Gender Inequality Essay Planning PEE

Evaluate the view that gender equality has been
achieved in Mauritius.
Planning the essay - Choosing factors
Before you write your essay you must decide what factors and
examples are relevant and will enable you to answer the
question.
Allow one paragraph for each of the factors you have

chosen.
For example:
- Glass ceiling
- Gender pay gap
- Woman’s role in the family
- The successes/failures of Government responses
to inequality:
Plan your essay by including the factors you have chosen in your introduction as a
‘list sentence’
Introduction
Introductions at Higher level are designed to set the scene

for the rest of your essay in a concise way.
1. Pick out the main topic(s) of the question and give

any necessary background information.
2. List sentence: Include the main topics as, “ a list

of factors that this essay will consider…”
3. Signpost your essay (suggest what your

overall conclusion will be)
Introduction Example:
Information about
In the UK today men and women have different health, the main to pic of
the essay, ‘gGender
inequality’
employment and social prospects.
In order to make a decision on the nature of gender inequality
List sentencetoday this
(plan the essay will consider the glass ceiling, a woman’s role
essay)
as a carer for children, and the successes and failures of
Government legislation (Equality Act 2010, 50/50 Campaign and
reporting the Gender Pay Gap 2018).
Overall, due to continuing discrimination in the workplace, gender

Signpost equality has not been achieved.
Writing the essay
TIPS!
Avoid using any emotive language, e.g: “It is

absolutely shocking that…”
Avoid referring to yourself, e.g: “In my opinion…”
Avoid using ‘sweeping’ statements, e.g: “All women

face this discrimination in the workplace.”
Generally, you will pick up marks as follows:
You will write one detailed paragraph for each of the factors you have listed in
your introduction.
The key is to remember is that you must answer the question throughout.
Gender inequality HAS Gender inequality HAS NOT been resolved…
been resolved…
You might want to follow this structure to do so:
P – make a POINT
E – EXPLAIN that point
E – EVIDENCE/EXAMPLES
C- COMMENT on the evidence (evaluate)
L – LINK the paragraph back to the question
Example:
P – make a POINT
This is how you introduce a paragraph; the point should clearly show your
knowledge and understanding of the main topics within the question.
One reason why women experience social inequality is due to the

expectation that they have the primary responsibility for childcare and any
domestic duties.
E- EXPLAIN the point (by including extra relevant detail)
This is your chance to show that you understand what your point means by
giving some further detail about it. You might even pick up evaluation marks
here!
This often means that women are more likely to be confined to domestic
duties rather than employment. Resulting in less employment opportunities in
comparison to men in the long term.
E – EVIDENCE include examples that relate to your point
You can include more than one example here. This is your chance to show
that you know real examples that support the point you have made.
75% of women have the main responsibility for providing childcare and are
more likely to take time off work to look after their children. Furthermore, 91%
of single parent families are headed by a mother. Single parent families are
twice as likely to live in relative poverty as those with two parents.
C – COMMENT this allows you to evaluate the information you have given in
relation to the question.
This is where you are required to use the evidence you have given by making
a judgement on it, this is evaluation.
Evaluation – involves making a judgement on or determining the

importance or effectiveness of something. Argue and justify that a woman’s
circumstances might mean that they are more likely to experience some
form of inequality.
The impact of this is that women often experience interrupted employment.

They will then have less opportunities to build their skills and earn money. This
will put them at a disadvantage should they choose to apply for promoted
and managerial positions in the future.
L – LINK the evidence given back to the question
To do this you may wish to lift words from the question, this will ensure that
you are answering the question throughout. This part of the paragraph will
also act as a mini conclusion (sub-conclusion) making your final conclusion
easier to write.
This shows that women are disadvantaged in the workplace because of their
domestic duties. This limits their chances of earning a high income in the
future.
Conclusion
Answer the question directly.
 Has gender equality been achieved or not?

 Do women and men truly have the same experiences?
Prove it!
Sum up the arguments you have made in

your link sentences for each paragraph.

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What factors does the passage suggest should be considered in evaluating gender equality?

What factors does the passage suggest should be considered in evaluating gender equality?

How does the passage suggest structuring a response?

How does the passage suggest structuring a response?

Evaluate the view that gender equality has been

Planning the essay - Choosing factors

Allow one paragraph for each of the factors you have

Introductions at Higher level are designed to set the scene

1. Pick out the main topic(s) of the question and give

2. List sentence: Include the main topics as, “ a list

3. Signpost your essay (suggest what your

Overall, due to continuing discrimination in the workplace, gender

Writing the essay

Avoid using any emotive language, e.g: “It is

Avoid referring to yourself, e.g: “In my opinion…”

Avoid using ‘sweeping’ statements, e.g: “All women

Generally, you will pick up marks as follows:

One reason why women experience social inequality is due to the

E- EXPLAIN the point (by including extra relevant detail)

E – EVIDENCE include examples that relate to your point

Evaluation – involves making a judgement on or determining the

The impact of this is that women often experience interrupted employment.

L – LINK the evidence given back to the question

Answer the question directly.

 Has gender equality been achieved or not?

Sum up the arguments you have made in

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