Pre-writing

Topic:
This story is all about mother’s love
Title:
The loving mother
Audience:
A perfect story for those children that appreciated the love of their mother
Purpose:
My purpose is to tell my audience that:
 Always love your mother, because you never get another.
 Always show them how much you love them
 Always remember that the mother’s tears is the most painful sight in this
world.
 DRAFTING

There was a 16 years old boy named Tris, he don’t have a siblings since he
never had a chance to meet his father.
When he is asking about his father, Melany, his mother give him an exact
answer. At first, Tris is contented and okay with this but not until he came home from
school at 5:30 PM with a heavy heart, because someone told him that he is a unlucky
son for not meeting and not even seeing his father in person. he can hear the voice of
her mother calling him for their dinner but he remained silent, On the other hand Milany
decided that he should look for his son to its bedroom, she saw Tris sitting at the edge
of its bed with a shaking shoulder due to its cry.
Milany asked his son, what is wrong ,Tris decided that he should tell his
problem to his mother, while Milany is listening trail of tears fall down to her checks. Tris
told his mom that he badly want to see and meet his father in person, a single tears
make its way down again, Milany wipe it quickly as she can so his son want see it.at the
end, Milany found her self waving a hand to his son.
Milany cried so hard and she feels like her chist is tightening, Tris said he will
come back as soon as he can.she just think of this before she comfort her own self.
A day pass by, Milany miss his son badly as it hurts, she cried again but her
cry turns out to be jobs when she saw her son standing there at their door way with a
tears misting its eyes.
Tris realized when he is away that he can’t live without his Mother’s embrace
and loving presence. He met his father, with its new family how much he want to stay
mind and heart keeps saying that he much want to see and be with his loving mother.
 Revising
The loving mother

There was a 16 years old boy named Tris, he don’t have a siblings since he never had a
chance to meeting his father.
When she is asking about his father, Melany, his mother give him an exact
answer. At first, Tris is contented and okay with this but not until he came home from
school at 5:30 PM with a heavy heart, because someone tell him that he is a unlucky
son for not meeting and not even seeing his father in person. he can hear the voice of
her mother calling him for their dinner but he remained silent, On the other hand Milany
decided that he should look for his son to its bedroom, she saw Tris sitting at the edge
of its bed with a shaking shoulder due to its cry.
Milany asked his son, what is wrong ,Tris decided that he should tell his
problem to his mother, while Milany is listening trail of tears fall down to her checks. Tris
told his mother that he badly want to seeing and meet his father in person, a single
tears made its way down again, Milany wipe it quickly as she can so his son want see
it.at the end, Milany found her self waving a hand to his son.
Milany cried so hard and she feels like her chist is tightening, Tris said he will
come back as soon as he can.she just think of this before she comfort her own self.
A day pass by, Milany miss his son badly as it hurts, she cried again but her
cry turns out to be jobs when she saw her son standing there at their door way with a
tears misting its eyes.
“Mom…”Tris said.
“Mom, I can’t bear another day without you.” Milany hug her son as Tris tightly
Give a hug too.
“I’m sorry mom, I leave you her all alone . I’m sorry” Milany shussed her son
as she caress its smooth hair.
“Don’t be, you are have now that’s what the important. I love you son.”
“I love you too, mom. Thank you for understanding me…”
“Anything for you, Tris. Anything…
Tris realized when he is away that he can’t living a day without his mother’s embrace
abd loving presence. He met his dad along with its family, how much he want to stay his
mind and hear keeps saying that he much want to see and be with his mom.
 Publishing

There was a 16 years old boy named Tris, he don’t have a siblings since he never had a
chance to meet his father.
When he is asking about his father, Melany, his mother give him an exact
answer. At first, Tris is contented and okay with this but not until he came home from
school at 5:30 PM with a heavy heart, because someone told him that he is a unlucky
son for not meeting and not even seeing his father in person. he can hear the voice of
her mother calling him for their dinner but he remained silent, On the other hand Milany
decided that he should look for his son to its bedroom, she saw Tris sitting at the edge
of its bed with a shaking shoulder due to its cry.
Milany asked his son, what is wrong ,Tris decided that he should tell his
problem to his mother, while Milany is listening trail of tears fall down to her checks. Tris
told his mom that he badly want to see and meet his father in person, a single tears
make its way down again, Milany wipe it quickly as she can so his son want see it.at the
end, Milany found her self waving a hand to his son.
Milany cried so hard and she feels like her chist is tightening, Tris said he will
come back as soon as he can.she just think of this before she comfort her own self.
A day pass by, Milany miss his son badly as it hurts, she cried again but her
cry turns out to be jobs when she saw her son standing there at their door way with a
tears misting its eyes.
“Mom…”Tris said.
“Mom, I can’t bear another day without you.” Milany hug her son as Tris tightly
Give a hug too.
“I’m sorry mom, I leave you her all alone . I’m sorry” Milany shussed her son
as she caress its smooth hair.
“Don’t be, you are have now that’s what the important. I love you son.”
“I love you too, mom. Thank you for understanding me…”
“Anything for you, Tris. Anything…
Tris realized when he is away that he can’t live a day without his mother’s embrace abd
loving presence. He met his Father along with its family, how much he want to stay his
mind and hear keeps saying that he much want to see and be with his mother.
 Editing

There was a 16 years old boy named Tris, he don’t have a siblings since he never had a
chance to meet his father.
When he he is asking about his father, Melany, his mother give him an exact
answer. At first, Tris is contented and ok with this but not until he came home from
school at 5:30 PM with a heavy heart, because someone told him that he is a unlucky
son for not meeting and not even seeing his father in in person. he can hear the voice of
of her mother calling him for their dinner but he remained silent, On the other hand
Milany decided that he should look for his son to to its bedroom, she saw Tris sitting at
the edge of its bed with a shaking shoulder due to its cry,
Milany asked his son, what is wrong ,Tris decided that he should tell his
problem to his mother, while Milany is listening trail of tears fall down to her checks. Tris
told his mom that he badly want to see and meet his father in person, a single tears
make its way down again, Milany wipe it quickly as she can so his son want see it.at the
end, Milany found her self waving a hand to his son.
Milany cried so hard and she feels like her chist is tightening, Tris said he will
come back as soon as he can.she just think of this before she comfort her own self.
A day pass by, Milany miss his son badly as it hurts, she cried again but her
cry turns out to be jobs when she saw her son standing there at at their door way with a
tears misting its eyes.
“Mom…”Tris said;
“Mom, I can’t bear another day without you.” Milany hug her son as Tris tightly
Give a hug too.
“I’m sorry mom, I leave you her all alone . I’m sorry” Milany shussed her son
as she caress its smooth hair,
“Don’t be, you are have now that’s what the important. I love you son.”
“I love you too, mom. Thank you for understanding me…”
“Anything for you, Tris. Anything…
Tris realized when he is is away that he can’t live a day without his mother’s embrace
abd loving presence. He met his her Father along with its family, how much he want to
stay his mind and hear keeps saying that he much want to to see and be with his
mother.,,