LPE1101 FOUNDATION ENGLISH

SEMESTER 1, 2023/2024

WRITING PORTFOLIO

SUBMISSION CHECKLIST
Form 
Brainstorm Form
Outline Form
Draft Form
Self-editing Form
Final Form

:TENGKU
MUHAMMAD
NAME HAIQAL BIN
TENGKU
NOR IZURI

MATRIC NO. :S35675

GROUP NO. :GROUP 23

INSTRUCTOR :MR WOON

MARKS

PO1
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This is an individual task. Write a five-paragraph opinion essay of at least 350 words based on one of
the themes given.

Themes:

1. Education

2. Technology

3. Money

4. Success

5. Communication

6. Experience

7. Environment

8. Well-being

Instructions:
1. Choose a theme and decide on a topic.
2. Complete the Brainstorm Form and the Outline Form. Submit both forms for instructor’s approval.
3. Write a draft of the essay based on the approved outline.
4. Edit your draft using the Self-editing Form.
5. Improve the essay based on the corrections in the draft.
6. Submit Writing Portfolio in Week 14.

Timeline:

Week Instructions

1. Decide on a topic.
11 2. Complete the Brainstorm Form and Outline Form. Submit the forms for instructor’s
approval.

1. Receive feedback on the forms.

2. Draft your essay.
12 - 13
3. Self-edit your essay using Self-editing Form.
4. Write your final essay.

14 Submit Writing Portfolio

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Brainstorm

Based on the listed themes, choose a theme, and decide on a topic. Read two articles from credible
sources on the chosen topic. Identify the issues in the articles and fill in the form below. Then decide your
stance on the issue.

E.g.: Theme: Education

Topic: Should the government provide free education?

Theme MONEY

Topic MONEY CAN BUY HAPPINESS

For Against

- IT INSURES YOUR FREEDOM AND

AUTONOMY
- ITS LEGAL TENDER
- IT ENSURES YOUR PRIVACY
- ITS INCLUSIVE
- IT HELPS YOU KEEP TRACK OF
YOUR EXPENSES

Stance : For / Against

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Sources : i. GOOGLE

ii. ARTICLE
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Outline
Complete the outline in point form unless mentioned otherwise.

Title : MONEY CAN BUY HAPPINESS .

Thesis statement (complete sentence): Contrary to the belief that money cannot buy happiness, it is a powerful tool that can lead to greater well-being and
contentment, as it provides access to essential needs, reduces stress, and improves overall well-being

Body paragraph 1 Body paragraph 2 Body paragraph 3

↓ ↓ ↓

Topic sentence 1 (complete sentence): We believe Topic sentence 2 (complete sentence): On the other Topic sentence 3 (complete
that money enables individuals to access the hand, financial stability provided by money helps sentences):Subsequently, money can lead to
essential necessities of life, leading to a more alleviate the stress associated with financial improved physical and mental well-being.
comfortable and secure existence. concerns.

Supporting point 1: With sufficient financial Supporting point 2: The absence of monetary worries Supporting point 3: Access to quality
resources, people can afford food, shelter, allows individuals to focus on personal growth, healthcare, fitness facilities, and nutritious
healthcare, and education for themselves and their relationships, and self-fulfillment. food can enhance one's health and overall
families. happiness.

Supporting detail 1: In many parts of the world, lack Supporting detail 2: Studies have shown that financial Supporting detail 3:Adequate financial
of access to these essentials can lead to suffering, stress is a leading cause of anxiety and unhappiness, resources can also provide access to leisure
making money a vital means of ensuring happiness making money's role in reducing stress significant. activities and hobbies that contribute to a
and well-being. more fulfilled and content life.
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Conclusion : In conclusion, the belief that money cannot buy happiness is overly simplistic. While money alone cannot guarantee happiness, it undeniably
plays a pivotal role in providing access to essential needs, reducing stress and improving well-being that contribute to a deeper sense of fulfillment. It is not
the accumulation of wealth itself that brings happiness, but the way in which money is managed and used to create a better life for oneself and others. The
idea that money can buy happiness is not entirely without merit, and its influence on our well-being should not be underestimated .
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Draft

Everyone says, money is not everything, but actually we can't do anything without money. for example, all
our wants and needs require money. When we don't have money, we won't be able to fulfill our own
desires. Money is one of the most important things that we need to have in our lives. However, what I want
to ask is, will you be happy without anything even like the necessary items? Everyone in this world will
definitely say no. this is because everything has to be bought with money in this realistic world. In my
opinion, money can buy happiness, without money we may not be happy.

We believe that money enables individuals to access the essential necessities of life, leading to a more
comfortable and secure existence. With sufficient financial resources, people can afford food, shelter,
healthcare, and education for themselves and their families.
In many parts of the world, lack of access to these essentials can lead to suffering, making money a vital
means of ensuring happiness and well-being.

On the other hand, financial stability provided by money helps alleviate the stress associated with
financial concerns.The absence of monetary worries allows individuals to focus on personal growth,
relationships, and self-fulfillment.Studies have shown that financial stress is a leading cause of anxiety and
unhappiness, making money's role in reducing stress significant.

Subsequently, money can lead to improved physical and mental well-being.Access to quality healthcare,
fitness facilities, and nutritious food can enhance one's health and overall happiness. Adequate financial
resources can also provide access to leisure activities and hobbies that contribute to a more fulfilled and
content life.

In conclusion, the belief that money cannot buy happiness is overly simplistic. While money alone cannot
guarantee happiness, it undeniably plays a pivotal role in providing access to essential needs, reducing
stress and improving well-being that contribute to a deeper sense of fulfillment. It is not the accumulation of
wealth itself that brings happiness, but the way in which money is managed and used to create a better life
for oneself and others. The idea that money can buy happiness is not entirely without merit, and its
influence on our well-being should not be underestimated.
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Self-editing Form

INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH YES NO

Introductory paragraph begins with a suitable introduction.

Introductory paragraph has a thesis statement.

TOPIC SENTENCES YES NO

Topic sentences have clear topics and controlling ideas.

Circle the topics and underline the controlling ideas in the topic sentences.

Topic sentences contain appropriate transition signals such as first, second, etc.
Circle the transition signals.

SUPPORTING POINTS YES NO

Supporting sentences contain relevant points to support the main idea in the topic
sentence.

Supporting sentences develop, clarify and support the topic sentence adequately.

SUPPORTING DETAILS YES NO

Supporting details explain and support the supporting points.

Write the types of supporting details used (facts, examples, quotations, statistics).
Body Paragraph 1: _______________________________________________
Body Paragraph 2: _______________________________________________
Body Paragraph 3: _______________________________________________

CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH YES NO

Concluding paragraph begins with a suitable concluding signal.

Circle the concluding signal.

Concluding paragraph summarises the main ideas of the paragraphs.

Concluding paragraph contains recommendation or call for action (if any).

Concluding paragraph does not contain new ideas.

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ORGANISATION YES NO

All supporting sentences / supporting details explain and are relevant to the main idea.

All sentences provide clear ideas.

Paragraphs flow smoothly from beginning to end with the use of appropriate transition
signals.
Circle/underline the transition signals.

LANGUAGE AND SENTENCE ERRORS YES NO

Correct punctuation, capitalisation and spelling.

Circle/underline errors in the draft (if any).

No language errors (subject-verb agreement, word choice, and tenses).

Circle/underline errors in the draft (if any).

REVISION

The 3 most important changes I have to make to my essay are:

1.

2.

3.
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Final
Everyone says, money is not everything, but actually we can't do anything without money. for example, all
our wants and needs require money. When we don't have money, we won't be able to fulfill our own
desires. Money is one of the most important things that we need to have in our lives. However, what I want
to ask is, will you be happy without anything even like the necessary items? Everyone in this world will
definitely say no. this is because everything has to be bought with money in this realistic world. In my
opinion, money can buy happiness, without money we may not be happy.

We believe that money enables individuals to access the essential necessities of life, leading to a more
comfortable and secure existence. With sufficient financial resources, people can afford food, shelter,
healthcare, and education for themselves and their families.In many parts of the world, lack of access to
these essentials can lead to suffering, making money a vital means of ensuring happiness and well-being.

On the other hand, financial stability provided by money helps alleviate the stress associated with
financial concerns.The absence of monetary worries allows individuals to focus on personal growth,
relationships, and self-fulfillment.Studies have shown that financial stress is a leading cause of anxiety and
unhappiness, making money's role in reducing stress significant.

Subsequently, money can lead to improved physical and mental well-being.Access to quality healthcare,
fitness facilities, and nutritious food can enhance one's health and overall happiness. Adequate financial
resources can also provide access to leisure activities and hobbies that contribute to a more fulfilled and
content life.

In conclusion, the belief that money cannot buy happiness is overly simplistic. While money alone cannot
guarantee happiness, it undeniably plays a pivotal role in providing access to essential needs, reducing
stress and improving well-being that contribute to a deeper sense of fulfillment. It is not the accumulation of
wealth itself that brings happiness, but the way in which money is managed and used to create a better life
for oneself and others. The idea that money can buy happiness is not entirely without merit, and its
influence on our well-being should not be underestimated.

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