough as I feel like the type of
book you will be creating isn’t going to be sold to
adults for their own personal use, its likely to be
bought for their children.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have brainstormed a good range of ideas. I like
how you have talked about text style. I think you
have come up with some reasonably good ideas.
I think you need to elaborate on some of the points
however, As it appears rather vague. You could
also try talking about colours and textures you plan
to use, or whether you want the pages to be busy
with colour and subjects or whether you want a
more minimalistic looking book.
26. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
• Good advantages/disadvantages of your
chosen file format.
• Good chosen age/demographic for a children’s
book.
• Give a few more advantages and
disadvantages or elaborate on your given
points.
• Decide what the dimensions of the book will be.
• Write a story overview.
• More detail on your production techniques. Talk
about what tools and techniques in Photoshop
are going to help you create your children’s
book.
• Explain why you chose the audience and
expand on your given points.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
• Make some moodboards to help develop the
ideas that you have. Do one for each character
and each scene you have in your book.
27. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
You have thought about your target audience, both
a suitable age and gender. Also, you have chosen a
good file type for your final product.
Story Overview – I don’t know what your story is
about so I can’t give you feedback on that.
Production Methods – make sure to talk about the
shortcuts and tools that you will use in your
production process.
Audience – talk about the geodemographic of your
book, so how it will be sold in English speaking
countries but can be translated.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have some good ideas on your mind map with
some branches coming of them explaining what
you mean further.
There is no mood board so I can’t see what your
characters would look like. Insert your idea
generations mind map into your pro-forma so
everything is together.
28. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
Need to complete all work.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with all the feedback given to me. In particular I feel that I need to complete my
story overview witch was mentioned in all feedbacks given.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I did not disagree with any of it.
32. Original Script
"My dear, put on your red cloak with the hood to it, and take this cake and this pot of butter to your
Grannie, and ask how she is, for I hear she is ailing."
Now little Red Riding-Hood was very fond of her grandmother, who made her so many nice things, so she
put on her cloak joyfully and started on her errand. But her grandmother lived some way off, and to reach
the cottage little Red Riding-Hood had to pass through a vast lonely forest. However, some wood-cutters
were at work in it, so little Red Riding-Hood was not so very much alarmed when she saw a great big wolf
coming towards her, because she knew that wolves were cowardly things.
And sure enough the wolf, though but for the wood-cutters he would surely have eaten little Red Riding-
Hood, only stopped and asked her politely where she was going.
"I am going to see Grannie, take her this cake and this pot of butter, and ask how she is," says little Red
Riding-Hood.
"Does she live a very long way off?" asks the wolf craftily.
"Not so very far if you go by the straight road," replied little Red Riding-Hood. "You only have to pass the
mill and the first cottage on the right is Grannie's; but I am going by the wood path because there are such
a lot of nuts and flowers and butterflies."
"I wish you good luck," says the wolf politely. "Give my respects to your grandmother and tell her I hope
she is quite well."
And with that he trotted off. But instead of going his ways he turned back, took the straight road to the
old woman's cottage, and knocked at the door.
Rap! Rap! Rap!
"Who's there?" asked the old woman, who was in bed.
"Little Red Riding-Hood," sings out the wolf, making his voice as shrill as he could. "I've come to bring dear
Grannie a pot of butter and a cake from mother, and to ask how you are."
"Pull the bobbin, and the latch will go up," says the old woman, well satisfied.
So the wolf pulled the bobbin, the latch went up, and—oh my!—it wasn't a minute before he had gobbled
up old Grannie, for he had had nothing to eat for a week.
33. Original Script
http://www.worldoftales.com/Little_Red_Riding_Hood.html
Then he shut the door, put on Grannie's nightcap, and, getting into bed, rolled himself well up in the clothes.
By and by along comes little Red Riding-Hood, who had been amusing herself by gathering nuts, running after butterflies,
and picking flowers.
So she knocked at the door.
Rap! Rap! Rap!
"Who's there?" says the wolf, making his voice as soft as he could.
Now little Red Riding-Hood heard the voice was very gruff, but she thought her grandmother had a cold; so she said:
"Little Red Riding-Hood, with a pot of butter and a cake from mother, to ask how you are."
"Pull the bobbin, and the latch will go up."
So little Red Riding-Hood pulled the bobbin, the latch went up, and there, she thought, was her grandmother in the bed;
for the cottage was so dark one could not see well. Besides, the crafty wolf turned his face to the wall at first. And he
made his voice as soft, as soft as he could, when he said:
"Come and kiss me, my dear."
Then little Red Riding-Hood took off her cloak and went to the bed.
"Oh, Grandmamma, Grandmamma," says she, "what big arms you've got!"
"All the better to hug you with," says he.
"But, Grandmamma, Grandmamma, what big legs you have!"
"All the better to run with, my dear."
"Oh, Grandmamma, Grandmamma, what big ears you've got!"
"All the better to hear with, my dear."
"But, Grandmamma, Grandmamma, what big eyes you've got!"
"All the better to see you with, my dear!"
"Oh, Grandmamma, Grandmamma, what big teeth you've got!"
"All the better to eat you with, my dear!" says that wicked, wicked wolf, and with that he gobbled up little Red Riding-
Hood.
34. Break down of original script.
• Red riding hood is told by her mother to take cake and butter to her ill
grandmother.
• The only way she can get there Is through the dark woods.
• Red riding hood comes across the wolf who asks where she is going.
• Red riding hood leaves the wolf and makes her way to her grandmothers
and the wolf also makes his way to the grandmothers house.
• Wolf gets there first and tricks the grandmother into thinking he's red
riding hood.
• Wolf proceeds to eat the grandmother then dress himself in her clothes.
• Red riding hood enters her house and questions grandmother (the wolf)
for having distinct eyes, legs, ears, arms and teeth.
• Just as the wolf jumps to eat red riding hood the woodcutter jumps in
front of the wolf to save red riding hood and scare the wolf away.
35. Final Script
“Take these cakes and butter to you ill grandmother” said red riding hood’s mother. “Take
the safe route and whatever you do, don't go into the woods”.
“But the woods are fun and have lots of flowers in them” said red riding hood.
“I said no, I want you to get there safe” said the mother. Red riding hood set of on her
journey to her grandmothers house when she came across a dark figure amongst the trees
in the woods. “Hello?” called red riding hood.
Out from the woods came a large alien asking where red riding hood was going. “I'm going
to my grandmothers house to check If she is ok” replied red riding hood. “Where are you
from?” she asked the alien. “My space ship crashed and we are stuck here until it gets
fixed” he said. “Is there anyway I can help ?” she asked. The alien didn’t reply and made
his way back to woods where he came from. Red riding hood proceeded to make her way
to her grandmothers house. The alien knocked at the grandmothers house and gave a high
pitch call “Its me red riding hood, here with cakes for you”. “The doors unlocked, just come
in” called the grandmother. The alien bursts through the door and eats the grandmother.
Eventually red riding hood reaches her grandmothers house. She knocks at the door and
calls “Its me red riding hood, can I come in?”. “The doors open, let yourself in” Says the
alien in high pitch voice. Red riding hood enters. “What large eyes you have grandmother”
she said. “All the better for seeing you my dear” replied the alien. “Why do you have four
arms?’ asked red riding hood. “All the better for hugging you my dear” it replied. “What
large ears you have” she asked. “all the better for hearing with my dear”. “What large teeth
you’ve got” she asked. “All the better for eating you” says the alien as it leaps forward
towards red riding hood. The woodsman burst through the door and jumps in front of the
alien. The alien runs away revealing grandmother hidden in the wardrobe.